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Powerless

I look for your magic in the moonlight Listening for the secrets you will tell I wish for you to be my dream tonight I do not know if it is wrong or right You leave me powerless under your spell I look for your magic in the moonlight Take control of me I do not wish to fight You even mesmorize me with your smell I wish for you to be my dream tonight I wish to fly on your string like a kite Tethered to you I am secure and well I look for your magic in the moonlight So I travel with you into the night Nothing compares to the stories you tell I wish for you to be my dream tonight You my lover with your eyes shining bright You lifted me up whenever I fell I look for your magic in the moonlight I wish for you to be my dream tonight Anne's favorite poetry form contest. Be gentle Anne it is my first time trying this form.

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/21/2013 11:28:00 AM

Revisiting some masterpieces..... :-) PURE MAGIC

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2013 11:53:00 AM

Thanks Eileen! I appreciate you revisiting my poem.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/5/2013 5:30:00 AM

This one was sheer magic from start to finish!!!!

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday

Date: 4/5/2013 8:42:00 PM

Here you are, my dear poet friend, a master among the masters with such a big win on one of these particularly difficult forms! And this amazingly easy and natural flow, whatever the form, is your own and unique style that gives birth to a splendid gem! Proud of you, always! Hugs, Hanitra

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/5/2013 7:39:00 PM

Richard, ;-) Congratulations with Anne's Favorite Poetry Form: Villanelle! Have yourself a good one. always & forever*LINDA

Donna Jones

Date: 4/4/2013 5:30:00 PM

Well looks like you did just fine with this beauty and your winning spot..congrats..Donna

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/4/2013 8:02:00 PM

Thanks Donna

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 4/3/2013 8:29:00 PM

You captured the power and the magic of love perfectly. Big congrats! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/3/2013 10:28:00 PM

Thanks Cecilia

Emma Grindele

Date: 4/3/2013 5:39:00 PM

I really like this poem. (:

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/3/2013 7:53:00 PM

Thanks

Francine Roberts

Date: 4/2/2013 10:40:00 AM

great job for your first write in this form ( it was my first villanelle too) It's not an easy form this one, love your Romantic piece, congrats on your win

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/3/2013 10:30:00 PM

Thanks Francine

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 4/2/2013 9:20:00 AM

Well, its just that; dreamy and magical. Congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/3/2013 10:30:00 PM

Thanks Isaiah

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 4/2/2013 7:24:00 AM

You nailed the form..content aint bad either! Congrats on your big win. BG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2013 7:40:00 AM

Thanks Barbara.

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/2/2013 6:52:00 AM

First attempt?...you are a natural. Congrats, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2013 7:39:00 AM

Not so much a natural, I originally had it wrong and Russell Silvey helped get me on track.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 4/2/2013 6:49:00 AM

This is lovely... Congrats on your win ~A.O

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2013 7:38:00 AM

Much appreciated.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/1/2013 11:14:00 PM

Congratulations Richard: A very immpressive write that works so well with the refrains you came up with,,,just a beautiful flowing poem.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2013 7:37:00 AM

Thanks Suzanne

Richard D Seal

Date: 4/1/2013 6:52:00 PM

Very well done for a first timer Richard, I dare not even attempt it lol, Congratulatins on your win . Take care, Regards Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/1/2013 7:38:00 PM

Thanks Richard.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2013 3:16:00 PM

a well deserved win, and I can't believe I never saw this one yet. Congrats, Richard. WEll done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/1/2013 3:51:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I enjoyed yours as well.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/1/2013 2:29:00 PM

A worthy win. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/1/2013 2:38:00 PM

Thanks Joyce

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 3/31/2013 8:02:00 AM

Soupmail :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2013 11:47:00 AM

On my way

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 3/30/2013 6:26:00 PM

Happy easter Rick! :D Wishing you a blessing day, hug, Yanny

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2013 6:39:00 AM

Thanks Yanny I hope yours is blessed as well.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/30/2013 3:30:00 PM

I enjoyed your verse this afternoon, Happy Easter weekend. [I am sure you will grow to love the form ;)] Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2013 6:49:00 AM

Thanks Debbie

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/30/2013 11:39:00 AM

i look for your magic in your poetry, and i'm never disappointed...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/30/2013 2:17:00 PM

What a nice thing to say Harry, i am touched by your comment.

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 3/30/2013 11:23:00 AM

Wow, this is a complicated form but you are making it into a shining piece :D well done Rick! Wishing you a lovely Saturday there :D hug, Yanny

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/30/2013 2:18:00 PM

Thanks Yanny, I enjoyed the challenge.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/29/2013 9:59:00 PM

Richard, the magic of the words goes beyond all other considerations. I think it's superb. To my favorites! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/29/2013 10:45:00 PM

You honor me Eileen.

Donna Jones

Date: 3/29/2013 6:09:00 PM

Richard I think this is lovely......I do not understand any of these complicated forms...I leave them to you grand masters......I just adore reading them....Donna

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/29/2013 6:14:00 PM

I am just a beginner when it comes to these new forms. I am just diving in and hoping for the best. Thanks for commenting.

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/29/2013 5:26:00 PM

YES! You did a phenomenal job with this write my friend! I am impressed with the turnaround you've had from your first attempt to this one! This one sings of magnificence Richard! What a lovely piece, Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/29/2013 5:57:00 PM

Thanks Russell it was made possible by your feedback

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/29/2013 4:26:00 PM

You are very close to the form Richard! I believe the form goes along like this...A1 b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 A2 where the 'A1' and 'A2' lines repeat throughout the poem, and there are the rhyming 'a' lines, and 'b' lines! I know, it's complicated, that's why not many people do this form! However if it is done just right this form can truly shine! Of course what you have written here is very good, just not true to form! I hope I hadn't offended you with my review! Smile!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/29/2013 4:51:00 PM

No as I stated this is my first attempt so feedback is appreciated. Have a good night Russell