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Of Dreams And Wings I speak of night as though it were a soup astir of lovely taste - a kiss, no haste; bright stars our light. I speak of love as though I could have what I would, and where and when, and who, and then be dreaming of the one who'd come into my life and be my wife - she'd never part with me. Her heart would be my drum. I dream of birds throughout the night soaring in flight, above my pain. Awake, I strain to find the words. I speak of dreams as though designed by my own mind. It soothes my soul to feign control (or so it seems). Can I release control of things with soaring wings that I speak of: birds, dreams, and love, and find my peace? But then I learned the more I tried to plan this ride or stoke that fire, the flames grew higher and dreams were burned until I heard a distant beat: her drum, her sweet, pure melody - our destiny: music meets words. Our song's not through, though years fly by I still sing my best memory: that day when we each said, "I do". Note - In this form, each stanza consists of three tercets in iambic tetrameter, with rhymes on the 4th and 8th syllable and the internal rhyme scheme of A - B B - C C - A written 11 July 2021

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Date: 11/4/2022 7:17:00 AM
Dearest PoBro, I am overwhelmed by the elegant beauty, the depth and breadth, the rich radiant resonance of your of rhythmic romantic masterwork. I adore the rhyme scheme and the poetry form used to perfectly frame your poetically lush emotions. I stand in complete awe of the textured layering of your exquisite artistry, John. If I could fav this breathtaking masterpiece a thousand times I would, fortunately however, I can fav it once to read a thousand times instead. A swoon-worthy tribute to surrender, love and to your precious wife. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. I'm thrilled to share the podium with you, John. Thank you for sharing your immense talent with the world. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~your PS-PS <3
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Date: 10/31/2022 6:46:00 AM
Well done John! A form so complicated, yet so smooth under your pen. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 10/27/2022 9:45:00 AM
John, your verses always seem as though they're lyrics to a sweet song, and so it is with this beautiful compilation of lines in this winning entry. My sincere congratulations to you, kind sir.
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Date: 10/27/2022 5:32:00 PM
What a lovely thing to say, Lin. I used to be a songwriter (back during the Millard Fillmore administration) so it's nice to know my poems still have a lyrical aspect to them. I'm encouraged by your support, it is deeply and sincerely appreciated ~ John
Date: 10/26/2022 1:40:00 PM
John, this is technically brilliant and very romantic. What a lovely tribute to your wife, Janet. Congratulations on your win on Mile 17 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 18 has already started.
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Date: 10/27/2022 1:26:00 PM
Mark, thank you for your esteem and placement, also for remembering my wife's name is Janet! Your marathon has kept me on my toes and exposed me to many wonderful writes from the marvelous poets we are surrounded by. Thank you for sponsoring!
Date: 10/26/2022 11:03:00 AM
John, dear friend, dreams, sometimes, have a way of coming true as we send them on wings of wishes even though they often live in a frenzied state. Such a beautiful tribute to your wife and to your marriage. Congratulations on your win! Blessings! It's outta here!
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Date: 10/27/2022 1:23:00 PM
Thank you, my dear R&Rsis for your kind affirmation and encouragement in the realm of poetic creations. I always appreciate your deep reads and comprehension and your very thoughtful (and fun) comments! Enjoy your day ~ R&Rbro
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Date: 10/27/2022 1:23:00 PM
Thank you, my dear R&Rsis for your kind affirmation and encouragement in the realm of poetic creations. I always appreciate your deep reads and comprehension and your very thoughtful (and fun) comments! Enjoy your day ~ R&Rbro
Date: 8/17/2022 11:03:00 AM
John, congratulations on your win in the contest with this stunning poem, that leaves me breathless. Your are quite the romantic~you have a lucky wife indeed. :)Paulette
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Date: 8/19/2022 8:58:00 AM
So grateful for your sweet comment, Paula. Hope your summer is going well. Hugs ~ John
Date: 8/15/2022 5:48:00 AM
Stunning write John! "Her heart would be my drum." so touching! Congratulations on your win! Linda
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Date: 8/19/2022 8:55:00 AM
Linda, thank you for reading and commenting - always appreciated, my friend ~ John
Date: 8/13/2022 2:28:00 PM
I see you got a podium win with this gem, John. Way to go. BIG Congrats to you
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Date: 8/13/2022 7:07:00 PM
Thank you for the kind affirmation, my friend
Date: 8/12/2022 5:16:00 PM
John, beautiful poem and congratulations on your win in the contest, blessings ~ Constance
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Date: 8/12/2022 9:08:00 PM
Constance, I appreciate your lovely encouragement and congrats. Blessings to you ~ John
Date: 8/12/2022 12:59:00 PM
Congratulations on this win. WOW!!!  What a beautiful write/picture. I love the picture. Today, be blessed with your win as you writing away...................
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Date: 8/12/2022 9:07:00 PM
Thank you for the sweet comment and congrats, Paula! Hope you had a great day ~ John
Date: 8/12/2021 10:52:00 AM
John, I had faved this one as well, so between the other one about your wife (allies?) and this one, I think maybe this one even better. Also it is very well metered.
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Date: 8/12/2022 9:05:00 PM
Thanks Andrea. Wow, you left this comment a year ago and I'm just now responding. Got to get better at my correspondence turnaround!
Date: 7/17/2021 2:47:00 AM
Great write, John, loved the tempo of the rhymes:) you have a great flair of writing beautiful poetry:)
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Date: 7/17/2021 11:40:00 PM
Your words are music to my ears, dear Jo. Thank you so very much for your kindness. May God bless you now and always ~ John
Date: 7/15/2021 5:28:00 PM
This read like the work of a master poet (I guess because it is!) Great internal rhymes, and the flow feels like a river twisting towards the sea, yes this is music meeting words, to my mind like a gentle guitar~
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Date: 7/15/2021 11:39:00 PM
You are much too kind, my friend. Love your simile of river and sea. I so appreciate your affirmation.
Date: 7/15/2021 2:04:00 PM
Her heart would be my drum, how effective is that in love, every word is well penned, thank you for sharing your creative masterpiece with me today :)
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Date: 7/15/2021 11:38:00 PM
Thank you for dancing with the drumbeat, Rose
Date: 7/12/2021 6:24:00 PM
wow, john, this is SO good!!! What a way to come back to Soup. FAVE
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Date: 7/15/2021 11:37:00 PM
Your fave gives me a big smile, friend.
Date: 7/12/2021 11:40:00 AM
Very romantic verse john, it rolls off the tongue as you read it. Hope you're well. Tom
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Date: 7/15/2021 11:36:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed this, Tom. Family and I are all well, hope the same is true for you and yours.
Date: 7/12/2021 8:54:00 AM
You began with a solemn color that in the last stanza flipped to the color of blessings. I didn't see it coming which made me 'ahhh'. The solemn stanzas of the every man's dreams - all can relate. When the tone flipped you gave us the blessing that arrived in your life. We never get what we want by Thursday. I enjoyed being poetically compelled to sit here with your poem for awhile ...CayCay
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Date: 7/15/2021 11:35:00 PM
Loved your comment more than you can know, CayCay. Thank you for the investment in time and thought. Blessings ~ John
Date: 7/12/2021 8:44:00 AM
Beautifully written. So nice John! :)
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John Watt
Date: 7/15/2021 11:35:00 PM
Thank you for your thoughtfulness, Heidi

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