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Written for the contest  Poe in the style of Plath sponsored by Tom Woody

Song Of Demise

I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead;
I lift my lids and all is born again.
I think I made you up inside my head.
-Sylvia Plath

I see no reason to rhyme, 
but an aching heart, 
stranded in the midst of nothingness,
as quill rests in a nameless
coffin, like a trembling corpse.

Words woven in tears
glisten like rain,
amidst rustic pages 
within a book of bleeding ink. 

While 
I, the deep darkness, 
ponder, would the moon
ever grieve for the sun,
or will she allow waning
stars to abandon 
her doleful realm?
As her face
shifts and turns through
phases of changes-
and her soul like 
the weary winter,
withers into white-washed wounds.

I am the hazy mirror to 
a lunar goddess.
There shadows betrayed
this cruel conscience,
roaming within forlorn vales,
swirling through a woeful wind,
to nocturnal sonatas. 

My mind nestles like
a raven resting 
at the treetop,
calling your name into
frozen oblivion,
laced in secluded silence,
echoing amidst obsidian fears.

What would they know
of tainted tales,
obscured within the 
mellifluous sound of splitting rain?

I am throned to a fallen sky,
drizzling thorns and splinters
upon bruised toes.

Remember, I love you,
through dreams and more,
stretching my fingers
to your silvery spheres. 
Now your palette of romance 
paints a blurred portrait
of hallowed misery;
dreams forgotten with time. 

There’s no perfect 
pigment to correct
my insomniac frame 
but metaphors to lure me 
back to a colorless 
castle above satanic seas.

I’m dancing with demons;
as the pain you’ve fed me,
rushes through chained chambers.

Tonight, the storms may seem calm,
like forests awaiting for a trail
of redolent rainbows,
to flicker upon mourning meadows.

Tomorrow, when I slumber
six feet beneath breathing fiction,
will you rewrite cruel convictions,
that stole my purpose to live?

Maybe darkness sparkles upon
rich rivulets of rippling regrets,
so the cosmos would allow the moon
to rise and beam brighter than 
the selfish sun. 

