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It's instantaneous The moment your feet touch the white way That faint rumble Distant drone You're drawn instantly! A child again Always a child The music - A discordant eerie heavy dance What with rattles and shrieks at side - Is always away Close to the fence Lest you wander straight Straight in the direction Mesmerized Oh how inconsequential IT tries to be! Organ thick Hid behind a mirrored wall Where paint-sploch horses rise and fall That might haunt Charles Ives A thing - you can call it else - so separate Existence all alone so dominant You wonder how the park survives Watching Watching it round Each horse each each rider clown Memorized The rocking thing goes on it seems FOREVER! Till the molten chords so saturate Your body mind very soul in dream state Then Blessedly Old brakes grind rasp As though in dying breath Its passengers alight And you think....... "Here am I so far advanced so wise But maybe just one ride" Then you realize your son has your hand Pulling you aside

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Date: 7/12/2010 6:55:00 PM
Oh, another marvelous one. I hit a jackpot with the two I found tonight! Luv , Andrea
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Date: 1/7/2010 2:42:00 PM
Thank you for transporting me to a magical ride in a day gone-bye. Lainie
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Date: 1/6/2010 6:28:00 AM
Oh Daver this a most fabulous write!!! Miss you so. Happy wonderful new year my friend and congrats on your awesome feature. So happy to hear from you and so thoughtful of you to stop by. All the best. Hugs, shar xoxo
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Date: 1/5/2010 3:58:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week on the Soup, Daver!! Thank you for reading and commenting on my poems. I truly appreciate your kindness and your encouragement! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 1/5/2010 8:50:00 AM
Many congratulations on your fine poetry being featured this week Daver, Happy New Year to you >> James
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Date: 1/4/2010 5:32:00 PM
The choppy rhythm works well. Another honor for this well written poem. Congratulations on having it featured. Keep on writing. Wishing you continued success. Karen
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Date: 1/4/2010 8:28:00 AM
No roller coasters for me anymore!! However, I have never gotten too old to ride a carousel!! I am still drawn to them, and no bench seat for me!!! I want to ride a mighty steed!! What a wonderful childhood memory this brings, and may we never grow up, dear Daver!!! :) Congratulations on another chance to let us read this gem! Love, Carrie
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Date: 1/4/2010 3:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Daver. May you have may more. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/29/2009 5:09:00 PM
Thanks for your kind congrats on my feature Daver. Congrats to you on making through the first round. Good luck! hugs to you! love, shar xoxo
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Date: 9/26/2009 10:44:00 AM
Daver, congratulations on making the first round of the contest...Raul
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Date: 9/25/2009 12:20:00 PM
Congratulations on making it through the first round in the contest. Good luck in the finals! Way to Go! Karen
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Date: 9/25/2009 6:51:00 AM
Daver,..congratulations on your first round entry Sir on an awesome poem ! james
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Date: 9/25/2009 3:58:00 AM
BIG congratulations Daver! This is a fantastic poem, and most deserving of recognition
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Date: 9/24/2009 6:52:00 PM
Congratulations on winning the first round on the finals! Laura :) Great poem!
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Date: 9/24/2009 5:33:00 PM
Dave, my dear. So nice to see you here. Another masterpiece of writing. Best wishes through to the next round. Love, Lainie
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Date: 9/24/2009 3:35:00 PM
Congratulations on making it through the first round of the Soup contest! This is a delight...so glad to have a chance to read it again! Continued good luck! Love, Carrie
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Date: 9/24/2009 1:45:00 PM
Congrats!! Love Light Truth Patricia
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Date: 9/24/2009 12:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your round-one victory, Daver. Great poem that shows your character! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/24/2009 11:48:00 AM
Daver, congratulations in getting past round one of the competition, all the best Buddy >> James
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Date: 9/24/2009 9:54:00 AM
Daver,congratulations on your poem making it through the first round.Wishing you the best in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/29/2009 10:57:00 AM
Ah, is that Mr Riley who keeps the hotel? :-) Very cool. I like how you were whisked away and your son pulls you back.
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Date: 1/27/2009 12:02:00 PM
Hi there Daver! This is wonderfully well conceived. From the images, and the sounds this piece creates, I'm not sure if I'd like to take another ride..feels sort of spooky. A amazing piece, Daver! Very inspiring to me...I know I'd better start writing something more serious...I've been writing Mikki O,,O rhymes, but still find them fun.:) Best to you and yours...God's blessing to you all! love, Mikki
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Date: 1/23/2009 2:14:00 PM
Daver, this is such a nice poem...I think I'll go forr just one ride. BG
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Date: 1/23/2009 1:33:00 PM
This is indeed eerie. Somehow though for me, carousels, like clowns, always creeped me out a little too much. Is it the music, the painted horses faces - and what is that heaviness and pull that always draws us in and mesmerizes? You are onto something Daver, another incredible write. Love, Shar
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