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I walked up the dark, creaky attic stairs and opened the door, this is where I used to play, and even slept so long, long ago. Everything was covered with dust, parchment gray, and as I entered air borne dust particles swirled. The entire attic was faded, pale and muted and had the musty smell, of dust. Yet, it all seemed exactly as I had left it, and although the contents were time-stained under a veil of grime and soot, it was mine- for grandma had died and nobody wanted any of this stuff. I knew the treasures that lay beneath the years of filth, and dust. The attic enchanted me- just as it had, when I was a child. Oh the memories in the silent dust! Over there in the corner is an old chest, and near the window a rocking chair, a dresser, and a brass bed. Yes, time-scarred, but beautiful to me, not ruined- just old and dusty. ______________________________ March 21, 2017 Poetry/Prose/Memories, In The Silent Dust Copyright Protected, ID 17- 886-289-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. Submitted to the contest, June 2018, Premiere sponsor, Brian Strand Sixth Place _______________________________ Written for the contest, Dust sponsor, Shadow Hamilton Fourth Place

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Date: 6/9/2018 10:43:00 PM
Lovely, BW. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 6/9/2018 5:35:00 PM
Oh, I adore this, Constance - must fav! This brought back many good feelings, (and a couple not-so-good), but all beautiful! Congrats on your well-deserved win, my friend! Blessings! :-)
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Date: 6/8/2018 9:57:00 AM
Congratulations for your win BW :)
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Date: 4/2/2017 5:51:00 AM
Some great descriptions... I can almost taste the musty air in that attic. Well done on your win!
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Date: 3/29/2017 2:58:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Constance:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/29/2017 9:59:00 AM
Your poems always have what it takes to draw the reader in, whether rhyming or prose. Congratulations Constance on another winning poem!
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Date: 3/29/2017 6:58:00 AM
Memories take us past the dust to the treasure; this poem is a treasure BW, congrats on your placement.
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Date: 3/29/2017 2:45:00 AM
That poem makes me sad and happy at the same time. Great write. Congratulations, Kai
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Date: 3/28/2017 9:39:00 PM
Congrats on your win! I remember the attic in my parents' house; I spent much time up there when I was little and loved the old dusty things.
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Date: 3/28/2017 9:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, BW, as children curious minds cannot help but go on adventures even if it is in the attic ~*
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Date: 3/27/2017 9:54:00 AM
Certain things seem to draw one in, as your poem just did:) a 7, Constance, for this enchanting write:)
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Date: 3/27/2017 12:52:00 AM
This was beautifully written and showed great imagery. I really liked this poem :)
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Date: 3/22/2017 6:21:00 AM
Such wonderful imagery Constance I can picture the scene so vividly - you draw the reader in so well:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Constance La France
Date: 3/23/2017 9:17:00 AM
Jan, thanks for that nice comment and the hugs ~
Date: 3/22/2017 5:52:00 AM
Hello Broken Wings. This entry is timeless. Oh yes, the life and memories of yesterday. You have expressed this moment in time wonderfully and with emotion as well. I very much enjoyed the title as your words stayed true to it. This was a pleasure to turn to. Well done entirely.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:18:00 AM
Lisa, thanks for visiting my poem and for that truly lovely comment ~
Date: 3/21/2017 11:08:00 PM
Great imagery, BW! You really draw the reader in. GL in the contest.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:18:00 AM
Wolf, thanks for the compliment and for the visit ~
Date: 3/21/2017 5:54:00 PM
You were greatly inspired by the challenge of DUST, dear. It's in your usual poignant style! Sure to do well.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:19:00 AM
Andrea, thanks so much for the nice comment and visit ~
Date: 3/21/2017 5:48:00 PM
Old and dusty after a period of sitting and waiting. How lovely it is that you can visit and take solice. It must have been very pleasant back then. It is a treasure. You are a very prolific writer and the images are sincere and very striking.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:20:00 AM
Duke, you always leave me the most beautiful comments, thank you~
Date: 3/21/2017 5:15:00 PM
This is precious my friend, I can picture this perfectly as I read. When I was a kid my parents bought an old three story home, the third story was the attic. I can recall climbing those stairs with such anticipation and excitement hoping to find a treasure. I think I found an old car battery and some venetian blinds but I did find a treasure...the attic was remodeled to be my bedroom. A 14 year old with his own floor, I was the coolest kid in town. : ) Thanks so much for sharing this today.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:23:00 AM
Hi Chris, my grandma had a three story house with an attic, and it became my room, what a delight for a young girl to have her own floor, grandma's attic did hold lots of treasures though, more than I state in the poem, there was old jewelry, and well things old, thanks for visiting ~
Date: 3/21/2017 4:44:00 PM
I lived with my grandma for awhile as a child and she made me a special place in the attic and it was spotless clean. I loved the oval window overlooking the street and there was a large oval mirror where I used look at myself dressed in grandma's old clothes. As a child it was a magical place.
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Date: 3/23/2017 9:25:00 AM
In that attic is where I started writing my first poems, childish in the beginning, about my cat, my doll, but as time went on deep and sad, I started to pour my emotions into my words, and thus a poet was born ~

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