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The Clearing

It's summer, and sunlight's syrup pours sweet into afternoon. We've come to the bungalow's cemetery to pick over bones of bygone days; touch time's tender skin, lay flowers on childhood's grave. The lodge is razed to the ground. We raise our eyes to sky and take each big breath of blue. Sharp lemon-light cuts through the detritus of our days; the oaks once cloaked in dark. The knotweed nooses and dreamlike domes of fly agaric have all been cleared; the forest sentinels' leafless limbs discarded - an abattoir of strangeness, sawdust-strewn. But all dismemberment is a clearing of sorts. The echoes of emptiness eavesdrop on each reminiscence, as we forage for a few last remnants: blue paisley swirls of 70s tiles, red bricks from an 80s fireplace. A yearning rises suddenly, slick sick-sour in my throat... and yet, it feels cathartic, this purging of the past; this merging of our then and now, this blending of bitter and sweet. 23 February 2023

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Date: 9/24/2023 11:14:00 AM
Gosh, you're so good with odd word pairings and slick alliterations. Interestingly, my wife and I were discussing yesterday her childhood home. Long gone and replaced with condos of a sort. Her childhood was mixed with pain, like yours. Some dismemberments are for our greater good
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 9/24/2023 2:28:00 PM
craig put up a blog about this one back in feb; he did a sort of poetry workshop on it, how the poem gets the reader to project their own experiences onto it etc, and i gave a detailed explanation of what it's about..thanks for commenting :)
Date: 5/16/2023 5:52:00 AM
I so concur with the final verse. We mourn not only our loved ones but our past…our childhood, etc.. Love: The knotweed nooses and dreamlike domes of fly agaric & an abattoir of strangeness! (I used radishes to fashion toadstools at a family dinner)
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Date: 4/20/2023 2:52:00 AM
I do agree with Susan's emotions here. I, too, find it emotional and poignant. Thanks for a great read.
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Date: 4/13/2023 4:47:00 AM
Charlotte, Beautiful, emotional , poignant weaving of past and present . So descriptive and haunting in its bitter and sweet nuances. I love ~ The echoes of emptiness eavesdrop. This resonates deeply within me . All the best , Susan Soup mail sent
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Date: 4/1/2023 3:07:00 PM
Good penning Charlotte, really liked this one with good imagery and insightful line of thought too. Nice to meet a fellow Brit here, I'm North of the border. Have a great weekend, Gordon
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Date: 3/20/2023 3:53:00 PM
And still we cannot place a finger on it.' Or own It ephemeral escap'e just juxtapose a weight laden we.' Are we free if we forget? Or just free to try And forget.' The pieces we hold,' yet can't match Again.' Just to dream and wish our way; into the waiting Day.' Its been a long time no comment from me Charlotte.' Yet I'm here..Ready to converse constructivly.'
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Date: 3/19/2023 8:31:00 AM
Hi Charlotte, a seemingly poignant piece, yet infused on a promise of newness... sort of like becoming whole again. " Emptiness Eavesdrop" has a profound depth.
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Date: 3/8/2023 9:20:00 AM
Seems to be a nostalgic reminiscence visiting a childhood place. An awesome poem with great imagery and scenes depicted swell. Kudos!! <<<<<<<<<<<<<<>>>>*>>>>>>>>>>*********** Plz also read and comment my newest poem too
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Date: 3/7/2023 1:59:00 PM
Wonderful imagery! A fave, Charlotte!
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Date: 3/1/2023 12:34:00 PM
A well deserved POTW selection, CP. Quite a piece. ~;o]
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Date: 3/1/2023 2:00:00 AM
It’s good to re-visit the past, to remember the good times one had. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the week Charlotte… Belle
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Date: 2/26/2023 5:44:00 PM
This is beautiful, tender and emotional, all at the same time. Bittersweet memories flood the soul. Your thoughts caress softly around me and my heart. Congratulations Charlotte, on Poem of the Week. My best to you. ~ Brandy
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Date: 2/26/2023 1:53:00 PM
A tour de force Charlotte. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 2/26/2023 1:50:00 PM
I have taken this walk to legitimacy on many of days "We've come to the bungalow's cemetery to pick over bones of bygone days; touch time's tender skin, lay flowers on childhood's grave." Beautifully written! Best Regards A.S.
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Date: 2/26/2023 12:45:00 PM
Charlotte, a beautiful poem and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE WEEK, and congratulations on your win in the Craig's contest also, blessings, Constance
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Date: 2/26/2023 9:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTW honor, Charlotte. Well-written, deep and thoughtful piece. I enjoy the intrigue and the depth of your poem. Bill
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Date: 2/26/2023 6:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTW win. Have a blessed day writing away................
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Date: 2/25/2023 9:27:00 PM
In the clearing, a wreckage - the "lodge ... razed to the ground." "The echoes of emptiness eavesdrop" - such stark description that resonates with your reader, or anyone familiar with loss. A stellar write. Congratulations! Brian
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Date: 2/25/2023 7:52:00 PM
"A yearning rises suddenly, slick sick-sour in my throat... and yet, it feels cathartic" - A very beautifully written poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 2/25/2023 10:45:00 AM
Congratulations, Charlotte, on the top winning achievement; your poem on clearing is so lovely, and I really liked the way you depicted the striking metaphors.
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Date: 2/25/2023 10:34:00 AM
You have a gift to write - thank you for sharing these thoughts---there's so much happening here that is great poetry!
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Date: 2/25/2023 9:08:00 AM
Your poem is so softly sad and beautiful, Charlotte. I'm faving. Congratulations on first place!
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Date: 2/25/2023 7:02:00 AM
Great imagery Charlotte. Congratulations on your win. :)
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Date: 2/23/2023 11:07:00 AM
awesome write! love the opening and closing stanzas and the word descriptions in between are great! :)
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 2/23/2023 12:35:00 PM
thank you very much.:)
Date: 2/23/2023 9:25:00 AM
You pen with eloquent verbiage. The constructs, are-far from simple, Imagery is .complex and divine, Panagiota
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 2/23/2023 12:31:00 PM
thank you, may need some further tightening up.:)
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