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A CLOSER LOOK

You look but do not see The true worth and value of me You just see an old man An empty battered can Not the strength l possess Nor the life l was blessed Love l gave , love l received The accomplishments l achieved My body is aged and frail Though my mind and spirit still prevail Look closely as l am still here I have not vanished nor disappeared Don’t look through me as if l don’t exist Ageism and ignorance resist Lets chat ,share life ,have a laugh I may be old but l am certainly not daft!

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/19/2023 3:53:00 AM

Oh, the ages have much to give…we need to lean in for as long as possible because once they are gone so are their stories except we hold onto them. I love my dad more than ever. How I cherish him. God bless and congratulations on POTD!

Deb M
Date: 10/19/2023 8:08:00 AM

Indeed we do Kim….thankyou so much! Debx

Lisa Ricci

Date: 10/13/2023 11:46:00 AM

Hello Deb. This entry is very meaningful with much value and thus deserving of the POTD. Thank you for sharing your poetic talent. May this day find you well. Have a wonderful weekend. Blessings always (smile)

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 4:00:00 AM

Thankyou so much Lisa…. I always enjoy your thoughts my friend! Debx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/12/2023 4:10:00 PM

What an amazing poem from the voice and soul of a person overlooked because of age!!! Indeed, "not daft!" Each line flows so effortlessly from the previous line - like a poetic waterfall! Congratulations on your POTD! Blessings to you. Gratitude for this perceptive poem that sees that every person has much to share.

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 3:59:00 AM

Wow Sam what a lovely gracious comment which l so appreciate! You are very kind…..thankyou Debx

Mike Gentile

Date: 10/12/2023 11:40:00 AM

Words that I certainly relate too Deb! Beautifully stated and crafted in such poetic balance that it was destined for POTD!! I love it! Congratulations xxoo

Deb M
Date: 10/16/2023 3:57:00 AM

Such a sweet comment Mike….thankyou so much! Debx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/11/2023 9:38:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading it again. Have a blessed day writing away....................

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:16:00 AM

Thankyou Paula…l appreciate that! Debx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/11/2023 2:14:00 AM

Big congratulations to you Deb on the honour of POTD. Safe travels. Tom

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:04:00 AM

Cheers Sir Tom….Debx

Karen Jones

Date: 10/11/2023 12:27:00 AM

Great message in your poem Deb! Congrats on potd!

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:04:00 AM

Cheers Karen….Debx

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 10/11/2023 12:00:00 AM

Brilliant poem. Well said!!! Congratulations on your POTD.

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:04:00 AM

Thanks Jeanette…Debx

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/10/2023 9:11:00 PM

Deb, there's so much truth within this tender and emotional poem you've created. It seems age defines who we are and how others look at us. Your last thought brought a smile. Trying to stay sane, for as long as I can. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 8:03:00 AM

Thankyou lovely Brandy! Debx

R J. Elless

Date: 10/10/2023 5:48:00 PM

Not Daft at all. Congratulations on Your POTD. Stay Creative

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 2:22:00 AM

Thankyou RJ….appreciate your kind words! Debx

Shirley Hawkins

Date: 10/10/2023 4:26:00 PM

Congratulations, Deb, on POTD, a very deserved win. Your poetry gets better and better. Look after yourself, Old Duck XX

Deb M
Date: 10/12/2023 2:20:00 AM

Shirley you are and have been my biggest supporter and l am so appreciative of that my beautiful caring friend….but you know that! Debx

Jan Allison

Date: 10/10/2023 1:36:00 PM

you certainly hit the nail on the head with this one Deb i especially loved the final stanza, many congrats on POTD:-) hugs jan xx

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 1:48:00 PM

Thankyou lovely Jan!! Debx

Mona Ebel

Date: 10/10/2023 10:45:00 AM

That is a beautiful to ask for the validation you so deserve. There will be no wine before it's time, and the reserves are always saved for special occasions. Smile

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 1:05:00 PM

Hi Mona….thank you so much for your comment…appreciated! Debx

Warren Doll

Date: 10/10/2023 9:51:00 AM

Deb, very wise and true, Congratulations on POTD~ Warren

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 10:33:00 AM

Hey Warren…nice to see you and thankyou! Debx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/10/2023 9:23:00 AM

Deb, congratulations on POTD, enjoyed!

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 9:30:00 AM

Thankyou Tania….appreciate your comment! Debx

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 10/10/2023 9:10:00 AM

There may be wrinkles on an elderly face, but beneath the skin there’s beauty and grace. Lovely poem Deb, congratulations on receiving the award for poem of the day… Belle

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 9:19:00 AM

Thankyou so much Belle! Debx

Lin Lane

Date: 10/10/2023 8:25:00 AM

I knew I'd be back for this one. Happy Poem of the Day for you, Deb.

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 8:36:00 AM

Thankyou sweet Lin! Debx

Joseph May

Date: 10/10/2023 7:45:00 AM

Seniors are cast aside in some countries but in others they are honored, as they should be, Congrats on POTD Deb

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 7:57:00 AM

Cheers Joseph! Debx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/10/2023 7:23:00 AM

Gosh, when I look at you and see an old man, I think of myself as an old woman who really needs an updated prescription for new lenses BADLY! lol. Congrats on POTD, Deb! ~ BB King

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 7:26:00 AM

Hehe did l ever say l was a woman NEVER haha!! I will leave it at that BB!! Debx

Bill Baker

Date: 10/10/2023 6:56:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD, Deb! A message that needs to be heard just like the older people need to be seen. Thanks for sharing from your wonderful heart, my dear friend. Hugs, Bill

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 6:57:00 AM

You're welcome Bill hehe! Thanks….Debx

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/10/2023 6:30:00 AM

So many countries honor and respect their elders, and who remain a part of the family. Fun write Deb. Congratulations on POTD! :)

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 6:57:00 AM

Thanks L.O….appreciate your comment! Debx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/10/2023 5:35:00 AM

BIG congrats on POTD, Deb. A potent message my friend. Enjoy your special day today.

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 6:56:00 AM

Thanks my friend….appreciate that! Debx

Charles Messina

Date: 10/10/2023 3:47:00 AM

I always make it a point to converse with the elder- nobody likes to be left in the dark or ignored. Very touching, Deb. Congratulations on being rewarded with POTD! Charliex

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 3:49:00 AM

Cheers Charlie….Debx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/10/2023 2:59:00 AM

congrats, Deb, on your POTD! No 'older' person wants to be looked past and ignored.

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 3:24:00 AM

Thanks Sara….Debx

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/10/2023 2:27:00 AM

(smiles) ~ well said! Warmest congratulations on POTD, Deb

Deb M
Date: 10/10/2023 2:50:00 AM

Thanks U.S…..much appreciated! Debx