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There will come a time, at any age When I will no longer grace this page. That’s when I will be out of rhyme. At any age, there will come a time. An unwritten absence, you see, to be exact. I will leave everything on Soup intact. The only difference, there won’t be me. To be exact an unwritten absence, you see. To remember me, do a good deed. Do it for someone who is really in need. Don’t resuscitate me, let my soul go free. Do a good deed to remember me. When I am lying there covered with a sheet. Give my heart to a man who’s own does not beat. Give all my organs to those that need a spare. Covered with a sheet when I am lying there. Give my eyes to that girl, she’s not seen flowers. My ears to a boy who hears silence for hours. Give science my brain to study and unfurl. She’s not seen flowers, give my eyes to that girl. If there’s something you must bury, let it be every fault. My impatience and envy and failure to exalt. My bigotry and unkind thoughts of an adversary. Let it be every fault, If there’s something you must bury.

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Ink Empress

Date: 9/29/2023 3:28:00 AM

“To remember me do a good deed” sigh! That touched my heart so deeply. This is so evocative and so well written! Yes even when we are gone our ink will forver remain intact, and will remind readers of who you were. Ill always remember you as the queen of rhymes, and i will always remember these words and thought’s you’ve shared. A very fitting take for the prompt. I felt the depth of this so very much. Thank you for writing. Congratulations on winning

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/29/2023 4:28:00 AM

Empress, If a poem I have written, actually makes you feel something, the I have achieved my ultimate goal. I am truly pleased. Thank you for your wonderful comment.

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/23/2023 2:43:00 PM

What an exquisite notion! Your words are crafted so exquisitely, dear friend. Even until the very end, you selflessly offer your body parts for the benefit of those in need and science. It's a truly noble concept, and your poem is a masterful display of skillful writing, captivating rhymes, and seamless flow, as you consistently convey your thoughts and talents with clarity. There are numerous dimensions to this poem, evoking emotions and imparting profound wisdom throughout. BOL in the contest

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/23/2023 3:04:00 PM

Speachless.. thank you so much. Take care.. SV

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/22/2023 7:13:00 PM

I agree; like Francis, naked in the sun on a grassy hill -- whatever can be recycled, have at it. Well said.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/23/2023 2:38:00 AM

Thnx Joe.

Bill Baker

Date: 9/22/2023 1:47:00 PM

Excellent thoughts on the end of it all, SV. You suggest to others to be kind and caring, and then show us how in giving what you have no use for to those that it will change their life. Very humble way to exit this world. You've put your thoughts into your poetry well, my friend. Bill

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/23/2023 2:38:00 AM

Thnx Bill

Silent One

Date: 9/22/2023 12:34:00 PM

Great rhymes and flow to your poem... I think Ink will like this one.. you always express so well and show your talent.. a lot of facets to this poem, emotions, how you feel and words of wisdom..

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/22/2023 1:38:00 PM

Thank You so much.

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/22/2023 11:53:00 AM

You are a visionary SV! First stanza I'm already tearing up, I will I will do a good deed you'll see from the heavens above. I can't go on I'm tearing up. SV you have seen a future maybe yours maybe mine.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/22/2023 1:38:00 PM

Thank You so much.

Jay Narain

Date: 9/22/2023 10:51:00 AM

Wow, what a nice poem. Even to the last minute, dedicating the body parts to needy and science. 'Take away all that I hold and bury my mistakes'.! A noble thought, Great penning,

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/22/2023 1:39:00 PM

Thank You so much.

Valsa George

Date: 9/22/2023 1:10:00 AM

This is the Will and Testament of a noble soul. 'Take away all that I hold and bury my mistakes'.... ! What a lofty thought. So beautifully written, dear sweet friend. All the Best in the contest.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 9/21/2023 10:19:00 PM

I never fail to love this one x

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/22/2023 1:09:00 AM

I wish you'd downloaded them before deleting! I clearly remember the emotion rather than the full words - I love that this was recalled from being moved by organ donation so many years before.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/21/2023 11:48:00 PM

Its completely changed, except for blind girl the deaf boy and the heart recipient. This one isn't about a bottle in the ocean, and this one is a swap quatrain. I had to rewrite it cause I only had notes left I deleted the old one. I was happy to use the idea again, cause the contest didn't call for a brand new poem or idea. Glad you remembered the old one D. I think it may have been better, but its long gone :( For a while I was sorry I deleted them all, but now honestly, I couldn't care less. Thanks for your support my friend..