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Invisible Vision

I'm jagged cut off at the sleeves taking unguarded risk not doing what they please Invisible out here in the breeze standing with the masses not knowing who I'll be I'm dust swept off to the edges hidden from the sunshine not wanting you to sneeze Undesirable drifting to a different tune trust lost along with the heartache not taking it anymore Visions giving voices to those with alternate choices trying things that make you sing not alone no longer Invisible

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Akkina Downing

Date: 4/27/2017 8:02:00 PM

Sad and yet absolutely beautiful! And I enjoyed the music as well. Heart touching :)

Christie Moses

Date: 4/24/2017 5:11:00 AM

very relatable lines in this poem. Well written. :)

Seren Roberts

Date: 4/17/2017 7:06:00 PM

invisible only to the undesirables Tim.. I can see you clearly.......Seren

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/17/2017 11:11:00 AM

Tim Tim Tim. Only the Mighty Free Verse could pull this off. Please allow me to let your words stand. There is nothing I could add to your words or thoughts. You state them so gracefully and with emotion as well. Honestly. I found this both an honor and privilege to read. I thank you also for sharing the attached music. To say it is beautiful is an understatement. Well done in its entirety. Have a wonderful day.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/15/2017 10:51:00 PM

A poet must possess a few qualities, you seem to have them all, namely, compassion for all of life, the gift of the tongue and we all know the Irish have this, and the heart of a lion, words than embrace, the invisible ones are the ones with the bigger mouths, as most can see! God bless and Happy Easter!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/15/2017 8:12:00 PM

Wonderful writing ,my friend. Wish I could see your video but you are my last poem of the night. I keep saying this but this time I mean it!! Happy Easter to you, Tim.

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/15/2017 3:12:00 PM

Hi Tim, What a moving write. I know this feeling all to well. Although we may feel "invisible " our loved ones see us. You picked the perfect song to go with your amazing lyrics. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis

Sara Ella

Date: 4/15/2017 2:12:00 PM

<3 You are NOT invisible <3 Tim you touch the lives of so many and I am so glad that you are here. Your poem and the music fit perfectly and is so uplifting. Your friendship is a blessing :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/15/2017 10:52:00 PM

I couldn't agree more Sara, such kind words from you!

Lynn Marie

Date: 4/15/2017 12:46:00 PM

Such a lovely piece with touching sentiments of acceptance and friendship to brighten ones world. Beautiful writing Tim, the subheadings are particularly moving. blessings xxx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/15/2017 10:36:00 AM

I can relate Tim. This is wonderfully composed. 7 ; )

Chuck Melugin

Date: 4/15/2017 3:24:00 AM

Tim, you may be invisible but you write your butt off! 7 My best to you, chuck

Tim Smith
Date: 4/15/2017 7:29:00 AM

Thanks Chuck

Darren White

Date: 4/15/2017 1:55:00 AM

This is just so beautiful...Reaching out through the silence and finding hands of friends.

Tim Smith
Date: 4/15/2017 7:29:00 AM

Friends are key.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/14/2017 9:26:00 PM

I can only second Jan's comments, even some should learn silence is golden, your voice rings true!!!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/15/2017 10:54:00 PM

I think some haven't learned the silence is golden rule, oh well!

Tim Smith
Date: 4/15/2017 7:27:00 AM

That is true

Jan Allison

Date: 4/14/2017 5:06:00 PM

I think many of us can relate to you lines at some stage in our life Tim:-( I know one thing you are a shining star on soup and far from invisible:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 4/15/2017 7:27:00 AM

Thanks Jan