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Uncle Paul

I suppose to most folks the head reposin' on Mars will e'er remain a mystery. But I think that I have solved that enigma - 'twill surely make medical history! Oft I've wondered what happened to the head of my ne'er-do-well Uncle Paul, Who flew off the handle and lost his head in a scandalous barroom brawl! That head lyin' there in peaceful repose in the crimson dust of Planet Mars, Is the spittin' image of my Uncle Paul includin' those five forehead scars! The inscrutable smile on the face and the bushy hair are his for sure! The sight of those lifeless eyes starin' back at me is very hard to endure! Thankfully, the clime of the Planet Mars has preserved his skull, it appears, Though it has reposed on that desolate floor collectin' dust for many years. I pray that should astronauts one day take flight and land on that celestial ball, That they'll take pity on his grievin' kin and retrieve the head of Uncle Paul! Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired © All Rights Reserved Placed No. 5 in Carolyn Devonshire's "Sphinx Head On Mars" Contest - Sep 2010

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Date: 9/23/2010 12:44:00 PM
Many congratulations Robert on your win in Carolyn' out of this world contest with this witty piece >> James
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Date: 9/23/2010 5:48:00 AM
Congratulations Bob for your win in Carolyn Devonshire's contest "Sphinx Head on Mars?". Love, Carol
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Date: 9/22/2010 9:19:00 PM
AWESOME, one of the best, robert, I really enjoyed the humor of this one. Congrats. Andrea
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Date: 9/22/2010 4:31:00 PM
Congratulations Bob on your #5 presentation, my Friend. Emjoy. Agape, Moses
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Date: 9/22/2010 2:40:00 PM
Congratulations on this fine win in the contest, Bob
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Date: 9/22/2010 2:18:00 PM
Yes here is your uncle Paul again right up there with the win. Congrtulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/22/2010 1:30:00 PM
Congrats Bob on your big win in this contest... a wonderful write .. enjoy with luv...
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Date: 9/22/2010 11:04:00 AM
This is sooo funny, Bob. Really enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your placement in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/20/2010 7:25:00 AM
Hey Bob! I love your take on that photo.. You already know that I enjoy your wonderful gift..This is another enjoyable write! Wishing you good luck in Carolyn's "Sphinx Head On Mars" Contest! Peace, Audrey
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Date: 9/15/2010 2:49:00 PM
This is really funny and clever, Robert. Good luck in the contest! I really enjoyed writing on this theme, but took a serious angle.
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Date: 9/13/2010 4:03:00 PM
funny--good job!!
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Date: 9/13/2010 8:30:00 AM
Hi Sarge. Thanks for reading my silliness. Leaving Wed for 10 days. Going to Utah to visit my son and grand/great-grand children. Haven't seen the kids for almost a year so I'm pretty excited. You guys have a super week. Hope I get good weather. Ralphie
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Date: 9/13/2010 8:26:00 AM
thankxxx Bob.. I surely like your suggestion for the title.. let me think about it..luv.. appreciate your wonderful feedback..
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Date: 9/13/2010 8:05:00 AM
Oh this is good! thank you for the heads up on my typo...BG
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Date: 9/12/2010 9:49:00 PM
Oh this will surely be a winner. I could think of nothing to write for this contest. I opened your poem to read because I had a favorite Uncle Paul. But he never did anything so dramatic so cannot write about him. Thanks for the laugh. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/12/2010 7:18:00 PM
Hello, Bob, are you back in the contest game. Just curios, enjoyed your poem. (the best of luck in the contest),..p.d.
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Date: 9/12/2010 12:16:00 PM
Hehe, poor uncle Paul, Bob you have done it again.. Enjoyed your entry for Carolyn's contest.. Best wishes, hope your Sunday's been great :) Wilma
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Date: 9/12/2010 9:23:00 AM
Uniquely an ideal in a poem for this contest, that I would never have thought of Bob! An awesome entry, and Good luck! Agape, Moses
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Date: 9/12/2010 7:56:00 AM
Good luck in the contest Bob .. a most wonderful creativie original write my friend.. should do very well..luv.. have a happy Sunday.. football fever at my home today..
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Date: 9/12/2010 7:39:00 AM
Interesting use of metaphoric language in this one...I hope that you didn't loose your uncle in a bar room bawl..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Sara
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Date: 9/11/2010 5:53:00 PM
A creative, humrous and witty write. enjoyed it, Bob
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Date: 9/11/2010 4:32:00 PM
:) Thanks for supporting the contest, Bob. Very funny! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/11/2010 3:17:00 PM
Excellent entry, Bob. Awesome write. Sittin here watching BYU - AFA football game. Looks like a nice day in Colorado Springs. Are you into AFA football? You and Vera have a great weekend. Good luck in the contest. Una/Ralph
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Date: 9/11/2010 12:05:00 PM
too cute, good luck in the contest
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Date: 9/11/2010 10:29:00 AM
LoL!!! Poor ol' Uncle Paul! I guess your well expressed poem proves it doesn't pay to lose one's head in fits of anger. This is not only an excellent poem, but a good dose of humor. : )
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