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"While the sufferings of the poor majority remain unknown to the world, the achievements of the rich minority are trumpeted to all" ~By Poet
The heavens grew darker with rain clouds The day looked like a misty shroud Soon rain pelted down, whiplashing Lightning unleashed its lethal rapier Brandishing the flaming steel across the skies Thunder growled and rumbled Like a giant stamping in rage Causing vibrations like seismic tremors Sending fear through every nerve Men sought shelter in the shade of trees. Some ran to the shelter of roofs Sound of wind whistled and boomed Trees arched and shook, leaves flew about Unceasingly the sky wept in torrents for days As the men grumbled on being shut indoors I heard the plaintive ballad of the homeless Victims in the hands of an unknown fate Their sighs fated to die out in their own smoldering hearts. They live unknown with languishing identity, To wrestle with the dark unknown To die unknown and to lie under the sod unknown! April.17.2023 Writing Challenge ‘U’ Words Poetry Contest Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 4/19/2023 9:16:00 AM
Hi Valsa, This is such a well-written write on homelessness. You did an excellent job with the chosen word. Congratulations on your win. Have a great day;-) Alexis
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Date: 4/19/2023 6:27:00 AM
Valsa, thank you so much for sharing your poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations ! Outstanding and I love your quote and image. !
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Date: 4/19/2023 8:36:00 PM
Hi Constance, thanks a lot for the honor given. Stay happy and blessed.
Date: 4/19/2023 2:35:00 AM
- Small changes can have a very big impact... for our lives here on earth - Beautifully written, Valsa - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 4/19/2023 2:09:00 AM
Your poem is amazing Valsa. Congratulations on your win
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Date: 4/18/2023 8:50:00 PM
"Victims in the hands of an unknown fate" - A very beautiful word painting of the poor and the helpless. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/18/2023 7:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the Contest...Valsa Wonderful poem
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Date: 4/18/2023 7:02:00 PM
Hi Valsa Your first stanza is bursting with imagery and the rest of the poem follows form. Such plight the homeless highlighted by your words. Congratulations your win! :)
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Date: 4/18/2023 2:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful write/picture/quote. Have a blessed day.................
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Date: 4/18/2023 1:22:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your contest win, Valsa. I liked the flow and rhythm, as well as your wonderful imagery.
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Date: 4/17/2023 7:07:00 PM
What an exquisite reflection on the magnificence of the Almighty and a sobering remembrance of our own relative meaninglessness: "Men sought shelter in the shade of trees. Some ran to the shelter of roofs The sound of wind whistled and boomed" There is no place of deep gloom or utter darkness where wicked individuals may escape.
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Date: 4/17/2023 6:31:00 PM
When the people saw the thunder and lightning and heard the trumpet and saw the mountain in smoke, they trembled with fear. They stayed at a distance Exodus 20:18 NIV What a great poem of God's Majesty and a reminder of how small we are , There is no deep shadow, no utter darkness, where evildoers can hide. Job 34:22 NIV
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