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Pirouetting On Cloud Banks

Dancing in space Waltzing in the universe Pirouetting on cloud banks Aah yes Come with me Let’s dance together Ancient flute notes echo Amidst starshine and lost memories I feel you there beside me Peeking around planets Your eyes seeking me out Our fibers entwined Through passion and loss Our unspoken words Spun like gold thread Around our bleeding hearts An inhale ~ a memory Meeting you in the ocean Immersing ourselves in blankets of mist and fog Lavender foam adorned with turquoise sparkles Glinting off wave tips My nakedness enveloped Salty tears My mouth open Searching for you I walk through time Through walls of water The waves part As I find my way Inward Onward To the sacred place within I feel the air ~ quiet now My fingertips sense my surroundings I smell your heartbeat In darkness my palms touch yours A vibration of heat Of laughter Of knowing Of ancient memories Coupling our souls Forever

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/13/2023 5:05:00 PM

The freedom of dance floats across your poem with grace and "ancient memories" Susan. A beautiful write. :)

Susan Lawrence
Date: 11/18/2023 6:41:00 PM

Hi Linda, Thank you for your visit . Yes ancient memories for sure . Your comments bring a smile . Hugs, Susan :)

Bill Baker

Date: 9/22/2023 8:38:00 AM

I went looking for a poem I missed of yours, Susan. I was blessed with this beautiful and soulful poem. A FAV for my list. The depth of your feeling and the sensitivity of expression touch my soul. It is always a joy to read your poetry. I'll look further back in case I missed another of these treasures. Smiles ~ Blessings my dear friend. Bill

Susan Lawrence
Date: 9/23/2023 8:40:00 AM

Dear Bill, You are such a gem ! Honestly such a smile you bring to my face with your words and participation. I am so happy that you feeel joy when reading my poems. It makes writing so very meaningful and sacred. Sending all good thoughts and blessings to you and yours, Susan :)

Timothy Ray

Date: 4/1/2023 4:13:00 PM

i am blessed to follow such a magical romantic....Nuff said

Susan Lawrence
Date: 4/5/2023 10:35:00 AM

You must be one yourself Timothy ! Blessed to have you reading my poems . Susan :)

Sally Eslinger

Date: 2/13/2023 5:44:00 AM

Susan, lots of travelling going on in this poem! Still , probably due to the “blankets,” felt like it would “return to base” or the narrator, the lover. Blessings over you! sally

Susan Lawrence
Date: 2/14/2023 6:34:00 AM

Blessings to you dear Sally and thank you! Susan :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/12/2023 2:25:00 PM

This is rather dynamically beautiful; the imagery allows the reader to feel what the poet feels; beautifully done.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 2/14/2023 6:34:00 AM

Thank you M.L. I am happy my poem moved you ! Blessings and all good wishes, Susan :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/1/2023 10:19:00 AM

This is an amazing poem Susan, and your last verse is breathtaking. Be well my friend and keep posting your miracle poems Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 2/2/2023 2:25:00 PM

Dear Jennifer . I love your spirit ! Thank you my friend . In gratitude for you . I hope you are feeling healthy and well . Hugs and all good wishes, Susan :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/28/2023 5:13:00 PM

My fingertips sense my surroundings I smell your heartbeat…and we wonder what that scent is.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/29/2023 8:08:00 AM

Hi Kim ! Thanks for your visit . Hugs . Happy Sunday . Susan :)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 1/25/2023 7:11:00 AM

Soul contentment Susan, breathtaking!

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/27/2023 2:14:00 PM

Ahh yes ...the soul contentment ! Thank you dear James Susan :)

Katharine L. Sparrow

Date: 1/21/2023 9:24:00 PM

This is exquisite! so many sensations, cascading over one another, in the pursuit of togetherness that is more than just that. I loved this piece.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/22/2023 7:13:00 AM

Dear Katherine , I am happy to see you and have you visit ! Thank you for your lovely comments. I appreciate your presence. All the best , Susan :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2023 2:38:00 PM

hey, susan, I sent a soupmail to you.

Michael Tor

Date: 1/15/2023 2:14:00 PM

Your passion is felt in this lovely Piece Susan. You have such a passionate Heart love reading your Poetry my Dear...

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/18/2023 7:21:00 PM

Dear Michael , Thank you dear one . In gratitude for you . Susan :)

Robert Gorelick

Date: 1/12/2023 2:10:00 PM

Am always enamored by how you paint vividly and subtly with both brush and words, bringing the Native American's culture and spirituality to life, inspired me to look past 2-demensional stereo types as I worked on description of Billy the Kid" Thank you for your visit, Susan! Robert

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/13/2023 9:29:00 PM

Dear Robert , So happy for your visit . Humbled by your words and expressions ! Happy to have been a bit of inspiration . Sending gratitude your way ! Happy weekend. Loved “Billy “ ! Susan :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/10/2023 6:31:00 PM

Susan, please come by. ~Anaya 1/11/23 Thank you, Susan.

