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I Miss You Mummy -Emotive Write - Quatern

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Contest: Show me Quatern Poetry
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

Entered into Any Poem Written on your Birthday Contest
Sponsored By Laura Loo
My birthday is on 25th January

01~25~16

Placing a red rose on her grave; tears welled up in his huge brown eyes. Daddy told him he must be brave - mummy is watching from the skies. He hopes his mummy can see him placing a red rose on her grave. Losing his mummy was so grim, her comforting arms he does crave. He tries his hardest to behave, but the anger he feels is raw. Placing a red rose on her grave, he’d love to see her face once more. He’s so thankful he still has dad; smiling, he gives heaven a wave. Though his heart is heavy and sad placing a red rose on her grave.

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Susan Ashley

Date: 12/5/2023 6:07:00 PM

Dear Jan, your poem's imagery is so tender and poignant. There is beauty in grief and sadness and you've penned it with finesse. Congratulations for your excellent win in Joseph's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Joseph May

Date: 12/4/2023 1:53:00 AM

A poignant write Jan, Very nicely penned, Congrats on your win

CayCay Jennings

Date: 3/15/2017 7:08:00 PM

I didn't enter this contest - apparently I don't write poetry on my birthday! Never knew that. This is a real tear jerker, so glad it is not your story. You got my heart with this one! Hugs ... CayCay

Lu Loo

Date: 3/15/2017 10:42:00 AM

you really tug at my heart strings Jan! thank you and congrats :)-luloo

Agnes Krampe

Date: 3/14/2017 2:29:00 PM

What a beautiful moving poem, Jan, Congrats on your win!

Eve Roper

Date: 3/14/2017 10:11:00 AM

Very heartfelt write, Jan, remembering this one... Congratulations on your win.. ~* Hugs Eve

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 2/9/2016 11:57:00 AM

Congrats x well written x and sad x

Jan Allison
Date: 2/9/2016 2:22:00 PM

I wrote the 'hook' line and based the poem around it:-) hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/7/2016 7:16:00 AM

Thanks for the reply

Joseph May

Date: 2/7/2016 6:29:00 AM

A heartfelt write ...Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2016 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 2/7/2016 6:17:00 AM

A very touching Quatrain, Jan, and congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2016 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Lin I really enjoyed writing this form this is my first attempt and i was delighted to place in the contest-) hugs Jan xx

Elaine George

Date: 2/7/2016 5:36:00 AM

A beautiful heartfelt Quatern, dear Jan. Many congrats on your win. Elaine

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2016 7:16:00 AM

Thanks Elaine:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/7/2016 4:20:00 AM

JAN, Congrats in Andrea's contest. LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2016 7:16:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/6/2016 6:48:00 PM

a touching quatern, Jan. I bet this is a true story from all the things you have told me are happening on your island lately. I enjoyed seeing this entry in my contest. Congrats for your win

Jan Allison
Date: 2/6/2016 6:50:00 PM

No just pure imagination for me Andrea I really enjoyed the challenge as its my first try at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/3/2016 5:14:00 PM

A lovely, touching write ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 2/3/2016 5:18:00 PM

Thanks CayCay it;s my first attempt at this form and it turned into a very sad poem ... I hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 1/28/2016 11:59:00 PM

So beautiful, Jan, this reminded me of my granddaughter. One day after shopping she wanted to stop my daddy's grave, of course I didn't want to take her, but she insisted. When we got there she laid on his grave giving my daddy a big hug and kissed the ground. I cleaned the head stone and laid some flowers so when we got ready to leave she laid on the grave again saying goodbye :'( I will always remember

Jan Allison
Date: 1/29/2016 7:56:00 AM

Oh Eve that really brought a lump to my throat - my poem is from my imagination but your words hit home hard:-( hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 1/27/2016 12:29:00 PM

awww Jan, this is beautiful lady..Perfect for the contest, good luck! *smiles* -luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 1/27/2016 1:29:00 PM

Thanks LuLoo I wrote the repeating line in the car when we came back from the hotel on Sunday and i based the sad poem around that line - my first attempt at this form so I am pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 1/26/2016 9:46:00 AM

Jan, so sadly beautiful, I loved your Quatern, sometimes children just do not comprehend death as we do, best of luck, dear heart ~

Jan Allison
Date: 1/26/2016 1:47:00 PM

Thanks Broken Wings - I thought of the repeated line on the journey home from the hotel and wove my poem around it:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/25/2016 11:42:00 PM

the birthday girl weaves a tender and deep write... i am taken by this, jan!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/26/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks so much Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 1/25/2016 11:32:00 PM

Lovely write, Jan, I can relate to this, I spent more time with my Mum as a chil since Dad worked all his life and died young. And a fine first attempt at a Quatern, will do well. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 1/26/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks Mr Viv I do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 1/25/2016 8:36:00 PM

A very moving write Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/26/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/25/2016 6:42:00 PM

very touching and beautifully written, jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/26/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thanks Ilene it's my first attempt at this form and I am pleased with the way the poem turned out:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 1/25/2016 4:20:00 PM

JAN, Excellent written poem, Awesome flow. Luv ** SKAT **

Jan Allison
Date: 1/25/2016 5:07:00 PM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Rob Bettridge

Date: 1/25/2016 3:36:00 PM

Thank you Jan for sharing such touching emotions with us. (7)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/25/2016 5:06:00 PM

As you know I love to write with humour but I do like to try new forms and this is my first attempt :-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 1/25/2016 3:29:00 PM

So sad Jan...brought a tear to my eye

Jan Allison
Date: 1/25/2016 5:05:00 PM

It is an emotive write Tim I had the repeated line and I created the poem around it it's my first attempt at the form and I'm pleased with the final poem:-( Hugs jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 1/25/2016 2:18:00 PM

with every memory we will eventually come to the place we'll see for all Eternity....Beautiful write jan....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/25/2016 2:24:00 PM

Thanks Eric it is my first attempt at this form and I am pleased with the end result:-) hugs Jan xx