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I Saw an Angel Near the Fence

To be fair, it was the end of a long day and a large drink we called Screaming Jesus nothing more than watered-down vodka, grape soda, and a stalk of rosemary. We were dug in near a sandcastle at Ormand Beach. My skin shrieked against the heat, but all I heard were the angel's murmurs between the eternal slosh of loamy, gray-brown waves. Eyes salty with dehydrated sea, considering an impending trial separation, my anonymous angel said, "The keys to the kingdom are reserved for those with an appetite for interpretation." My husband had no idea what it meant. Even I still remain areligious, despite the evidence— the seraphim's calligraphy across hot sand, carved into my skeleton. We shed ten layers of epidermis that week, Ohio bodies exposed to a new slant of sunlight. Hotel housekeeping kindly hoovered up the sheets of our leftover skins. My husband still jokes about it, volumes of our DNA collected, discarded vacuum bags of vacationers rotting at the bottom of a Florida landfill, how I sat with an angel whose graygolden halo was a rusted-silver carabiner secured to a spike driven into the hands of heaven. "Commit to the bit," were the last words I heard before the horizon turned orange. Everything since is a hidden scripture, bewitched in red and yellow, fragrant as pestled ginger. A path of revised perspective, sifting sand through sunblistered fingertips until the memory of it settles— like a beachside angel on the fence, manufacturing meaning in her downtime for desolate humans.

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Date: 6/23/2024 9:57:00 AM
Wow this is deep. Belated congrats on the POTD. My skin was shrieking. What an amazing line
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Date: 6/17/2024 8:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/story. Great Ending. Have a blessed day/week with your win.....................
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Date: 6/16/2024 11:37:00 AM
I still recall your first post & trophy win "Four Cafes" I commented...Avant-garde—your poem combined interest and smart, edgy ideas. Congratulations on your win! I Am Anaya & a beautiful avatar is it you? You never answered my question, ha. Congratulations on your POTD Jaymee! Metaphorically transforming and transfixing, spacious naturalism -not too turgid not to penetrate my understanding. Refreshing for potd, love that.
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Date: 6/18/2024 11:41:00 AM
:)
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Date: 6/17/2024 6:30:00 AM
Haha - I remember that now. I hadn't realized I didn't reply though :( Thank you so much for your encouragement and kindness. The avatar is me, sort of...it's a picture of me I ran through a filter to turn it into a painting. Have a wonderful day.
Date: 6/16/2024 8:53:00 AM
Wow Jaymee - absolutely absorbing poetry! Congratulations on POTD! :)
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Date: 6/17/2024 6:30:00 AM
Thanks, Linda. I really appreciate you taking the time to comment.
Date: 6/16/2024 7:30:00 AM
A beautiful tale. Your use of metaphors, imagery and sensory immersion was phenomenal. An engaging and entertaining read. A well deserved POTD!! Congratulations
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:05:00 AM
Thank you for taking the time to comment. The only thing I like more than writing is flattery :D
Date: 6/16/2024 5:34:00 AM
Hello Jaymee. You are one of PS' hidden talents, a poet of extraordinary depth and skill. It's good to see you being featured with this gem. Areligious? I learned a new word, or did you make it up? In any case, not sure I would trust a fence sitting angel. Enjoy your day in the light
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:09:00 AM
Haha! There is one made up word in the piece, but I can't take credit for areligious - Webster beat me to that one.
Date: 6/16/2024 5:16:00 AM
If this is Florida I relate to the orange sunsets and the feeling of tattered angels. The orange sunsets and all the amazing birds and the light and the dusty tattered trees. It could heighten the feeling of desolation at an impending separation. Great POTD. Kudos, SuZ
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:10:00 AM
Oh, I love the imagery of tattered trees - I may have to steal it :D Kidding, of course. Thanks for taking the time to comment - I really appreciate it.
Date: 6/16/2024 5:04:00 AM
Dear Jayme, What a captivating blend of sensory details and introspection. I loved your exploration of faith, identity, and transformation. Beautiful. Congratulations on being featured as POTD! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:12:00 AM
Thanks, Daniel. It was an interesting time that I look back on with fondness and fear in equal measure.
Date: 6/16/2024 4:56:00 AM
Very nicely written, Congrats on POTD
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:12:00 AM
Thanks, Joseph. I appreciate it.
Date: 6/16/2024 4:55:00 AM
Jaymee, captivating, a creative write, congratulations on POTD.
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:13:00 AM
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Tania. I appreciate it.
Date: 6/16/2024 4:37:00 AM
a very intriguing write Jaymee. I shall be haunted by the phrase "commit to the bit" as in "breaking the horse or accepting one's life situations"...dammit...now you got me thinking...but wait...that would be the triumph of a great poem...to invite the reader.....to think...i think
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:14:00 AM
Oh, I do adore the idea of being the source of a haunting thought, John. It's very on brand for me :D
Date: 6/16/2024 4:19:00 AM
Congrats!! A great piece worthy the Accolade.
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:15:00 AM
Thank you for those kind words, Steven.
Date: 6/16/2024 4:07:00 AM
Dear Jaymee, What a delight to read your POTD. The imagery, metaphors..absolutely so we penned. A hearty congratulations on this much deserved honor..
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:17:00 AM
Thank you so much, Nancy. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment :)
Date: 6/16/2024 3:16:00 AM
I'm so looking forward to you waking up to POTD - you deserve it my friend :D I have the biggest smile just knowing you don't even know yet :D :D :D
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:19:00 AM
Haha! You had the time zone advantage for sure :D I feel lucky to have a friend as encouraging as you are.
Date: 6/16/2024 1:43:00 AM
Lovely poetry Jaymee, I believe in angels, they appear when they know they are needed. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:19:00 AM
Thank you, Beryl.
Date: 6/16/2024 1:40:00 AM
Congratulations on a unique potd!
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/17/2024 7:19:00 AM
Thank you, Karen :)
Date: 6/16/2024 1:09:00 AM
Shedding skin and lots of things, even the revelation of a rusted silver carabiner sheds light on your (angel) near the fence, areligious perhaps but quite an amazing poem nonetheless, congratulations Jaymee on a well deserved POTD,
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:21:00 AM
Thanks so much, David. The carabiner is one of my favorite lines :)
Date: 6/16/2024 12:49:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD. I enjoy this interesting poem.
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Date: 6/17/2024 7:22:00 AM
Thanks, Hilda. I appreciate it.
Date: 6/15/2024 12:02:00 PM
A lovley poem Angels watch over us all the time.
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/17/2024 7:23:00 AM
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Diane.
Date: 6/15/2024 1:20:00 AM
What?! Why do I feel written into this but also no part of it?! Like I know it too but chose to forget. Magical writing Jaymee - I'm going to fave it, not for you but for purely selfish reasons. (I've said all this affectionately, in case that is not apparent)
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/17/2024 7:24:00 AM
Magical? I quite like the sound of that... I am a great speller after all. Thank you for always being so supportive.

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