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Kilt Atilt

there once was a man from Kingsbury who put on his kilt in a hurry in a bit of a flap he forgot his jockstrap a chill wind put him in a flurry

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Beryl Edmonds

Date: 3/11/2023 9:33:00 PM

It wasn’t just that he’d forgot his jockstrap - Put the man from Kingsbury in a flap - Also last night’s curry - Added to the flurry - Worry was hurry to find a stopgap……. Belle

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/12/2023 3:28:00 PM

LOL dear Belle. I love your comment! Thanks! :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/11/2023 6:34:00 PM

-- if not a 'furry fury!' ~ from the Windy City. (lol).

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 7:12:00 PM

oh no! Glad kilts aren't the style in Chicago! LOL

R J. Elless

Date: 3/11/2023 12:14:00 PM

Linda, such a funny one, it's great. the name is catchy. Keep Rolling

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 7:07:00 PM

Thanks. Rollin on... :)

Speaks Volumes

Date: 3/11/2023 10:28:00 AM

Super Linda, couldn't be better.

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 10:54:00 AM

Many thanks Wen! :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/11/2023 10:20:00 AM

LOL…ouch

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 10:52:00 AM

;) Thanks Kim :)

Jim Slaughter

Date: 3/11/2023 9:41:00 AM

Love the title, Linda. I've often wondered what goes on under those things. If I may suggest, it seems to me that as funny as this piece is, the last line needs a syllable to make it more compatible with the first two. A simple "and" would work.

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 10:54:00 AM

LOL Still, the stressed/unstressed syllables could be better, as I re-wrote in my response. Perhaps I'll change it. Thanks for making revisit it!

Jim Slaughter
Date: 3/11/2023 10:21:00 AM

Linda, perhaps I misread before. I thought I counted only 8 syllables in the last line, whereas the first two have nine each. Mea culpa. It's a funny piece no matter the meter.

Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 3/11/2023 10:04:00 AM

I appreciate your suggestion and considered it myself, as it rolls of the tongue better. However, sticking strictly to the form, I have enough syllables as is. I sometimes struggle with stress and syllables. "chill winds put him into a flurry" might work - having one unstressed and two stressed syllables. What do you think Jim?