Immortal Footsteps

As a child learning to walk, I 
discovered stumbling, 
And now as an upright adult, 
I sometimes count back my previous 
steps, like the baby steps in your 
direction; 
Subconsciously, my feet always walk in 
the direction of attraction, 
And obviously spotted a winner in 
you; 
However this steady pace misread the 
time limit of your romance, 
And second place is where my feet currently 
reside;

Although a religious woman, you don’t see 
the Adam and Eve complex between us, 
Rather you underestimate my advancement 
for mere friendship, 
And at best the status of a brother; 
I realize that your soul is blind, 
And these glasses of mine would 
fit perfectly, 
But you’d rather continuously wear 
unhealthy contact lenses; 
For this reason, my passion for walking has 
come to a halt; 

I sometimes reminisce on those last five steps 
I took, 
With every inch of courage, to eliminate the 
friendzone between us, 
And yet I’ll never recall the exact value of 
footsteps post-defeat, 
Which have remained immortal over the 
years;
Friendship: such a two-faced gift, 
Heaven and Hell in one blessing.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Lamoureux Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 8:34 AM
If it would not make her think, she would prove to be a disappointment. Somehow I don’t think that would be the case. ;0) Enjoyable to read again.
George   Avatar
March 21, 2015 at 7:36 PM
Wow!!! You certainly have a very unique way of writing and taking the reader on a journey where they look at something in an entirely new way. Awesome writing, Jiril. And...thank you for commenting on 'Alice Through the Looking Glass'. Elaine
Guzzi Avatar
March 21, 2015 at 7:23 PM
I've never thought of friendship that way - but I can understand. Light & Love
Clemons Avatar
March 21, 2015 at 7:34 PM
Thank you, Debbie. Appreciate the love.
Lamoureux Avatar
January 1, 2015 at 9:19 AM
This is an impressive first offering. You have eloquently expressed your emotions. I wonder her reaction if she were to read this heartfelt piece?
Clemons Avatar
January 1, 2015 at 10:23 AM
Thank you Richard. Lol I'm not sure what her reaction would be, but I would hope this poem would at least make her think.
Gifford Avatar
October 21, 2014 at 10:05 AM
Yes, I agree, Jiril, There is a bit of heaven and hell in every relationship because not one of us is perfect. So we take the good with the bad. Otherwise, I think, we would have very few relationships. We think we can fix somebody to be more like we want them to be. But, good luck with that! Only God is perfect and He accepts me just as I am. Warts and all!
Clemons Avatar
October 21, 2014 at 11:12 AM
Thank you, Darlene.
Gulley Avatar
October 12, 2014 at 12:27 PM
A well deserved feature Jiril. Really liked this one, so descriptive the emotions...Sharon G.
Clemons Avatar
October 12, 2014 at 7:18 PM
Thanks Sharon.
Schumacker Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 4:39 AM
Hi Jiril, Very deep poem. I'm sensing a dichotomy of philosophies of the individuals involved in the relationship. It seems to be branches off in alternate directions. Deep relationships are naturally complex. It is an interesting compelling work. Have a great day. Earl
Clemons Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 7:38 AM
Thanks Earl.
Posey Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 8:37 PM
cryptically beautiful. I had to slow down while reading and let it catch up to me... Just as I did as a baby learning to walk... Jiril, I have been away fro the soup due to hip replacement and rehab.... I'm back now and have rediscovered your work... I'll be visiting more ..... Regards.... Jake
Clemons Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 8:44 PM
Thanks, John. Always appreciate the love.
Gibson Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 4:03 PM
Well written write on a not so well written relationship. Liked this, Jiril. Thanks for stopping by and paying me a visit.
Clemons Avatar
June 8, 2014 at 5:44 PM
Thank you Faye. Appreciate the love.
Montalbo Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 6:11 PM
forbidden it was forbidden it shall be take new steps to a new path..... great write.... I did enjoyed this piece indeed.... Smiles and hugs.... Gina
Clemons Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 6:38 PM
Thank you Gina. Appreciate the love.
Pickett Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 8:22 AM
Soulful and deep!! Yeah, the "friendzone" is never good, stay out of it!! Well written piece here sir!! Hey, here are three poems I think you may enjoy. "Feverish", Ur Girl" & "Ur Man".. Let me know what you think!!Asavvy1
Clemons Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 2:52 PM
Thanks Jared. I'll check them out.
Hak Avatar
March 6, 2014 at 2:40 AM
This is so touching and heartfelt..
Clemons Avatar
March 6, 2014 at 4:05 PM
Thanks Soulful. Appreciate the love.
Ruff Avatar
January 8, 2014 at 8:15 PM
I agree. Feel like I''ve been there.
Clemons Avatar
January 8, 2014 at 8:34 PM
Thanks Karen. Appreciate the love.
A   Avatar
November 2, 2013 at 11:42 PM
Jiril,.:-) Congratulations on having your poem featured on the HOME PAGE.... always~ LINDA
Clemons Avatar
November 3, 2013 at 8:30 AM
Thanks Linda, Appreciate it.
Amadore Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 12:28 AM
An agonizing dilemma indeed...you have clearly and cleverly expressed the feelings of the suffering soul involved in such a lop-sided relationship. I really like your poem.
Clemons Avatar
October 28, 2013 at 8:13 AM
Thanks Leo. Appreciate the love.
Secrest Avatar
September 15, 2013 at 1:31 PM
Great write, and beautiful poem! -Heather
Clemons Avatar
September 15, 2013 at 2:14 PM
Thanks Heather. Appreciate the love.
Merryman Avatar
July 5, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Jiril, I enjoyed reading your poem. You have a unique way with words. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. Love, Kim
Clemons Avatar
July 5, 2013 at 9:16 PM
Thanks Kim. Appreciate the love.
Duncan Avatar
July 4, 2013 at 3:40 PM
yes I too wear rose colored glasses at times. I also think some friendships are better off as friendships and not turn into lovers..... thank you for reading and liking my Pitch Perfect Dreams ,,,, happy fourth of July ;}
Clemons Avatar
July 4, 2013 at 3:45 PM
Very true, Thanks for the response, Debbie. Happy 4th to you too.
Goff Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 9:42 PM
Jiril....Which have remained immortal over the years....wow! Intense art! You write very well! Jimbo
Clemons Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 10:02 PM
Wow James, Thank you. I'm always appreciative of poets who understand the deepness of my poems. I'm sure your just as dedicated to yours.
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