Let this poem be the last 
amulet to sorrowful sagas,
as I untangle your vines 
suffocating my final breath,
this is the eternal demise—
I’m dying before your dead eyes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Rodgers Avatar
February 19, 2024 at 6:51 AM
Dearest Ink Empress, Thank you for recommending. Your poem deeply moved me; your words are hauntingly beautiful, with many varying emotions that touched me. The words and scenes you've crafted are evocative, describing pain and longing that lingers in the mind long after reading. Your exploration of darkness, sorrow, and the complexities of human emotion is masterful, drawing me into the depths of your poetic world. Your creative use of metaphors and symbolism adds layers of meaning, reflecting on the themes of mortality, regret, and the search for peace amidst the chaos of existence. You are a very talented poet, and it shows! – Blessings, Daniel
Ricci Avatar
January 12, 2024 at 11:36 AM
Hello Empress. Good Afternoon. Please allow me to say I am in awe of this extraordinary entry in its entirety that Poe himself would love and give you high praise. He wrote with such deep feeling and emotion of yes dark matters of life and you with perfection captured his essence and the essence of his work. You are skilled and very talented. When reading your words the emotive factor is ever present that reaches the reader. Peace and Blessings always. Have a peaceful weekend. (smile)
Croft Avatar
December 9, 2023 at 2:22 AM
Congrats on your placement
Empress Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 12:51 AM
Thank you kind karen I appreciate u always
Hamilton Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 8:55 PM
An uplifting poem to lay at the feet of a loved one. Reminds me of a poem I wrote called Forgotten well done on placing with it hugs Shadow
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 11:30 PM
Thank you so much for your visit. I would love to read your poem. This poem is about death of a relationship and darkness that dwells from heartache, when one feels betrayed by their beloved. I appreciate you reading always dear shadow
Miller Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:12 AM
Just superb!
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:47 AM
Thank you so very much truly for your visit and support i am grateful always
Jones Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 10:17 PM
Brilliant. Congratulations on a trophy win!
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:47 AM
Thank you so very much kind karen i appreciate your support truly
Edmonds  Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 1:11 PM
A fantastic write combining the styles of Poe and Plath Ink, congratulations on your win in Tom’s contest. Belle
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:47 AM
Thank you so very much kind belle i appreciate your support truly
Volumes Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 10:13 AM
Exquisite.
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:48 AM
Thank you always for your kind support truly
Anaya Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 9:20 AM
An engaging ebon and flow of Plath and Poe. I loved it, Ink Congratulations on your well-deserved win! I Am Anaya
Empress Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:48 AM
Ah thank you so very much truly anaya appreciate your support
Baker Avatar
November 26, 2023 at 9:38 PM
Your entry for this contest is excellent, Ink. Your passion and the depth of your words resonates with me, and my desires as I pen my humble poetry. This was a tough challenge to combine to poets' ways and philosophies. I always enjoy the alliteration in your poetry. Good luck in the contest! Hugs, Bill
Hind Avatar
November 26, 2023 at 5:42 PM
My, God... this broke my heart. Friend, I care for you... and I hope for your future, truest light.
George Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 9:06 PM
I wonder if Plath or Poe could ever rise to your level. I am not good enough to judge poetry. But it is my conviction. "Tomorrow, when I slumber six feet beneath breathing fiction, will you rewrite cruel convictions, that stole my purpose to live?". This is a hundred ton question you have hurled. This poem is so heartrending, piercing the very core, yet a delight to read because of its poetic excellence. Into my FAVE.
Onpaper Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:06 AM
I see no reason to rhyme,.. aaah that opening line!!! quill rests in a nameless coffin,.. oooo spooky !! Looove that!! weary winter, withers into white-washed wounds.. damn look at those alliterations flow papi!!! I love you,through dreams and more, me tooo aee.. stretching my fingers to your silvery sphere.. effortlessly taking my breath away aee!Let this poem be the last amulet to sorrowful sagas,as I untangle your vines .. ooo yess.. fuck me that ending just killed me!!!
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:22 AM
Ahhh hahahah ur comments make my day papi miss u
Poet Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 7:02 AM
Dear Ink, your outstanding poetry emanates great depth, poignancy, and wit. It's a wonderful salute to both Edgar Allan Poe and Sylvia Plath's literary legacy. My dear friend, the emotions are expertly linked. Each line is well constructed, perfectly expressing the core of the work. And the final stanza, a genuinely great choice for a conclusion, highlights your excellent composition's craftsmanship. BOL, with the contest
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:01 AM
Ah thank you so very much dear sotto, this is so very kind of you and i appreciate the well wishes too.
Pandit Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 6:42 AM
Your song of demise -- a wonderful tribute to both Poe and Plath. Wonderfully woven in emotions, my friend. Now your palette of romance paints a blurred portrait of hallowed misery; dreams forgotten with time --suffocating my final breath, this is the eternal demise—I’m dying before your dead eyes. A FAVE for your story telling and execution--Poe and Plath would be proud to read!
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:02 AM
Thank you so very much always for your kindness and for being so supportive i am so grateful for the fave and your sincere feedback truly always
One Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 5:33 AM
I'm still trying to get my head around how to do this one.. I like how you kept to the style of Plath and used hints of Poe.. My problem is I think I will go tooo Poe.. I am always in awe of your poetry as you seem to write it so freely, and you post so proficiently.. I think Tommy will love this one.... the ending sums it up doesnt it, when we feel our demise has taken over our sense... let this pome be the last amulet to sorrowful sagas... I hope your saga is not the last poem... amazing dear.
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:03 AM
Ah thats what i thought too, Poe is easier to do for me too. But anyway this is a lame imitation of some great poets lol i cant wait to read yours dear .. thank you so much for your sweet and kind feedback truly grateful always for your generous support
Lawless Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 5:32 AM
You're gonna give Poe nightmares. and I may sleep with the lights on tonight. Nicely done and a quite unique take on....well.....y'know...
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:04 AM
Haha Poe will probably cringe . Poor Poe. Thank you so very much
Culverhouse Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 5:27 AM
Absolutely full of corking lines, so well expressed and that last line is a great line to close with, excellent write IE
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:04 AM
Ah thank you Clive very much i appreciate your generous support
Rhymes Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 4:38 AM
The ending is just sad … but beautiful as always ..
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:05 AM
Awwn i knew you wont like the ending .. but thank you dahlin
M  Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 4:13 AM
Wow IE ….what an amazing poem so deep, poignant and so IE clever!! Lovely my sweet friend! Debx
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 10:05 AM
Thank you sweet soul always for being so kind and supportive i appreciate you
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