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The Golden Oriole

On his twenty-fifth birthday, elated 
He decided to go hunting.
He let the fresh air of the early morning
On the slope of a wooded hill, fill his lungs.
A small vale stretched beneath him, 
Whilst behind the trees rose a small sheer cliff. 

That was where he saw the golden oriole.
 
It was a beautiful specimen, all yellow.
Martin admired its graceful flight. 
And the bird seemed to enjoy itself, too. 
He observed it intently as it glided, soared, turned, 
And flew happily over the old gnarled trees below. 

Suddenly, a hellish black kestrel appeared in the sky. 
It hovered above, eyes glinting, beak poised. 
The oriole sensed it immediately. 
Irrationally, it defied the bird of prey, 
For it continued its fancy flight 
Until the kestrel began its dive. 
Then the oriole flew directly towards the cliff 
And inexplicably disappeared.
It was the worst birthday of Martin’s life.
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Daniel Avatar
November 20, 2024 at 7:14 AM
What a story! Captivating:)
Anaya Avatar
November 18, 2024 at 4:48 PM
Great storytelling, Victor! I wasn't sure if he would hunt the bird, so happy he didn' t!
Edmonds  Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 5:32 PM
So sad Victor, not a nice thing to see, especially on one’s birthday… Beryl
Jones Avatar
November 14, 2024 at 1:18 AM
Oh no! I still have hope the oriel somehow got away! Interesting write!
Eslinger Avatar
November 12, 2024 at 9:48 PM
Oh God i believe it was! Dread at the highest. I’m sure the being it is worse than the reading it, but, Victor, you writing is powerful, vivid, unforgettable. Rich. Exquisite! xox sally
George Avatar
November 12, 2024 at 7:16 PM
Danger lurks when least expected. But either through clever move or through chance one might escape it. In the case of the Golden oriole, it spotted the kestrel coming towards it and it flew away quickly and escaped beyond the cliffs. The flight of the oriole above the gnarled trees and its escape from the predator are beautifully described.
Hind Avatar
November 12, 2024 at 5:00 PM
Haunting in the abstract- has a dark feeling
Buehler Avatar
November 12, 2024 at 1:26 PM
Oh, what a gorgeous sight the oriole must have made, since according to the picture, it's a graceful and stunning bird! I want to believe it escaped the danger. Wonderful writing, my friend. :)
Dietrich Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 10:00 PM
Oh my. What a tragic ending. Not sure I ever saw a golden oriole but that picture of one is magnificent
Buhagiar Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 11:26 PM
A pure golden oriole does not exist. This is a fantasy narrative. I hope you will read my sequel :) Hugs.
One Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 12:33 PM
You are a wonderful storyteller my friend.. no matter what the theme, you deliver..
Kitchin Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 12:20 PM
Victor, I enjoyed your bird tale, a sad one but so true to nature and life. - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 6:38 AM
Wow! First elation then the sudden descent of heart. Great write! Hugs ~ Kim
Poet Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 6:25 AM
Amazing poetry. The natural world is untamed and eternal. I like your poem; it was well written.
DiMino Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 2:54 AM
Hi Victor; no one will convince me that God intended life and death this way. We created this earth and its laws, out of fallen consciousness. Free Will much more than man can begin to imagine.
Andresen Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 2:37 AM
- Sad, but the course of nature - A birthday he will never forget - Beautifully described, Victor :) - hugs
Rolland Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 2:17 AM
wonderful poem, nature is wild and so it keeps duration, enjoyed your poem so well crafted, thanks
Williams Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 12:12 AM
Dear Victor your poem captures the powerful imagery and emotional arc making Martin’s experience resonate profoundly, a bittersweet reflection on life’s unpredictable nature. Very well written ...Hugs
Tor Avatar
November 10, 2024 at 11:04 PM
This one is Sad Victor. His pride was demonstrated before his fall. 'thank for sharing my friend.... Hope you are doing well...
Cunningham Avatar
November 10, 2024 at 10:58 PM
Not a happy ending for his birthday, sadly the law of the jungle rules. Tom
Cunningham Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 1:25 PM
Don't forget Jane.
Greenhough Avatar
November 10, 2024 at 10:16 PM
Poor bird. I hope it didn't die.
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