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She's Always Drawing Mermaids

She’s always drawing mermaids, and they bear resemblance to their artist, for each one is but a girl. Dark, wavy, thick, long hair hides pre-pubescent breasts; Elysian the islands drawn for all her mermaids seem . . . so different from her own reality. The islands that she colors are her dream. She also yearns to swim the wondrous sea. She’d have a mermaid’s iridescent tail . . . No place between two legs to cause her shame! She’d be a strong free mermaid, but she’s frail, and so she sketches dreams she cannot claim. Her mother sees each picture that she’s drawn, yet fails to see her daughter's joy is gone. For William Kekaula's Sonnet's Salutation Poetry Contest From 2011, this is one of my sonnets with the deepest metaphorical meaning

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Date: 12/31/2021 10:17:00 AM
WOW...I wondered how I missed this but it is from years ago....and still magnificently crafted and metaphorically meaningful on so many levels. Congrats Andrea
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/31/2021 10:21:00 AM
thanks, it's one of my personal favorites with the use of metaphor!
Date: 12/30/2021 6:23:00 AM
Wow Andrea! This is simply brilliant. Poetry at its best! Congratulations on your top win. New year blessings my friend. xxoo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/31/2021 10:22:00 AM
thanks so much, dear friend. I am doing miserably in the premium contests!!
Date: 9/26/2020 12:23:00 AM
I've been moving forward in time through your sonnets, and was so excited to reach this one and read it again. It's one of my 10 favorites of yours, and a fave. A real psychological masterpiece. I'd love to hear the genesis of this write. Very touching, and bittersweet.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/26/2020 9:29:00 AM
wow, I am glad you like it as much as I do. It just came to me, perhaps as i was writing it using Buzz words or something. I really can't recall. Had I used it in that sonnet contest we entered?
Date: 10/1/2019 5:05:00 PM
So captivating, and heartbreaking, congratulations, Andrea, this is just beautiful.
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Date: 10/1/2019 3:44:00 PM
You completely surprised me with the ending...so sad. But she at least can live as a mermaid in her dreams. Congratulations on your top win Andrea.
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Date: 9/30/2019 9:00:00 PM
This one’s tears at the heart, and I have a great sense of yearning for all such young ones that have dreams that might not come true. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/3/2016 11:26:00 AM
Congrats Andrea to win on wonderful poem. Hugs
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Date: 5/2/2016 4:21:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea, and nicely done. Fran...
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Date: 5/2/2016 1:35:00 AM
Congratulations once again. A beautiful write
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Date: 5/1/2016 10:51:00 AM
Lovely one Andrea!
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Date: 5/1/2016 10:41:00 AM
This has a somber, though lovely tone of being the forgotten child. Nicely done, Andrea! Congrats to you!
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Date: 5/1/2016 8:45:00 AM
Amazing poem, Andrea. Congratulations on your podium placement in this Premier Contest! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/1/2016 8:02:00 AM
Great write as always. Congrats on your top placement.
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Date: 5/1/2016 12:09:00 AM
This Poem is WICKED GOOD. The brutal shift in line ten turns this sonnet on its head and spins the readers as well. Thanks for entering the contest with this one.
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Date: 12/27/2014 3:26:00 AM
You are so unique and good at what you do, which is why you are favorite. keep it flowing God bless. kelechi.
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Date: 8/17/2014 10:27:00 PM
Andrea, Congrats on your awesome Mermaid win <3 ~Linda~ <3
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Date: 8/17/2014 9:41:00 PM
Congrats on your win.. A truly fine write!!
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Date: 8/17/2014 9:11:00 PM
This takes the contest to a whole new level..you should have placed higher. congrats. BG
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Date: 8/17/2014 6:04:00 PM
Andrea, this is a powerful poem, subtly written it draws the reader in and then....exposes the lies and trauma. I don't do favorites often but this is going to be "faved". Great write.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/17/2014 6:16:00 PM
wow, thanks so much, john!!
Date: 1/27/2014 8:14:00 AM
This is very moving and subtlety portrayed. If you have a chance read my Canvas poem I wrote a few days ago it touches on this sad reality.
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Date: 9/26/2011 7:23:00 PM
this is a stunner andrea, one of the best I've read of yours...but down at 8? unbelievable, should've placed higher...oops should I be saying that with all the controversy currently raging? :)
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Date: 9/23/2011 8:43:00 PM
Heart warming poem Andrea. Congrats on Deb's and Carol's contests. Must run as have lots to do tonight. love phyl
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Date: 9/22/2011 8:12:00 AM
As always another absolutely amazing poem form you. I loved both the beauty and the irony behind it. Kudos to you...
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Date: 9/21/2011 7:01:00 PM
Simply, a very beautiful sonnet my friend! A heart touching piece full of art and mother-daughter love. Work has kept me away from the Soup; so glad to come back to a spectacular sonnet!
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Date: 9/21/2011 6:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your awesome win in Deb's "Children" Contest, Andrea. If I read this right, it is heartbreaking as there are so many little girls who are broken and parents are unaware... Love, Annalise
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