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At the Pawn Shop

‘Dear John, I’m leaving you,’ she wrote. ‘And, oh, I’ve pawned your watch and coat.’ For Susan’s Pawn Shop contest

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Casarah Nance

Date: 5/12/2014 11:26:00 AM

lol simple and humorous, not a letter I would have like to get get. good job :)

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/11/2013 6:56:00 PM

ha! you've captured so much in these two little lines - great poem! congrats on your first place win!

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 7/9/2013 8:32:00 PM

A heart shattered by two simple sentences......well done! Congrats on a super write and win. Hugs

Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/9/2013 3:35:00 PM

God,,, how we all do that sometimes ;} congrats on your win ;}

Seosamh De Burca

Date: 7/9/2013 9:25:00 AM

Congrats on your win with your clever and humorous poem

Constance La France

Date: 7/9/2013 7:30:00 AM

Jack, this is wonderful, so much said in a few lines, congratulations on your big win, love Constance

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 7/9/2013 6:28:00 AM

Jack I remember reading this and thought it was very cleverly done and put a smile on my face. Congratulations on your outstanding win. Well deserved I must say. Warm Smiles Connie

Skat A

Date: 7/9/2013 12:45:00 AM

hello Jack, your poem is very entertaining in just 2 lines...hope you got the pawn ticket..... SKAT

Goodness Lanre

Date: 7/8/2013 10:05:00 PM

Aww! Thats heart breaking. Congrats on ur win.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/8/2013 8:40:00 PM

I loved finding this at the top. Love, Joyce

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/8/2013 7:05:00 PM

Laughing! congrats on your win. BG

Judy Konos

Date: 7/8/2013 4:25:00 PM

KQQL JACK,,,,,KQQL

Robert Pettit

Date: 7/8/2013 3:49:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jack!

Elaine George

Date: 7/8/2013 3:22:00 PM

A few words that speak volumes. Congrats on your first place win Jack. One number one pick too. Elaine

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/8/2013 3:09:00 PM

Hello Jack, a might fun theme... congratulations in the pawn shop contest...xox~ LINDA

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/8/2013 2:42:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/8/2013 2:16:00 PM

This is a lesson........short is better !! And.........don't mess with the little woman!!! LOL !!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/8/2013 8:38:00 AM

Sometimes less is more as is evidenced by this gem. Congrats.

Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/8/2013 7:52:00 AM

Jack, wonderful couplet with great wit and twist... congrats on your well deserved win :)

Audrey Haick

Date: 7/6/2013 8:28:00 PM

A very good Couplet, Jack. A "Dear John" letter that is to the point...sometimes is a blessing in disguise. I know this wll be on the Winners' List as it deserves to be. x Annalise

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/5/2013 10:56:00 PM

there you are being clever again and doing one little couplet. but it packs a WHOLLOP. Hope Susan adores it.

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/5/2013 7:44:00 PM

Ha ha, this is such a humorous write, but very true in many aspects in people's lives...in one form or another! I truly loved reading this amazing poem this evening! What an outstanding piece, Great Work!!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/5/2013 6:43:00 PM

Love the humor in this cute poem. Sadly to say it can happen easily. Made me smile. love phyl

John Posey

Date: 7/5/2013 5:54:00 PM

Nice one, Jack... I wish you well in the contest..... Jake

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 7/5/2013 5:13:00 PM

Good one, a little humor. It made me smile. Warm Smiles, Connie