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explaining something

what if we are not a drop in the ocean we are needles in haystacks pricking fingers of those we should bleed with then we fall asleep for 100 years and find them again on a wavelength we tune into for a millisecond then fall into the seemingly endless void and fingertips touch to shock into life with flashes of connection we can't make sense of the paint is under my nails but I wasn't there I see it now it's synaptic blue and red on a frequency I teeter on in a parallel dream and if a tear rolls down my face it creates a track that leads me elsewhere maybe I am a drop in the ocean and the ocean is waiting for me

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I Am Anaya

Date: 8/27/2024 11:00:00 AM

Belated Congratulations on potd, DD (gothic girl)! Erm, what David Radice said is brilliant! Cheers :)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2024 11:09:00 AM

Thank you Anaya, I appreciate all your enthusiasm and support x

Ink Empress

Date: 8/27/2024 4:42:00 AM

What a sincere and heartfelt poem again dear dd, everyday, i feel this“ maybe I am a drop in the ocean and the ocean is waiting for me” as i gaze out my window… so beautiful what youv expressed here with wordplay that goes so well with the concept of the poem. Brilliant! Congratulations on POTD. Well deserved

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2024 5:00:00 AM

It would be wonderful if you could post a view from your window on a poem - it'll be a world away from many of ours! I've been to the Maldives several times and it is exquisitely beautiful :) thank you for your kind words x

Brandy Nicole

Date: 8/26/2024 6:20:00 PM

' Maybe I am a drop in the ocean, and the ocean is waiting for me. ' A beautiful thought. I'm seeing this in a spiritual way. Everyone being connected. Your thoughts always leave me in awe, Dilly. Congratulations on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2024 4:58:00 AM

Thank you so much Brandy for your sweet comment. It is spiritual in the main, just hard to verbalise :)

Gary Radice

Date: 8/26/2024 12:16:00 PM

If this poem was a film I reckon David Lynch would step forward to direct it. His work often challenges conventional narrative structures, is abstract in nature and provokes analysis..just like this winning work. :) Congrats on POTD. Cheers - Gary

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 2:01:00 PM

I'm not sure there's enough meat on the bones for David Lynch lol - maybe in his Twin Peaks era. I just checked out some of his paintings (googled him to check there weren't two and discovered he's also an artist) - quite intense stuff! Hey the comparison and explanation work for me though - thank you for creative commentary :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/26/2024 10:02:00 AM

Very awesome, DD. Wonderfully written with fresh, creative imagery and word use! Congrats and high fives on your POTD where the tracks of your tears lead you to new highs and new adventures. Have been enjoying your ekphrasis! Blessings

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 11:25:00 AM

Thank you Sam, always an encouraging comment from yourself and very welcome. There's certainly no shortage of ekphrasis on my page :) it'll keep you busy til Christmas :)

Benjamin Bartley

Date: 8/26/2024 9:37:00 AM

Very dreamy. Congrats on your POTD.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:53:00 AM

Thank you, appreciated

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/26/2024 8:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. A powerful write. You are making us think/that is a good thing. Love your ending. Maybe we are a drop. Have a blessed day writing away...................

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:53:00 AM

It's worth a bit of thought then we should all get back to the real world! Thanks for your kind words x

Daisy Meadows

Date: 8/26/2024 8:32:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD. Well done.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:52:00 AM

Thank you Daisy, appreciated

Arlo Parker

Date: 8/26/2024 8:21:00 AM

Ooooh, delve into this piece and find...something! Provocative words initiate pondering moments. POTD says it all. Congrats, DD. :o))

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:52:00 AM

Stay safe in there :) thank you for your kind words

Lin Lane

Date: 8/26/2024 7:20:00 AM

Dilly, even if you were just a drop in the ocean, you'd be the one going against the flow... doing your own thing. You should be read more often and potd will see to that.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:51:00 AM

Thank you for the encouragement Lin, we'll see. I think it only really makes a difference the first time. I appreciate you stopping by x

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 8/26/2024 6:29:00 AM

Dear DD, Congratulations on your POTD. I really enjoyed reading about the isolation and connections that you have artistically inked. I agree there are wonderful moments that give us hope of something greater. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:43:00 AM

Thank you Daniel - sometimes something insignificant can seem quite powerful and then we all drift back into routines - interesting to ponder. Thanks for your detailed comment, always appreciated

