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Inevitable Withering

The truth was concealed with many branches. Countless are the days I happily lingered in the comfort of your shade before passionate winds revealed each of your limbs as too weak to support natural, core growth. Your delusive roots cannot grab substantial hold in earth while fertilized by pretense’s charade. Only hollow echoes resound within your skin of splintered bark and your shadows of nothingness grow ever longer. Under a warming sun, I joyously gave my heart in open palm to you. At the time, I ignorantly embraced your breadth and sum, for your apparent beauty preceded your tells of long developed and craftily hidden inner rot, sure to disease all love given in deep, steady, heartbreaking spurts. I can no longer tarry beneath your deceptive branches and chose to depart with no thought of ever returning, but I leave behind my tender pity to witness your inevitable withering. ... CayCay Jennings August 5, 2016

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Date: 9/4/2016 8:33:00 PM
I especially liked "craftily hidden inner rot."
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Date: 8/12/2016 11:14:00 PM
Caycay, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderfully penned poem~
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Date: 8/10/2016 11:03:00 PM
I didn't grok the metaphor at first -- I was thinking strictly trees (ha, ha). Love the line, "natural, core growth." Congrats! :-)
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Date: 8/11/2016 12:03:00 AM
It's okay, Tom, because I didn't grok grok at first. Thanks to you and all the best ... CayCay (I can see how one wouldn't grok it, initially, sincerely - Yeah, I can) Just messin'
Date: 8/10/2016 10:54:00 PM
For me, this was one of your very best, dear Caycay and brilliant with its metaphors, as Connie says below. congrats. you rock!
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Date: 8/10/2016 9:50:00 PM
CayCay, breathtaking in words...congrats on your placement dear lady :)-luloo
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Date: 8/9/2016 10:29:00 AM
I enjoyed how you spoke to the tree in this verse of love - quite beautiful. Jesse
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Date: 8/8/2016 8:47:00 PM
Very nicely done CayCay. A strong write with some wonderful phrases.
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Date: 8/8/2016 9:42:00 AM
Wow, merciful metaphors CayCay! What an excellent entry! I can't see Constance not appreciating this jewel! 7 ; )
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Date: 8/8/2016 9:22:00 AM
"Craftily hidden inner rot", "fertilized by pretense's charade" you really captured the metaphor and ran with it. Sooo good!! A7 for me! Glad to see this on best new poems list!
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Date: 8/8/2016 8:27:00 AM
Hi CayCay, This is a good take on the contest theme.It so deep and well written. The metaphors are amazing. I think you nailed it. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A Big seven:-)Alexis
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Date: 8/7/2016 2:37:00 PM
wow, written with such flow and herartfelt determination, dear cay!.. huggs
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Date: 8/7/2016 9:54:00 AM
Such depth in your words - expecting to see you in the winners circle. Jesse
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Date: 8/7/2016 1:40:00 AM
Insightful poem, truthful and didactic. A seven dear CayCay!
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Date: 8/6/2016 10:15:00 PM
Lovely!!!! Great imagery with a grand touch of endless Metaphor. Such a great angle for the contest. ~NICE~ WINNER...
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Date: 8/6/2016 9:19:00 PM
CAycay Wow. you really did a great job interpreting that line. IT is the only line that spoke to me as well. I just have to come up with something now. but I doubt I can match yours. I think yours is inspired by real life. Love how you did it metaphorically. A FAVE
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Date: 8/6/2016 10:52:00 AM
What a beautiful powerful poem! Poetic beauty! :)
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Date: 8/6/2016 10:02:00 AM
Superbly done CayCay...a sad but true love...with exquisite words...a winner for me and BW...god bless...^WW^
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