David Kavanagh

Date: 1/9/2023 1:00:00 PM

Exceptional writing again Susan, a faith healing perhaps, from one who has faith in the universe, thanks for the trip through time and space, you really are the soups relaxation therapist, cheers David

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/13/2023 9:27:00 PM

David . Hello and thank you ! In gratitude for your visit and kind words . I love the idea of being Soups relaxation therapist ! Happy weekend to you ! Susan :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 1/5/2023 10:24:00 AM

Such a wonderful piece of poetry full of heart and soul and beauty... I am mesmerized by the journey your words take me on...

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/6/2023 1:30:00 PM

Oh Kelly, Such lovely comments. Thank you so very much . I am thrilled my poem moved you . Big hugs, Susan :)

Paul Callus

Date: 1/3/2023 12:27:00 PM

Your invitation to dance on cloud banks would be hard to not accept, dear poetess! The imagery and appeal to the senses captivate our attention, pull us in the wake of emotions till we arrive at that "sacred place within". ~ Thank you for yet another exquisite offering, Susan. Warm regards & Hugs my friend. // paul

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/6/2023 1:29:00 PM

Dear Paul , So happy to see you here . Your visits are always gifts to me . Thank you for your insight , participation and lovely remarks . Big hugs and all good wishes to you and yours . Onward to more of all good things ! Love, Susan :)

Pashang Salehi

Date: 1/2/2023 10:15:00 AM

How beautiful... Lovely poem.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/5/2023 10:27:00 PM

Thank you Pashang ! Happy for your visit and comments. Susan :)

Mike Gentile

Date: 1/2/2023 6:32:00 AM

Susan, you have such a way with words! I am always so moved by you lines such as " I smell your heartbeat" and the very title itself! Just beautiful is such an understatement! I did you a Happy New Year xxoo

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/5/2023 7:32:00 AM

Dear Mike . Happiest of New years to you ! Thank you for your beautiful comments . So happy to be on this journey with you . Big hugs, Susan :) xx

Timothy Ray

Date: 12/28/2022 8:56:00 PM

your exuberance is divine....it is champagne served while lost in the lavender fields of France....totally immersing Susan....take a bow,

Susan Lawrence
Date: 1/2/2023 7:25:00 AM

I love the thought dear Timothy !

Timothy Ray
Date: 1/1/2023 8:05:00 AM

have you ever tried....going for a novel?

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/31/2022 11:42:00 AM

I love your response Timothy and your depth of love and heart. Thank you . Happy healthy 2023 to you and yours. Hugs, Susan :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/25/2022 1:31:00 PM

A lovely write. I wish you would write more. Merry/Blessed Christmas........................

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/31/2022 11:39:00 AM

Paula, Thank you my friend. Your presence is so appreciated. Happy healthy 2023 to you! Susan :)

Ann Peck

Date: 12/24/2022 8:52:00 AM

This is so lovely, Susan--every line! I couldn't find one line I loved more than the others. Your heart is so full of love. I hope you have Happy Holidays and a Merry Christmas!

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/31/2022 11:38:00 AM

Dearest Ann, Thank you for your visit and kind loving words. I send you big hugs and all good wishes for a healthy happy amazing 2023 !!!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 12/17/2022 3:10:00 PM

Love this, it's rather serene; love space and the inspiration it provides; well-penned piece.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/19/2022 7:14:00 AM

M.L. , So happy to see you back ! Thank you for your visit and lovely comments. Blessings, Susan :)

Deb M

Date: 12/17/2022 12:15:00 AM

Wow Susan what a wonderful mind you have to able to write so beautifully evoking such emotion…..Debx

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/19/2022 7:10:00 AM

Dear Deb , Thank you so much for your beautiful words . I am so appreciative of you . Big hugs and all good wishes to you this holiday season . Susan :)

Laura Leiser

Date: 12/15/2022 7:26:00 PM

Susan, your poem is simply inspirational! Your poetic words leap from the page..dancing in space, waltzing in the universe…such wonderful imagery! Your sensual tones draw one in with anticipation…such beauty! Love this and a fave! :)

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/16/2022 7:20:00 PM

Dear Laura , In gratitude for your visit and humbled by you Fave ! Thank you . I am thrilled you could take this journey with me . Hugs to you , Susan :)

Paul Bell

Date: 12/15/2022 6:55:00 AM

Well that warmed me up on an icy Thursday. Some journeys you just want to continue.

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/16/2022 7:18:00 PM

Dear Paul . How wonderful to have you visit ! I am so happy my poem warmed you up ! Lovely . All the best to you , Susan :)

Susan Lawrence
Date: 12/16/2022 7:18:00 PM

Dear Paul . How wonderful to have you visit ! I am so happy my poem warmed you up ! Lovely . All the best to you , Susan :)