I Saw an Angel Near the Fence

To be fair, it was the end
of a long day and a large drink
we called Screaming Jesus
nothing more than watered-down
vodka, grape soda, and a stalk of rosemary.

We were dug in near a sandcastle
at Ormand Beach. My skin shrieked
against the heat, but all I heard were the angel's
murmurs between the eternal slosh
of loamy, gray-brown waves.

Eyes salty with dehydrated sea,
considering an impending trial
separation, my anonymous angel said,
"The keys to the kingdom are reserved
for those with an appetite for interpretation."

My husband had no idea
what it meant. Even I still remain
areligious, despite the evidence—
the seraphim's calligraphy across hot sand,
carved into my skeleton.

We shed ten layers of epidermis that week,
Ohio bodies exposed to a new slant of sunlight.
Hotel housekeeping kindly hoovered up
the sheets of our leftover skins.

My husband still jokes about it,
volumes of our DNA collected,
discarded vacuum bags of vacationers
rotting at the bottom of a Florida landfill,
how I sat with an angel whose graygolden halo
was a rusted-silver carabiner secured to a spike
driven into the hands of heaven.

"Commit to the bit," were the last words
I heard before the horizon turned orange.

Everything since is a hidden scripture, bewitched
in red and yellow, fragrant as pestled ginger.
A path of revised perspective, sifting sand
through sunblistered fingertips until the memory
of it settles—

like a beachside angel on the fence, manufacturing
meaning in her downtime for desolate humans.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Dietrich Avatar
June 23, 2024 at 9:57 AM
Wow this is deep. Belated congrats on the POTD. My skin was shrieking. What an amazing line
Goldsmith Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 8:21 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/story. Great Ending. Have a blessed day/week with your win.....................
Anaya Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 11:37 AM
I still recall your first post & trophy win "Four Cafes" I commented...Avant-garde—your poem combined interest and smart, edgy ideas. Congratulations on your win! I Am Anaya & a beautiful avatar is it you? You never answered my question, ha. Congratulations on your POTD Jaymee! Metaphorically transforming and transfixing, spacious naturalism -not too turgid not to penetrate my understanding. Refreshing for potd, love that.
Anaya Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 11:41 AM
:)
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 6:30 AM
Haha - I remember that now. I hadn't realized I didn't reply though :( Thank you so much for your encouragement and kindness. The avatar is me, sort of...it's a picture of me I ran through a filter to turn it into a painting. Have a wonderful day.
Fowler Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 8:53 AM
Wow Jaymee - absolutely absorbing poetry! Congratulations on POTD! :)
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 6:30 AM
Thanks, Linda. I really appreciate you taking the time to comment.
Wraith Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 7:30 AM
A beautiful tale. Your use of metaphors, imagery and sensory immersion was phenomenal. An engaging and entertaining read. A well deserved POTD!! Congratulations
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:05 AM
Thank you for taking the time to comment. The only thing I like more than writing is flattery :D
Delaney Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 5:16 AM
If this is Florida I relate to the orange sunsets and the feeling of tattered angels. The orange sunsets and all the amazing birds and the light and the dusty tattered trees. It could heighten the feeling of desolation at an impending separation. Great POTD. Kudos, SuZ
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:10 AM
Oh, I love the imagery of tattered trees - I may have to steal it :D Kidding, of course. Thanks for taking the time to comment - I really appreciate it.
Rodgers Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 5:04 AM
Dear Jayme, What a captivating blend of sensory details and introspection. I loved your exploration of faith, identity, and transformation. Beautiful. Congratulations on being featured as POTD! - Blessings, Daniel
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:12 AM
Thanks, Daniel. It was an interesting time that I look back on with fondness and fear in equal measure.
May Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 4:56 AM
Very nicely written, Congrats on POTD
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:12 AM
Thanks, Joseph. I appreciate it.
Kitchin Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 4:55 AM
Jaymee, captivating, a creative write, congratulations on POTD.
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:13 AM
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Tania. I appreciate it.
Lawless Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 4:37 AM
a very intriguing write Jaymee. I shall be haunted by the phrase "commit to the bit" as in "breaking the horse or accepting one's life situations"...dammit...now you got me thinking...but wait...that would be the triumph of a great poem...to invite the reader.....to think...i think
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:14 AM
Oh, I do adore the idea of being the source of a haunting thought, John. It's very on brand for me :D
Mwakatundu Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 4:19 AM
Congrats!! A great piece worthy the Accolade.
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:15 AM
Thank you for those kind words, Steven.
Kaufman Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 4:07 AM
Dear Jaymee, What a delight to read your POTD. The imagery, metaphors..absolutely so we penned. A hearty congratulations on this much deserved honor..
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:17 AM
Thank you so much, Nancy. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment :)
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June 16, 2024 at 1:43 AM
Lovely poetry Jaymee, I believe in angels, they appear when they know they are needed. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:19 AM
Thank you, Beryl.
Jones Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 1:40 AM
Congratulations on a unique potd!
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:19 AM
Thank you, Karen :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 1:09 AM
Shedding skin and lots of things, even the revelation of a rusted silver carabiner sheds light on your (angel) near the fence, areligious perhaps but quite an amazing poem nonetheless, congratulations Jaymee on a well deserved POTD,
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:21 AM
Thanks so much, David. The carabiner is one of my favorite lines :)
Greenhough Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 12:49 AM
Congratulations on POTD. I enjoy this interesting poem.
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:22 AM
Thanks, Hilda. I appreciate it.
Christian Avatar
June 15, 2024 at 12:02 PM
A lovley poem Angels watch over us all the time.
Thomas Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 7:23 AM
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Diane.
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