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Without John

lost in the twilight hours the twilight years longing for the past a closet door opens, I reach inside wrap myself in his old sweater his Aramis scent still clings to wool puts me in a trance and the aged phonograph still works as I dance to our song “Without You” by Nilsson I can’t live if living is without you I can’t give I can’t give anymore no, I’ll not forget the evening his face as he was leaving for work the night before his stroke I keep Aramis in the house to spray my pillows as I drift off to sleep without you, my love, without you just sounds and scents that make no sense

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/5/2011 1:53:00 AM
sadly beautiful......Syd
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Date: 10/29/2010 4:09:00 AM
well done here my friend wonderful peace
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Date: 10/28/2010 2:03:00 PM
Carolyn, This is so beautiful and it touches my heart...It would seem we have walked the same road. Thank you and congratulations on winning the contest....Well done As Always, Shar
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Date: 10/26/2010 11:53:00 AM
Congrats on HM in contest......Luv/Best wishes...........Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 10/25/2010 10:39:00 AM
Congratulations Carolyn on your HM in Frank's contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/22/2010 9:45:00 PM
A very touching poem Carolyn. many congratulations for this win.
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Date: 10/22/2010 6:41:00 PM
coming back here to say Congrats on this very touching piece, Carolyn! -- hugs nikko
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Date: 10/21/2010 8:37:00 PM
Carolyn congratulations on your win with this beautiful piece, love Wilma
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Date: 10/21/2010 5:46:00 PM
I missed this first time around I guess..This is so sad..he would be so proud of you my dear..you have so much talent. Congrats once again. BG
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Date: 10/21/2010 5:24:00 PM
such longing and sweet pain, we never forget, congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 10/21/2010 4:02:00 PM
Congratulations on this well deserved win, Carolyn
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Date: 10/21/2010 3:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/21/2010 2:54:00 PM
This touches deeply, Carolyn....those sad memories can come in sounds, smells...sometimes in the most unexpected ways. A lovely sweet poem. Congratulations on this wonderful poem. Love, Carrie
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Date: 10/21/2010 1:26:00 PM
I identify with this and it gives me shivers. Congratulations on your recognition. It should have been higher. Thank you for your sweet comments. Love, Joyce
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Date: 10/17/2010 9:27:00 AM
this wouldbe the winner if i was the judge. .im cryin with you,very deep to lose the one you love and still feel him there. .love you Dear friend,tmfs!Celene
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Date: 10/16/2010 11:16:00 PM
The last stanza is awesome, Carolyn. I hope all is well with both of you. Aramis - a great aroma. :-)
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Date: 10/15/2010 8:49:00 AM
A beautiful tear laden piece Carolyn, and a lovely tribute to John. I so loved Aramis, I have not seen it in years. Have a lovely weekend >> James
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Date: 10/15/2010 5:12:00 AM
That's sad and beautiful at the same time, really well written.
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Date: 10/15/2010 4:42:00 AM
Great poem Carolyn, when I read something and feel it in my chest, I know it's great.
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Date: 10/14/2010 5:58:00 PM
Beautiful writing, Carolyn...the scent, the photographs, wrapping up in his old sweater...That song has always been one of my favorites too...Tim
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Date: 10/13/2010 1:31:00 PM
very nice...chokes me up a little
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Date: 10/13/2010 12:02:00 AM
you give so much Carolyn, in fact you don't know just how much your love is transfered in your poems and comment, a friend for life i hope you'll be. Harry
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Date: 10/12/2010 8:42:00 PM
what a heartbreaking write-- and one could really feel the loss here-- sorry indeed for this, Carolyn...but you are blessed though to have shared wonderful memories with him--replied to your soupmail btw, thanks...:)
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Date: 10/11/2010 1:24:00 PM
but I have God and I have my kids and I will be fine it wil take time to heal but I will be good anyway i'm off to go get some rest, God bles you always from diane
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Date: 10/11/2010 1:22:00 PM
aww what a lovley poem and yes it hurts so much when w e loose loved ones it doesn't make it easier knowing our Loved ones are waiting for us in heaven if they have gone that way but like me a loved one gone on earth is painful too sometiems circumstances leave us feeling so hurt and empty but faith keeps us strong and upholds us, it was my birthday yesterday and although my husband keeps asking forgivness he never even botherd to text or anything so he dont really care after all
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