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Written for the contest  Poe in the style of Plath sponsored by Tom Woody

I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; I lift my lids and all is born again. I think I made you up inside my head. -Sylvia Plath I see no reason to rhyme, but an aching heart, stranded in the midst of nothingness, as quill rests in a nameless coffin, like a trembling corpse. Words woven in tears glisten like rain, amidst rustic pages within a book of bleeding ink. While I, the deep darkness, ponder, would the moon ever grieve for the sun, or will she allow waning stars to abandon her doleful realm? As her face shifts and turns through phases of changes- and her soul like the weary winter, withers into white-washed wounds. I am the hazy mirror to a lunar goddess. There shadows betrayed this cruel conscience, roaming within forlorn vales, swirling through a woeful wind, to nocturnal sonatas. My mind nestles like a raven resting at the treetop, calling your name into frozen oblivion, laced in secluded silence, echoing amidst obsidian fears. What would they know of tainted tales, obscured within the mellifluous sound of splitting rain? I am throned to a fallen sky, drizzling thorns and splinters upon bruised toes. Remember, I love you, through dreams and more, stretching my fingers to your silvery spheres. Now your palette of romance paints a blurred portrait of hallowed misery; dreams forgotten with time. There’s no perfect pigment to correct my insomniac frame but metaphors to lure me back to a colorless castle above satanic seas. I’m dancing with demons; as the pain you’ve fed me, rushes through chained chambers. Tonight, the storms may seem calm, like forests awaiting for a trail of redolent rainbows, to flicker upon mourning meadows. Tomorrow, when I slumber six feet beneath breathing fiction, will you rewrite cruel convictions, that stole my purpose to live? Maybe darkness sparkles upon rich rivulets of rippling regrets, so the cosmos would allow the moon to rise and beam brighter than the selfish sun. Let this poem be the last amulet to sorrowful sagas, as I untangle your vines suffocating my final breath, this is the eternal demise— I’m dying before your dead eyes.

