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I Spied A Valley Low-POTD

I spied a valley low Across the road from the cemetery A Columbus monkey swinging by The trees of the valley Stood tall and forlorn Observing the crematorium Covered in light gray smoke As morning traffic streamed by Giraffe reached for the tallest bough And I thought I heard the leopards growl By the road was a troop of baboons As people walked on by And a few yards away, Was the army garrison A regiment trooped on by, And a sounder was grazing idly by As people walked on by Yes I spied a valley low Where life carried on slow Across the road from the cemetery Where footsteps were dull and hollow A funeral procession was going on Yes the trees of the vale Were tall and forlorn The sun hung high and lorn As were the clouds of dawn As I drove along that road Away from that valley low

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Date: 3/22/2024 5:50:00 AM
Wow! You give us a dirge different then what we most experience. Very interesting, Marugu! Congratulations on POTD!
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/22/2024 10:07:00 AM
Thanks Kim!
Date: 3/17/2024 7:07:00 AM
Belated congrats on POTD, Marugu. A FAVE from me for this articulate write that brings to fore the splendid hues you wish to convey.
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Date: 3/18/2024 12:11:00 AM
Thanks Vijay
Date: 3/16/2024 11:11:00 PM
Ive been to Kenya, beautiful country and lovely people congratulations to you Marugu on the honour of POTD. Tom
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Date: 3/17/2024 2:29:00 AM
Thank you Tom and may I say Karibu tena!
Date: 3/16/2024 8:04:00 PM
This is an outstanding poem. It has a depth of emotion. Congratulations on POTD.
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/17/2024 2:30:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 3/16/2024 4:52:00 PM
thanks for 'following me.' I shall follow you as well because I found this poem poignant and captivating and would like to read more of your poetry. Have a splendid evening, Sara
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/17/2024 2:31:00 AM
I will be reading more of you to challenge my muse to free the ink! Thanks again
Date: 3/16/2024 4:05:00 PM
There's so much happening in the clouds, beyond high mountains. Even in the valley, moments continue to move. Life is all around, and so is death. Your thoughts are tender and emotional, all at the same time. Congratulations Marugu, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. ~ Brandy
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/17/2024 2:34:00 AM
Thanks! All the best to you too. I will be visiting your page
Date: 3/16/2024 3:04:00 PM
A beautiful poetical description of the valley low that you spied on your drive Mo, the crematorium, trees, animals, the regiment and people passing by. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/17/2024 2:33:00 AM
Thanks you for your welcome comments!
Date: 3/16/2024 2:36:00 PM
Congratulations Marugu on POTD honors. Great to see your work being honored:) I hope all is well with you and yours.
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Date: 3/17/2024 2:32:00 AM
Hi old friend. Its always nice to hear from you. I have been away for quite a while but I want to get back to a rhythm
Date: 3/16/2024 10:14:00 AM
Congratulations for POTD :)
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 12:54:00 PM
Thanks. Much appreciated
Date: 3/16/2024 10:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win.  A wonderful write/story. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away............
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Date: 3/16/2024 12:55:00 PM
May your day be blessed too
Date: 3/16/2024 9:17:00 AM
Congratulation on your POTD honor, Marugu! If we are observant, we can see much as life goes by each day. I enjoyed reading your poetry today. Enjoy your special day of recognition. A poet in Texas, Bill
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 12:57:00 PM
Funny thing about this one is that its based on a real place that I pass through almost daily. Thank you for your welcome comments
Date: 3/16/2024 8:58:00 AM
CONGRATSS DO CHECK MY NEW POEM
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Date: 3/16/2024 12:57:00 PM
I definitely will. Thanks
Date: 3/16/2024 8:44:00 AM
What fortitude you have Marugu, a poet is a lovely thing and deserves much respect as the soldier does, I enjoyed your poem The Soldier and The Poet as well as Valley Low. Congratulations on the POTD Marugu Mo! You have stunning powers of observation so vital to a thoughtful poet. Keep your pen at the ready my friend. ~I Am Anaya
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 12:59:00 PM
Thank you Anaya for taking time to read one of my other poems. I will be visiting your page
Date: 3/16/2024 8:02:00 AM
So beautiful and melodious too, takes the reader away to another realm. I love the flow of this and your last lines stood out the most. As well as “ As morning traffic streamed by Giraffe reached for the tallest bough And I thought I heard the leopards growl By the road was a troop of baboons” that would be heavenly for animal lovers definitely, i heard in kenya they do have such places? Pleasure reading this, congratulations on receiving POTD
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:01:00 PM
Yes in Kenya we have such places. This is based on the Nairobi National Park, as you approach the city from the south. Its amazing how such tranquility can exist amongst the hustle and bustle of daily life
Date: 3/16/2024 8:02:00 AM
- Congratulations on your fine p.o.t.d., Marugu :) -
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:01:00 PM
Thank you Anne. Its been a while. I will be visiting
Date: 3/16/2024 7:59:00 AM
Evocative and melancholy Marugu. Life goes on despite all else surrounding us. Congratulations on the honor of POTD! :)
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:03:00 PM
It does go on. And that's the tragedy of it all. Death is a part of life they say, though it feels so unnatural
Date: 3/16/2024 6:57:00 AM
Very nicely penned, Congrats on POTD
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:04:00 PM
Thanks so much Joseph. You know I have one of your poems as a fav. I will be visiting
Date: 3/16/2024 5:16:00 AM
I knew this was a winner! Congrats on POTD
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:06:00 PM
Thanks again. I have some insight about the POTD algorithm(or so I think) but I am overwhelmed lol. I will be visiting
Date: 3/16/2024 5:08:00 AM
Dear Margu, I love the way you presented this poem as spectator merely driving past the scene. Loved the imagery thru out. This is so well done dear poetess. Blessings on your recognition today as POTD. I truly loved it!!
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:07:00 PM
Thanks Nancy. I..er...identify as a poet on this forum. Glad you enjoyed it. Will definitely visit you
Date: 3/16/2024 4:22:00 AM
Dear Marugu, Congratulations on your poem being selected as the Poem of the Day! Your words painted a poignant picture of life's juxtapositions – the beauty of nature and the solemnity of mortality intertwined. Your imagery, from the Columbus monkey to the army garrison, captivated me, making me reflect on the fleeting moments of existence. Keep writing and sharing your unique perspective with the world. - Blessings, Daniel
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:10:00 PM
Thank you Daniel for your welcome comments. Yes, amidst the tragedy of death life goes on unfortunately, the beauty of nature carries on amidst the carnage. We call it the cycle...well
Date: 3/16/2024 4:10:00 AM
poignant words. How many 'valley's low' do we have throughout the world? Congrats on your POTD designation!
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 1:11:00 PM
We have had valleys since time immemorial and we may continue to have them as long as we are here. Thank you
Date: 3/16/2024 12:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your fine poem winning potd!
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 2:19:00 AM
This is great!, Thanks
Date: 3/15/2024 11:00:00 AM
Such events will be happening in many 'valleys Low' throughout this world.' So refllective and True!
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/16/2024 2:19:00 AM
Thanks Joe. Would you believe this is a real place? told strictly from my perspective of course
Date: 3/14/2024 5:20:00 AM
What an awesome poetic vista you painted here Mo. A snippet of life... and death. The fact that your setting was a cemetery makes it all the more feel alive
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Marugu Mo
Date: 3/15/2024 1:19:00 AM
Thanks. In retrospect this is a work in progress :)
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Tom Woody
Date: 3/14/2024 5:31:00 AM
Back again. This was so good I have to fave it

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