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Duel

The heady scent of summer nights glorify a lady much adored; musky premonitions of an unrequited love, a passion much too deep to be ignored. All-consuming frenzy, reason does not rule his fevered mind. She has said: 'No more!' yet he won't accept her condemnation, won't endure a heartache that would cut him to the core. Magnolias fill the air with the fragrance of desire; two men at odds, emotions frayed, yet resolute. Two shots resound through morning's early light, one man lies dead, the other's hopes lie mute.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 12/11/2008 2:55:00 PM
Excellent excellent! I think you may be right..you're luck I can't reach you to tickle you. I will change immanent to imminent. Thanks for keeping me honest
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Date: 12/9/2008 1:03:00 PM
Wow! Rating this a 20 off the scale! Felt like I just watched a movie. Incredible write encompassing a whole gamut of story and emotion. You are one excellent poet! Love, Shar
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Date: 12/7/2008 4:00:00 AM
Wow, what a vivid image you have painted here, amazing - it has love, death, passion guns, flowers...awesome - what more could you ask of a poem? Love, Kristin
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Date: 12/7/2008 3:25:00 AM
Hi Keith, Powerful message delivered in this sensational piece of writng. Loved it. lainie
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Date: 12/6/2008 8:03:00 PM
A tragic but beautifully written poem. I love the diveristy of your work. I thought about your poem Ghost after I read this. I thought maybe this is how he died. The Beast Pt.1 was written a few years ago. Pt.2 is new as it is part of the new attitude I am trying to adopt. Love Robin
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Date: 12/6/2008 2:10:00 PM
intersting, write the 4th set of 4 lines Keith, repeat the 1st line in numeric sequence in each group of 4..or just let it be interesting and Rhyme
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Date: 12/6/2008 12:53:00 PM
Original idea for a poem. Good work. BG
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Date: 12/6/2008 11:49:00 AM
What a sad end to a love affair. Well told. Thak you Keith for your comments on my poem "Love Suffices". Joyce
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Date: 12/6/2008 11:20:00 AM
Keith. Duel..what a sad poem. What extent humans will go to for love. As for me, childhood abuse took much from me...and I cannot make the white curtains, but I do love life. I have seen it at its worst, and its best. Thanks for your comments, Keith. Love you poem. Patricia
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Date: 12/6/2008 9:28:00 AM
Wonderfully written portrait of a duel. I love the magnolias reference, as the magnolia is my favorite tree, and I've always felt it possesses timelessness and deep mystery. ~Juliane
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