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Date: 2/19/2024 6:51:00 AM
Dearest Ink Empress, Thank you for recommending. Your poem deeply moved me; your words are hauntingly beautiful, with many varying emotions that touched me. The words and scenes you've crafted are evocative, describing pain and longing that lingers in the mind long after reading. Your exploration of darkness, sorrow, and the complexities of human emotion is masterful, drawing me into the depths of your poetic world. Your creative use of metaphors and symbolism adds layers of meaning, reflecting on the themes of mortality, regret, and the search for peace amidst the chaos of existence. You are a very talented poet, and it shows! – Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 1/12/2024 11:36:00 AM
Hello Empress. Good Afternoon. Please allow me to say I am in awe of this extraordinary entry in its entirety that Poe himself would love and give you high praise. He wrote with such deep feeling and emotion of yes dark matters of life and you with perfection captured his essence and the essence of his work. You are skilled and very talented. When reading your words the emotive factor is ever present that reaches the reader. Peace and Blessings always. Have a peaceful weekend. (smile)
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Date: 12/9/2023 2:22:00 AM
Congrats on your placement
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/10/2023 12:51:00 AM
Thank you kind karen I appreciate u always
Date: 12/5/2023 8:55:00 PM
An uplifting poem to lay at the feet of a loved one. Reminds me of a poem I wrote called Forgotten well done on placing with it hugs Shadow
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Date: 12/5/2023 11:30:00 PM
Thank you so much for your visit. I would love to read your poem. This poem is about death of a relationship and darkness that dwells from heartache, when one feels betrayed by their beloved. I appreciate you reading always dear shadow
Date: 12/5/2023 7:12:00 AM
Just superb!
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Date: 12/5/2023 7:47:00 AM
Thank you so very much truly for your visit and support i am grateful always
Date: 12/4/2023 10:17:00 PM
Brilliant. Congratulations on a trophy win!
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Date: 12/5/2023 7:47:00 AM
Thank you so very much kind karen i appreciate your support truly
Date: 12/4/2023 1:11:00 PM
A fantastic write combining the styles of Poe and Plath Ink, congratulations on your win in Tom’s contest. Belle
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Date: 12/5/2023 7:47:00 AM
Thank you so very much kind belle i appreciate your support truly
Date: 12/4/2023 10:13:00 AM
Exquisite.
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Date: 12/5/2023 7:48:00 AM
Thank you always for your kind support truly
Date: 12/4/2023 9:20:00 AM
An engaging ebon and flow of Plath and Poe. I loved it, Ink Congratulations on your well-deserved win! I Am Anaya
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Date: 12/5/2023 7:48:00 AM
Ah thank you so very much truly anaya appreciate your support
Date: 12/4/2023 8:30:00 AM
awesome third place win Inky. you melded Plath and Poe decently and on its own it's a great poem. I think the only thing that kept it from a top placement was there was too much Inky lol (which is never a bad thing). it's hard to take on another persona, for sure. thanks so much for you fine effort
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Date: 12/4/2023 6:44:00 PM
Yes, I should take a stab at Plath. I might suck but it would be interesting to try. Never doubt yourself inky, there's a reason you're so well liked - you're good! Just keep working on toning things down a bit, making sure your alliterations and metaphors are like seasoning, not the main course.
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Date: 12/4/2023 6:16:00 PM
Ah im honored and humbled to even be in your top 3 given your taste in poetry, i never considered my voice as something you would like. Hah. This poem yes i did use poe and plath styles but comes also from a personal place which maybe is why my voice is there, and im so happy about that: one day down the line i might reach a place where i can actually imitate too, thats definitely a skill. And talent. I remember you did a poem once in my style on insta and was shockingly so similar. You are very good at this: now i would like to see you do plath. Thank you for placing me, but i would not have taken it personally if you didnt, however im truly grateful. P.s. i like your honesty in comments lol thank youuuu so very much
Date: 11/26/2023 9:38:00 PM
Your entry for this contest is excellent, Ink. Your passion and the depth of your words resonates with me, and my desires as I pen my humble poetry. This was a tough challenge to combine to poets' ways and philosophies. I always enjoy the alliteration in your poetry. Good luck in the contest! Hugs, Bill
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Date: 11/26/2023 5:42:00 PM
My, God... this broke my heart. Friend, I care for you... and I hope for your future, truest light.
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Date: 11/25/2023 9:06:00 PM
I wonder if Plath or Poe could ever rise to your level. I am not good enough to judge poetry. But it is my conviction. "Tomorrow, when I slumber six feet beneath breathing fiction, will you rewrite cruel convictions, that stole my purpose to live?". This is a hundred ton question you have hurled. This poem is so heartrending, piercing the very core, yet a delight to read because of its poetic excellence. Into my FAVE.
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:06:00 AM
I see no reason to rhyme,.. aaah that opening line!!! quill rests in a nameless coffin,.. oooo spooky !! Looove that!! weary winter, withers into white-washed wounds.. damn look at those alliterations flow papi!!! I love you,through dreams and more, me tooo aee.. stretching my fingers to your silvery sphere.. effortlessly taking my breath away aee!Let this poem be the last amulet to sorrowful sagas,as I untangle your vines .. ooo yess.. fuck me that ending just killed me!!!
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/25/2023 10:22:00 AM
Ahhh hahahah ur comments make my day papi miss u
Date: 11/25/2023 7:02:00 AM
Dear Ink, your outstanding poetry emanates great depth, poignancy, and wit. It's a wonderful salute to both Edgar Allan Poe and Sylvia Plath's literary legacy. My dear friend, the emotions are expertly linked. Each line is well constructed, perfectly expressing the core of the work. And the final stanza, a genuinely great choice for a conclusion, highlights your excellent composition's craftsmanship. BOL, with the contest
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:01:00 AM
Ah thank you so very much dear sotto, this is so very kind of you and i appreciate the well wishes too.
Date: 11/25/2023 6:42:00 AM
Your song of demise -- a wonderful tribute to both Poe and Plath. Wonderfully woven in emotions, my friend. Now your palette of romance paints a blurred portrait of hallowed misery; dreams forgotten with time --suffocating my final breath, this is the eternal demise—I’m dying before your dead eyes. A FAVE for your story telling and execution--Poe and Plath would be proud to read!
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:02:00 AM
Thank you so very much always for your kindness and for being so supportive i am so grateful for the fave and your sincere feedback truly always
Date: 11/25/2023 5:33:00 AM
I'm still trying to get my head around how to do this one.. I like how you kept to the style of Plath and used hints of Poe.. My problem is I think I will go tooo Poe.. I am always in awe of your poetry as you seem to write it so freely, and you post so proficiently.. I think Tommy will love this one.... the ending sums it up doesnt it, when we feel our demise has taken over our sense... let this pome be the last amulet to sorrowful sagas... I hope your saga is not the last poem... amazing dear.
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:03:00 AM
Ah thats what i thought too, Poe is easier to do for me too. But anyway this is a lame imitation of some great poets lol i cant wait to read yours dear .. thank you so much for your sweet and kind feedback truly grateful always for your generous support
Date: 11/25/2023 5:32:00 AM
You're gonna give Poe nightmares. and I may sleep with the lights on tonight. Nicely done and a quite unique take on....well.....y'know...
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:04:00 AM
Haha Poe will probably cringe . Poor Poe. Thank you so very much
Date: 11/25/2023 5:27:00 AM
Absolutely full of corking lines, so well expressed and that last line is a great line to close with, excellent write IE
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/25/2023 10:04:00 AM
Ah thank you Clive very much i appreciate your generous support
Date: 11/25/2023 4:38:00 AM
The ending is just sad … but beautiful as always ..
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:05:00 AM
Awwn i knew you wont like the ending .. but thank you dahlin
Date: 11/25/2023 4:13:00 AM
Wow IE ….what an amazing poem so deep, poignant and so IE clever!! Lovely my sweet friend! Debx
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Date: 11/25/2023 10:05:00 AM
Thank you sweet soul always for being so kind and supportive i appreciate you

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