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Postscript ...inspired by 'Old Song' by Hart Crane Your smile took issue with the sun, a flash of purest fire; it blinded me to look upon you, radiant with desire! Now you are lost to me I know, and as I sleep I pray the distant orb's less fiery glow will keep you safe alway. Your face will flicker to a haze, a fading memory; and I shall spend my waning days adrift in misery.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 11/17/2008 7:34:00 AM
Very pure and real Keith. Enjoyed throughly reading it. Thanks for the warm comments. Lets keep creating poems!
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Date: 11/15/2008 10:17:00 PM
Thank you Keith for commenting so nicely on my poem Autumn Rain. I looked for your poetry and found this one. It is lovely and I like your style. I will read more. Joyce
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Date: 11/15/2008 5:42:00 PM
Beautiful and heart breaking, keith Lainie
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Date: 11/15/2008 9:07:00 AM
Nice use of imagery. I like the alliteration in the last stanza. You may want to change alway to always in the eighth line. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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Date: 11/15/2008 5:30:00 AM
Wow, you got this one just right..some beautiful phrases .. BG
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Date: 11/15/2008 5:06:00 AM
I defy anyone to improve on this piece, Keith. Thanks for reading "Ping." Love, daver
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Date: 11/15/2008 12:46:00 AM
Lovely and so sad,Keith.I really enjoyed reading this one so much.Blessings!D.
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Date: 11/14/2008 11:59:00 PM
Very imaginative and good concept.
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