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Brief- Dancing Daffodils

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Xanthic daffodils with golden trumpets blowing dancers in the wind If I listen carefully I hear you heralding Spring Kim’s color Splash Contest Sponsored by Kim Rodrigues 07-04-17

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John Hamilton

Date: 7/15/2017 7:52:00 PM

This is really good Jan, I like the breaking up of the tanka into two parts, more dramatic, it seems. Congrats on another win!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 7:55:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Kevin Shaw

Date: 7/15/2017 5:36:00 PM

Hello Jan, this is definitely a winner, wonderful colourful words and a great graphic to go with it, kind regards Kevin x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 5:42:00 PM

Thanks so much Kevin:-) hugs Jan xx

Alyssa Lorette

Date: 7/15/2017 11:32:00 AM

Great poem, Jan! Congrats on getting 7th place! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 11:33:00 AM

Many thanks Alyssa I was delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 7/15/2017 6:33:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 11:33:00 AM

Many thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/14/2017 9:05:00 PM

And how lovely the image that goes with your poem! I could only imagine it with your words. Congrats on you fine win, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 5:33:00 AM

Thanks Kim I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Janxxx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 7/9/2017 8:26:00 PM

They do dance...best of luck with the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2017 5:33:00 AM

thanks so much ML:-) hugs Jan xx

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 7/8/2017 9:35:00 AM

I was already looking forward to spring, now my heart aches.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2017 10:26:00 AM

Aww Scott I love the transition of the seasons and the uplifting colours of spring after the dull winter days :-) hugs Jan xx

Shirley Rebstock

Date: 7/7/2017 7:28:00 PM

Love this and love daffodils

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2017 10:27:00 AM

Me too Shirley:-) hugs Jan xx

Lisa Ricci

Date: 7/7/2017 6:46:00 AM

Good Morning Jan. How beautiful the theme words and imagery. Wonderful work with the tanka. Best of luck with the contest. May this day find you well.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2017 7:29:00 AM

Oh Lisa it is a joy to see you here I read your wonderful poems but cannot comment at the moment. I am fine and hope you are too:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/6/2017 11:48:00 PM

wow, one of the best in the contest,Jan and this picture to go with it is amazing. Soupmail.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2017 2:21:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) It's a re-write of my heavenly herald haiku. I was so disappointed I had to withdraw my original poem as it was a pretty tanka but not right for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/5/2017 8:02:00 AM

Heavenly dear, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 11:54:00 AM

Not as beautiful as your roof garden!:-) hugs jan xx

Probir Gupta

Date: 7/5/2017 6:54:00 AM

Lovely ...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 11:54:00 AM

Thanks Probir:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 7/5/2017 6:44:00 AM

This was beautiful Jan and will do well in Kim's contest. This feels soft and inviting. Nicely done.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 11:53:00 AM

There are few places Chris as it's a premiere contest but I wrote poems in the end and am happy if I am creative and don't place:-) hugs Jan xx

Arturo Michael

Date: 7/5/2017 5:01:00 AM

I enjoyed this one... Thank you

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 11:53:00 AM

Thanks Arturo:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/5/2017 1:28:00 AM

An awesome tanka, Jan, and that picture is perfect:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 2:50:00 AM

Cheers Jo:-) I was disappointed my first poem wasn't right for the contest brief but I am delighted with the way this turned out. It's based on an old haiku I wrote called Heavenly Herald:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Bell

Date: 7/5/2017 1:13:00 AM

Hi Jan, this is so refreshing and creative, I like it - Mike

Jan Allison
Date: 7/5/2017 2:49:00 AM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 7/4/2017 3:58:00 PM

Hi Jan , lovely Tanka , good luck in contest :)))hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 3:59:00 PM

Cheers Niall now if only the weather was that good I could do with some golden sunshine in my life:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/4/2017 2:01:00 PM

- This is gorgeous, Jan - Love it - GL - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 2:04:00 PM

aww thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 7/4/2017 12:55:00 PM

This is beautiful Jan... great write

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 1:02:00 PM

Tanks Jospeh I was so disappointed my original poem didn't fit the brief and I used my heavenly herald poem as inspiration for this poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 7/4/2017 12:28:00 PM

A beautiful tanka that needed no added imagery, but your gif sure makes it come alive. Good write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 12:29:00 PM

Cheers Lin I do appreciate all your support my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/4/2017 12:28:00 PM

Awesome Jan...love the pic too

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 12:31:00 PM

Cheer Tim:-) I always vowed i wouldn't use the picture facility BUT I had to eat my words as I feel it can enhance a poem and of course the sponsor doesn't see it when they judge the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/4/2017 12:24:00 PM

So poetic, Jan. Wonderful tanka:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 12:28:00 PM

Thanks DT:-) hugs jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 7/4/2017 12:22:00 PM

Very nice, Jan. There is nothing like the daffodil to herald spring. Good luck in the Contest. // Barry.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 12:28:00 PM

Cheers Barry I wrote a haiku called 'heavenly herald' and used that to inspire this poem:-) hugs jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 7/4/2017 12:19:00 PM

Magnificent tanka, Jan! If I recall, xanthic is a yellow? Best of luck with this beauty

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2017 12:27:00 PM

Thanks WW :-) yes Xanthic is yellow - I am sorry my original poem didn't fit the brief but I'm happy with this one:-) hugs jan xx