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 8/26/2024 6:24:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD. This is an interesting poem in an unique style.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:42:00 AM

Thank you Hilda, I appreciate your regular kind words x

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 8/26/2024 6:19:00 AM

Congratulations Ms. Dilly on this POTD. I liked your reference to the teetering frequency of a parallel dream" in this philosophical penning.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:41:00 AM

Thank you Nancy - I just let my mind wander a bit and one thing led to another. Glad you liked it x

Joseph May

Date: 8/26/2024 5:22:00 AM

Very nicely crafted, Congrats on POTD

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:41:00 AM

Thank you Joseph

Jan Allison

Date: 8/26/2024 3:50:00 AM

thought provoking piece Dilly, you have such a unique style and I love it! many congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:40:00 AM

Well I love enthusiasm like that Jan! Thank you :D

Tania Kitchin

Date: 8/26/2024 3:35:00 AM

Dilly, life is a mystery, a great poem. Congratulations on POTD.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:40:00 AM

It can be unfathomable at times - thanks for the kind words

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/26/2024 3:20:00 AM

Deep, soulful musings here, DD ~ keep going and tell us more! Warmest congratulations on POTD

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:23:00 AM

It's exciting to think that potentially we could bridge the gap and have a revelation but it's a space that chucks you out as quick as you get your foot in the door. Thank you for your kind words :)

Karen Jones

Date: 8/26/2024 1:46:00 AM

Deep and uniquely beautiful DD congratulations on your potd honor!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:19:00 AM

Thank you Karen, so pleased you enjoyed it x

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 8/26/2024 1:36:00 AM

A profound write D, and a well earned potd, great lines, great concepts and philosophy

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:19:00 AM

Glad you like it, I appreciate your kind words (as a fellow free thinker) :)

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/26/2024 1:32:00 AM

If we were a drop in the ocean we’d sink or swim, interesting thoughts on life Dilly. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:14:00 AM

Or would/could we retain our sense of self or would we merge with the greater body of water? Thanks for your kind words

Silent One

Date: 8/26/2024 1:06:00 AM

Congrats on POTD... An excellent poem..

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:15:00 AM

Thank you, appreciated

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/26/2024 12:55:00 AM

Well looks like you were explaining something after all Dilly, more than a drop in the ocean, or indeed a needle in a haystack, back with congratulations on a more than deserving POTD, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:12:00 AM

I'll pass the baton to you now David - you can decipher if we're all asleep with occasional REM or tumbling stones with sentience etc. the answer doesn't feel like we all have office jobs and shop in supermarkets lol thanks for your words of support

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/26/2024 12:55:00 AM

Quite a thought provoking verse Dilly, congratulations to you on the honour of POTD. Tom

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 11:23:00 AM

Haha a photo finish - you both have GMT edge on getting here first :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/26/2024 9:30:00 AM

I have to share the thanks with David, just noticed we both hit the send button at 12.55.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/26/2024 9:06:00 AM

Thank you Tom - poems like this just bounce off of things I see or hear, obviously credit required for Sleeping Beauty who let me borrow a word or two. Thank you for your kind words (and for alerting me to POTD status) :)

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/24/2024 6:46:00 AM

Explaining something that goes beyond everyday reality is extremely difficult to pinpoint Dilly, but as always you find a way, yes we are all a drop in the eternal ocean, but an integral part of it too through our consciousness, which is possibly eternal in itself, just waiting to be shocked back into a parallel state, you’re on the cusp again, deep pondering cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/24/2024 9:58:00 AM

I did feel onto something but as with these things the trail of thought peters out before the revelation occurs - I think I need wiring up to a machine and the thoughts plucked out before I can forget them haha. Perhaps it all needs to spill out like algebra but in word form and the baton of understanding has to move through from person to person or another theory is I've just had too many cakes haha :)

Silent One

Date: 8/24/2024 2:35:00 AM

Rumi said we are a drop in the ocean... we were not born to live in water though... but sadness can metaphorically take us anywhere....This really deep introspection and I can feel you emotions in this one... I know it is raining in the UK, but I hope the sun will come out later...

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/24/2024 9:53:00 AM

The rain only fell when I was inside and it's been bright and sunny. I think I write with emotion rather than thought - it's a strange process. Thanks for your comment