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Amid the jagged boughs of the paperback maple, Sturdy, snow-resistant pallid often peeling trunk I mostly admired the green trees in the winter cold I rested on a hill till eternal darkness sunk. The urge to search for her was insatiable as I Rested against the tree, memories of lips had been. It should have been our wedding day, alas, but she died. For she stumbled into a deep snow-covered ravine. Irresistible heartbroken tears fell down my cheeks, Could I bring her back from where her kind soul is hidden? Sweetheart, come back to me please, I shout, hoping she'll hear. Words echoed around. Guard told me it was forbidden. Echoes could cause an avalanche with jagged branches. I prayed to God to save all. There should be no chances. 4 March 2023 Writing Challenge - ''J'' Words - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 4/3/2023 4:04:00 PM
Victor, wonderful writing and thank you for sharing your poem in my Writing Challenge congratulations !
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Date: 3/12/2023 4:53:00 AM
Such a lovely Poem Victor. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/11/2023 1:26:00 AM
Beautifully sad poem my dear friend Vic. Thanks for sharing. Congratulations on your win! Blessings always. Hugs
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Date: 3/9/2023 7:43:00 PM
Back with Congratulations on your contest win with this wonderful poem, Victor. Blessings.
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Date: 3/9/2023 6:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this poignant poem, dear Victor!
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Date: 3/9/2023 1:25:00 PM
Wow dear Victor. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 3/9/2023 12:55:00 PM
Big well deserved congrats, Victor
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Date: 3/9/2023 10:19:00 AM
- Back with a congratulations, Victor ... well deserved :) - hugs
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Date: 3/9/2023 8:42:00 AM
A crafter of great stories! Caught up in nature and broken hearts! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 3/7/2023 11:14:00 AM
This is a very poignant and well written poem, Victor. I am sure it will score high.
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Date: 3/6/2023 2:03:00 AM
A heart-rending piece of poetry, Victor, those who lose lives in such accidents, it's horrible...
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Date: 3/5/2023 8:11:00 PM
This lonely piece is heartbreaking! The setting, amidst the winter trees, is perfect for the melancholy message that follows. Well done, poet!
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Date: 3/5/2023 10:15:00 AM
A mesmerizing and heartbreaking poem, Victor. A breathtakingly eloquent poetry that poignantly captures the anguish of losing a loved one is presented here. I wish you the best of success in the contest.
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Date: 3/5/2023 8:54:00 AM
Creative work using the j word in Constance's contest. Way to go. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for sharing and your visit with a kind review. Sara
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Date: 3/5/2023 3:50:00 AM
Victor, a captivating and sad poem, best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/4/2023 10:20:00 PM
Wow you chose a most interesting j word. I hope I can maybe work on this one on my flight home today.
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Date: 3/4/2023 9:53:00 PM
A touching poem . The pain of having lost her is hauntingly expounded ! All the best in the contest.
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Date: 3/4/2023 7:24:00 PM
A beautiful heart -wrenching poem, full of love and longing. The setting is awesome and the words that you shouted to your dear wife were full of emotion and desire. Your exquisite poetry helps to bring you both together in a special way. A love like yours is everlasting for you both. A winner for me, Victor.
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Date: 3/4/2023 5:17:00 PM
It hurts so to lose your other half -- one goes on though for the good of the world, and to respect the God of life and loving, while not always agreeing or understanding His Ways. Faith is paramount.
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Date: 3/4/2023 12:49:00 PM
So heartfelt.. great write.
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Date: 3/4/2023 12:11:00 PM
The heartbreak of lost love is conveyed through this poem's fine imagery, such as the shouting among the jagged branches. A brilliant work. :)
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Date: 3/4/2023 12:04:00 PM
Wow, and wow are my words for that descriptive poem.
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Date: 3/4/2023 9:12:00 AM
A tragic and sad yet beautiful story/poem Victor. All the best… Belle
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Date: 3/4/2023 8:44:00 AM
Oh how sad are the vibes you convey amid recall of love lost for good. Wonderfully portrayed as always Victor. No doubt a winner you wrote.
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Date: 3/4/2023 8:05:00 AM
- A beautiful and at the same time a sad poem, Victor :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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