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Not Quite Finished

I A poem is struggling within Finished and unfinished, a thin Line of demarcation. I mark your words They germinate, but like swords Diction bears contradictions in wombs Some do good, some usher us to tombs II So, it's not love or hate, not that mix I'm struggling to let it out, find a fix For what ails my soul. My heart happy My will, patience strong, streets unhappy The environment - a topic for another day - Is it my conscience, aesthetic sense & sway That irk me, as evening & sunset beckon Yet your words like 'silence' & waves & skies beckon If I write of True Peace, true coexistence, His creation Will I abort the poem, or meaning, deLiGHTful Imagination

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Valsa George

Date: 4/9/2022 1:54:00 AM

"A poem is struggling within Finished and unfinished, a thin Line of demarcation". ..... Love this opening ! It happens so often ....May you find a satisfying expression for it, soon !

Anil Deo
Date: 4/9/2022 2:01:00 AM

My sister, my sister,, Mera bhenjee, ThanX in Jesus's name. With blessings for THAT poem in utero, I look forward as well. Shalom shalom. Great blessings, write on

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/9/2022 12:30:00 AM

You sure do ignite imagination, Anil. I can feel the vibes as i read, your poetry. For myself, i am your first verse, the second one, is the frustration, of the world out of control, and my bit part, a pebble that drops in the ocean.

Anil Deo
Date: 4/9/2022 1:58:00 AM

Sir Harry, akways blessed by your visit. That u would pinder & share ... Is Worth Writing & Waiting for. Shalom shalom Peace

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/8/2022 1:35:00 PM

It think you should use your delightfully imagination to create a fulfilling happy dream for yourself, that is what writers are privi to, :) nice one Anil

Anil Deo
Date: 4/9/2022 1:56:00 AM

OnMystic you have come, with cheerfulness. Brava, & thanX so much. In the LORD (JESUS) luvU

Joe Dimino

Date: 4/8/2022 10:31:00 AM

"My heart happy My will, patience strong, streets unhappy The environment - a topic for another day - " For sure...in the world but not of it. True, anything we write or say, cannot compare to God's perfect effulgence. That is why He wants us to write, to live, our baby steps to Him. Anything not worked for is of no value. Working is a process of creation. It is the idea willed into possession by feeling desire. Desire is only wrong when it is not guided by pure love. Great poem! My guessing.

Anil Deo
Date: 4/8/2022 11:13:00 AM

ThanX so much. I am blessed by such thoughtful responses to my struggle to express my artistic/ poetic side. Shalom shalom father DeMino