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                             For:   Brian Strand’s Imagine Contest
                     Inspired by: Edward Hopper’s Painting: ‘AUTOMAT’.
                     Awarded: 1st Place

. What a fool I am Clinging to a broken dream That can never be the same Coming all this way Thinking I could change your mind Oh! so true that love is blind Sitting here alone Starring at an empty chair That throws the truth in my face It hurts! To love you So I’ll board the morning train And forget you once again. ~~~~~~~~ Written: October 9th, 2009 For: Brian Strand’s Imagine Contest Inspired by: Edward Hopper’s Painting: ‘AUTOMAT’. 1st Place

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Harry Horsman

Date: 9/30/2020 9:07:00 PM

Wow, still so fresh today, this wonderful Choka, being an Elvis fan the title drew me. He would have loved this too!

Elaine George
Date: 10/4/2020 4:28:00 AM

hanks for stopping by and for your comments, dear Harry...Much appreciate. ~ Elaine Reply

Audrey Haick

Date: 11/5/2009 9:41:00 PM

Congratulations on winning first place in Brian's contest!! Peace and love, Audrey

Date: 10/23/2009 1:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your first place finish in Brian's contest my friend. I am so happy for you. I knew this was a winner the first time I read it. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 10/23/2009 5:34:00 AM

Congratulations, Laine, on placing in Brian’s Imagine contest with this wonderful choka. The painting was inspiring. Your creativity excels. Smiles, Dane Ann

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 10/22/2009 1:23:00 PM

Congratulations, Elaine. Well done. Thank you for your comments. Love, Iolanda

Brandee Augustus

Date: 10/19/2009 12:19:00 PM

I totally get how this relates to the painting and your title brings all this together! Well done! Congratulations on your first place win!

Brian Strand

Date: 10/19/2009 8:03:00 AM

Just to say Elaine I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments and kind words today.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/18/2009 7:04:00 PM

Congrats on your poetry winning contest entry. Your poem is quite touching and very moving..

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/18/2009 2:39:00 PM

I picked this painting too..you did a supurb job and deserved the win. Love, BG

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/18/2009 11:11:00 AM

Congratulations on your 1st place WIN with this wonderful piece, Lainie! Love, Robin

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/18/2009 10:46:00 AM

Well done, great poem!! congrats on the big win!!

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/18/2009 8:47:00 AM

You were able to tell a whole story, sad tale in this wonderful imginative poem! Congratulations on this winning entry, Elaine. Well deserved! ~ Love, Carrie

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/18/2009 6:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your first place win in Brian's Imagine Contest Lainie. Love, Carol

Donna Golden

Date: 10/18/2009 1:15:00 AM

Congratulations on your FIRST place win, Lainie! Hugs, Donna

Brian Strand

Date: 10/18/2009 1:09:00 AM

Congrats on your success in my contest Elaine.Rgds Brian.My latest contest'Poet Laureate' is now open.I will forward you prize in the coming week.

Kim Hilliker

Date: 10/17/2009 1:41:00 PM

Wonderful Choka, Elaine! Best of luck in the contest.

Jay Loveless

Date: 10/16/2009 10:02:00 AM

i feel ya. careing abotu someone who has someone else never works, even if they care about you too, if they arent willing to have you and not the other person....well okay technically im the other person and not the gf....anyways if the person you care about cant leave their gf/bf for you then its gonna lead to nothing but people getting hurt....this sucks...well semi talking about my situation lol your poem is awesome anyways keep it up -raiin

Brian Strand

Date: 10/15/2009 7:47:00 AM

Thank you for your encouragement today Elaine.Also to say,thank you for your mail, I airmailed my chapbook to you this morning.Rgds Brian

Daver Austin

Date: 10/13/2009 7:40:00 AM

I love this form. It hits the area between haiku and tanka. By the way, as usual, I love your writing. Love, daver

John Freeman

Date: 10/12/2009 6:13:00 PM

Beautiful Choka Elaine. Good luck in the contest. Sincerely, Love, moses

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/12/2009 6:53:00 AM

Good luck in Brian's contest. I love the presentation of the idea. It is amazing how many different thoughts came from the same pictures. Thanks for the comments on my work. Keep writing. Sara

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/11/2009 7:03:00 PM

nicely penned, Ilike thiside you choose...it could go alot of ways.

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/11/2009 3:57:00 PM

This is such a beautifully written Choka, Lainie. I love your view on this lovely and intriquing painting! Good luck in Brians' contest! Love, Robin

Date: 10/11/2009 3:14:00 PM

Interesting view on the painting. You're words make the scene come to life. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a good week. Karen

Nicole Sharon Brown

Date: 10/11/2009 2:24:00 PM

I sure does hurt! I can relate to this! Preach on, sister. Write on, sister.