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Premiere Contest WinnerThe Duckling - Apologies to Edgar Allan Poe

Warning - Don't read The Raven and Watch Hitchcock on the same night. 

Once before my bedtime, nearing, which I dreaded, fazed and fearing,  
Stories mother would read me before she closed and locked my bedroom door —
    While I washed up in the water, could mom have drawn it any hotter?
Before me swam a rubber duckling, chuckling as my mother shut the door 
“‘Tis some water fowl”, I muttered, “which mother bought me from the store.  
            Only this and nothing more.”

 Ah, distinctly I can place it - the sad night Mother would misplace it;   
Or entirely erase it; of her mind remaining nothing more.
    I lay in bed, mother tucking, on feathers of mother’s plucking
    Time for your book, said mother clucking, clucking as she locked the bedroom door —
I’ll read “Make Way for Ducklings” and then warm milk she began to pour -
            all across the bedroom floor. 

Assuredly, I felt no sorrow, as mother left me till the morrow
  Sighing -  buying time – which maybe I could only hope to borrow;
    I heard my monstrous mother screaming, or maybe Tippi Hedren streaming
    as Hitchcock’s “Birds” was beaming from the TV laying on the floor—
    “’Tis just Hitchcock’s “Birds” beaming from the TV laying on the floor” -
            This it is and nothing more.”

