Richard Lamoureux Poet Villanelle

Powerless

I look for your magic in the moonlight
Listening for the secrets you will tell
I wish for you to be my dream tonight

I do not know if it is wrong or right
You leave me powerless under your spell
I look for your magic in the moonlight

Take control of me I do not wish to fight
You even mesmorize me with your smell 
I wish for you to be my dream tonight

I wish to fly on your string like a kite
Tethered to you I am secure and well
I look for your magic in the moonlight

So I travel with you into the night
Nothing compares to the stories you tell
I wish for you to be my dream tonight

You my lover with your eyes shining bright
You lifted me up whenever I fell
I look for your magic in the moonlight
I wish for you to be my dream tonight

Anne's favorite poetry form contest.
Be gentle Anne it is my first time trying this form.

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Eileen Manassian October 21, 2013 at 11:28 AM Revisiting some masterpieces..... :-) PURE MAGIC Richard Lamoureux October 21, 2013 at 11:53 AM Thanks Eileen! I appreciate you revisiting my poem.

Eileen Manassian September 5, 2013 at 5:30 AM This one was sheer magic from start to finish!!!!

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday April 5, 2013 at 8:42 PM Here you are, my dear poet friend, a master among the masters with such a big win on one of these particularly difficult forms! And this amazingly easy and natural flow, whatever the form, is your own and unique style that gives birth to a splendid gem! Proud of you, always! Hugs, Hanitra

Poet Destroyer A April 5, 2013 at 7:39 PM Richard, ;-) Congratulations with Anne's Favorite Poetry Form: Villanelle! Have yourself a good one. always & forever*LINDA

Donna Jones April 4, 2013 at 5:30 PM Well looks like you did just fine with this beauty and your winning spot..congrats..Donna Richard Lamoureux April 4, 2013 at 8:02 PM Thanks Donna

Cecilia Macfarlane April 3, 2013 at 8:29 PM You captured the power and the magic of love perfectly. Big congrats! Hugs Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2013 at 10:28 PM Thanks Cecilia

Emma Grindele April 3, 2013 at 5:39 PM I really like this poem. (: Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2013 at 7:53 PM Thanks

Francine Roberts April 2, 2013 at 10:40 AM great job for your first write in this form ( it was my first villanelle too) It's not an easy form this one, love your Romantic piece, congrats on your win Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2013 at 10:30 PM Thanks Francine

Isaiah Zerbst April 2, 2013 at 9:20 AM Well, its just that; dreamy and magical. Congratulations! Richard Lamoureux April 3, 2013 at 10:30 PM Thanks Isaiah

Barbara Gorelick April 2, 2013 at 7:24 AM You nailed the form..content aint bad either! Congrats on your big win. BG Richard Lamoureux April 2, 2013 at 7:40 AM Thanks Barbara.

Painted Hunter April 2, 2013 at 6:52 AM First attempt?...you are a natural. Congrats, Richard! Richard Lamoureux April 2, 2013 at 7:39 AM Not so much a natural, I originally had it wrong and Russell Silvey helped get me on track.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole April 2, 2013 at 6:49 AM This is lovely... Congrats on your win ~A.O Richard Lamoureux April 2, 2013 at 7:38 AM Much appreciated.

Suzanne Delaney April 1, 2013 at 11:14 PM Congratulations Richard: A very immpressive write that works so well with the refrains you came up with,,,just a beautiful flowing poem. Richard Lamoureux April 2, 2013 at 7:37 AM Thanks Suzanne

Richard D Seal April 1, 2013 at 6:52 PM Very well done for a first timer Richard, I dare not even attempt it lol, Congratulatins on your win . Take care, Regards Richard Richard Lamoureux April 1, 2013 at 7:38 PM Thanks Richard.

Andrea Dietrich April 1, 2013 at 3:16 PM a well deserved win, and I can't believe I never saw this one yet. Congrats, Richard. WEll done! Richard Lamoureux April 1, 2013 at 3:51 PM Thanks Andrea, I enjoyed yours as well.

Joyce Johnson April 1, 2013 at 2:29 PM A worthy win. Congratulations. Love, Joyce Richard Lamoureux April 1, 2013 at 2:38 PM Thanks Joyce

Yanny Widjanarko March 31, 2013 at 8:02 AM Soupmail :) Richard Lamoureux March 31, 2013 at 11:47 AM On my way

Yanny Widjanarko March 30, 2013 at 6:26 PM Happy easter Rick! :D Wishing you a blessing day, hug, Yanny Richard Lamoureux March 31, 2013 at 6:39 AM Thanks Yanny I hope yours is blessed as well.

Debbie Guzzi March 30, 2013 at 3:30 PM I enjoyed your verse this afternoon, Happy Easter weekend. [I am sure you will grow to love the form ;)] Light & Love Richard Lamoureux March 31, 2013 at 6:49 AM Thanks Debbie

Harry Horsman March 30, 2013 at 11:39 AM i look for your magic in your poetry, and i'm never disappointed... Richard Lamoureux March 30, 2013 at 2:17 PM What a nice thing to say Harry, i am touched by your comment.

Yanny Widjanarko March 30, 2013 at 11:23 AM Wow, this is a complicated form but you are making it into a shining piece :D well done Rick! Wishing you a lovely Saturday there :D hug, Yanny Richard Lamoureux March 30, 2013 at 2:18 PM Thanks Yanny, I enjoyed the challenge.

Eileen Manassian March 29, 2013 at 9:59 PM Richard, the magic of the words goes beyond all other considerations. I think it's superb. To my favorites! :) Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2013 at 10:45 PM You honor me Eileen.

Donna Jones March 29, 2013 at 6:09 PM Richard I think this is lovely......I do not understand any of these complicated forms...I leave them to you grand masters......I just adore reading them....Donna Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2013 at 6:14 PM I am just a beginner when it comes to these new forms. I am just diving in and hoping for the best. Thanks for commenting.

Russell Sivey March 29, 2013 at 5:26 PM YES! You did a phenomenal job with this write my friend! I am impressed with the turnaround you've had from your first attempt to this one! This one sings of magnificence Richard! What a lovely piece, Great Work!! Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2013 at 5:57 PM Thanks Russell it was made possible by your feedback

Russell Sivey March 29, 2013 at 4:26 PM You are very close to the form Richard! I believe the form goes along like this...A1 b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2 / a b A1 A2 where the 'A1' and 'A2' lines repeat throughout the poem, and there are the rhyming 'a' lines, and 'b' lines! I know, it's complicated, that's why not many people do this form! However if it is done just right this form can truly shine! Of course what you have written here is very good, just not true to form! I hope I hadn't offended you with my review! Smile! Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2013 at 4:51 PM No as I stated this is my first attempt so feedback is appreciated. Have a good night Russell