Inside that book peered at me smiling, a crazed duck that set me dialing
 911 and protective services to frantically implore  
   The feeling in my stomach sinking, “I need a friend”, I was thinking 
   Staring wildly at this ghastly mallard who chilled me to the core
Then, at once, I saw it, heard it, this grinning duck needn’t chill me to the core
           as he said, “I will be your friend forevermore”.
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Dietrich Avatar
August 18, 2026 at 11:40 PM
Hahaha. The last part is such a hoot. I recall doing a challenge like this a long time ago. Using the poem if Poes as a model so did you win way back then and decide to pin this? A like for this one
Crandall Avatar
August 19, 2026 at 8:39 PM
to more fully answer your question, yep, it was Poem of the Week way back when I was fairly new, and later, I think I placed in a contest, and finally, I just pinned it, and also drew a picture to accompany it.
Crandall Avatar
August 19, 2026 at 8:30 PM
Thanks, Andrea! Yes, I want to go back and pin a bunch of my poems, but how the heck am I going to check 2000+ poems, almost all of which I've forgot, and then how am I going to figure out which ones are any good. Those are the questions troubling me today - lol.
Drowley Avatar
December 23, 2024 at 8:28 AM
Congratulations on your win! Enjoyed this novel write!
Crandall Avatar
December 23, 2024 at 1:39 PM
Glad you enjoyed it David!
mysore Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 6:25 PM
Congratulations on your win dear poet. Interesting write. Cheers!!!
Crandall Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 9:33 PM
Thanks Thriveni
Poteet Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 12:08 PM
So enjoyable a read, and agreed it is a winning poem for creativity and rhyme, kept my attention throughout. Congrats, David on your top placement too, well-deserved. Merry Christmas.
Crandall Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 12:13 PM
Thanks and Merry Christmas Reason!
Ashley Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 9:16 AM
Dear David, I enjoyed your entertaining poem. Wonderful rhyming with both internal and end rhymes. A brilliant blend of Poe and Hitchcock macabre styles. Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Rob's contest. Warmest wishes for a merry Christmas my poet friend.. ~Susan
Crandall Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 12:13 PM
Thanks Susan! Merry Christmas!
Grasso Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 6:21 AM
Congratulations on winning top honors, David. Great write! ...Fran
Crandall Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 12:12 PM
Thanks Francis!
Carmack Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 5:43 AM
David - thank you for supporting my contest with this entry. Very well composed.
Crandall Avatar
December 22, 2024 at 7:52 AM
Wow, thank you, Rob! Writing it made me appreciate the original.
De Beaulieu Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 10:38 AM
Hello David Crandall, I really enjoyed this poem. Yes congratulation on your POTW. enjoy your special day. enjoy your day my friend. /Darlene/
De Beaulieu Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 10:33 AM
Hello David, I enjoyed reading this poem. Enjohy your dahy my friend. /Darlene/
Crandall Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 4:49 PM
Thanks Darlene - glad you liked it!
Andresen Avatar
April 12, 2024 at 1:40 AM
- An enjoyable poem, David - Congratulations on your p.o.t.w. :) - hugs
Crandall Avatar
April 12, 2024 at 10:38 AM
Thanks Anne-Lise!
Jones Avatar
April 10, 2024 at 5:21 PM
Congratulations on a humorous potw!
Crandall Avatar
April 10, 2024 at 6:06 PM
Thanks Karen!!
Kaufman Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 10:04 AM
Hi David, A hearty congratulations on this very funny Poe style piece. It was quite amusing. Enjoyed..
Crandall Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 11:43 AM
Hi Nancy, thanks - glad you enjoyed - it was fun.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 8, 2024 at 5:33 PM
Congratulations on POTW! A great take on Poe’s form!
Crandall Avatar
April 8, 2024 at 7:28 PM
Thanks Kim!
Nicole Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 3:56 PM
' this grinning duck needn’t chill me to the core, as he said, “I will be your friend forevermore”. ' A bit creepy to me. No need to apologize to ' Edgar Allan Poe, ' because he would have been proud. You've created a masterpiece, David. Congratulations on Poem of the Week. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:40 PM
Thanks for your nice words, Brandy. I submitted this to the little newspaper at my retirement community, and I was afraid they might think it a bit weird, but they printed it for Halloween.
Fowler Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 9:27 AM
Fun, creative, engaging. Congratulations, David, on your POTW! :)
Fowler Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:40 PM
You are welcome, David, and I'm glad you like my little inquisitive owl. :)
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:36 PM
Thanks Linda, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I like your owl profile picture :-).
Baker Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 8:50 AM
Excellent creative poetry, David. I enjoyed the read. Congratulations on your fine POTW! Enjoy your special week of recognition. Bill
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:51 PM
Thanks Bill - I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yes, this POTW is encouraging!
Goldsmith Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 8:07 AM
Congratulations on your POTW win. A wonderful/creative Duck write. I bet Poe would have fun reading this one... Have a blessed day writing away...........
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:32 PM
Thanks Paula. BTW, I love the expression, "Duck write"!
Kitchin Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:45 AM
David, creative and entertaining, congratulations on POTW.
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:32 PM
Tania, thanks - I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Rodgers Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 5:23 AM
Dear David, your poem is a brilliant twist on Poe, blending humor with the macabre seamlessly. The imagery of the duckling lurking in the shadows of childhood innocence is haunting yet whimsical. Your mastery of language and storytelling earned you POTW. Congratulations on a chillingly delightful piece! - Blessings, Daniel
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:31 PM
Thanks so much David. I feel like framing this comment. I'm fairly new to poetry, and your words are encouraging to key trying this fun activity!
Williams Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 3:56 AM
I'm a great Poe fan, so this I had to read. And wow, I was not disappointed, from beginning to end, I was held in the grip, of wondering when that chilling duckling was going to come to life. Well, it ended well. Did the friendship last? Great take on your poem David. Congratulations on your POTW. So well deserved. I sort of attempted a Poe theme in my poem Nothing Less, Nothing More, if you care to look...Maria
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:28 PM
Thanks, Maria. Haha, yes, they became best friends (but, I'm afraid to tell you what kind of mischief they got into :-)) I liked what you did in your Nothing Less, Nothing More, with the New Year beginning so positively, after it seems the old year got beaten up a bit.
Cunningham Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 3:41 AM
An enjoyable read David, you'd give old Edgar a run for his money with this well written verse. Congratulations to you on the honour of POTW. Tom
Crandall Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 6:19 PM
Thanks for your nice comment - it was fun!
Achara Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 7:26 AM
Wow that is quite a unique capture on how frightening childhood can be. Well done.
Crandall Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 8:24 AM
Thanks Chetta, haha, "unique" is a nice word for the type of kid I was.
Lane Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 1:50 AM
Well done, David! No apology should you be making to Edgar P. for your talented take on one of his best. I wonder if the child’s mother was named Lenore.
Crandall Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Thanks Lin. haha, come to think of it - you're right - her name was Lenore! Struggling to copy the rhyme pattern really makes me appreciate that great poem even more.
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