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I Beat Up the Sun

But the fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, gentleness and self-control. The law is not against such things. Galatians 5:22-23 I BEAT UP THE SUN The sun is finally coming up. I beat it up with my hands, hammering the tablet and my eyes darting back and forth as if I were an old-fashioned carriage on a typewriter. Reading my friends before cockcrow. Gears, spinning, pushed and pulled me out of bed. Galatians scripture meditation off a tooth. Reading to get it right. Proverbial pen bleeding ink as I think about the long, long day ahead, filled with pounding, staining, sustaining, amusement of midnight colors, lights in the church windows, all else stark begging for a good night’s sleep. Deep, I shall dream in the morning, as I set sail, way past the sun. But alas, it will not be so, for coffee clashes with that ship called friendship, so I will pour myself out of bed, clean up a bit, stir in cream, motivate myself into believing I can do it all. Light in the church window will create a smile, because I put it there; true of snow and the stars, too. I can do anything as long as I get a grip on the day. Fruit of the Spirit, all nine - a healthy feast.

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Date: 10/23/2023 5:23:00 PM
Your word style is just amazing, especially because it's so simplistic. Love it!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/23/2023 6:06:00 PM
I really appreciate that! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 10/20/2023 8:03:00 PM
This poem is so cleverly written, Kim. Almost stream of consciousness, but intentional. Love your phrasing, and I love your references to Scripture, as well. A real treat to read and a Fave!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 8:07:00 PM
Thank you so much, Laura! :)
Date: 10/20/2023 7:04:00 AM
“ as if I were an old-fashioned carriage on a typewriter” what a brilliant and authentic line that is so creatively crafted. “ Proverbial pen bleeding ink as I think about the long, long day ahead“ i can resonate with that. So descriptive and so well flowing, with such exquisitely woven thoughts, and the quote on the top, i agree too, loved reading this .
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:17:00 AM
Thank you! I appreciate you so, Ink Empress! :)
Date: 10/19/2023 7:34:00 PM
Fruit of the spirit? is that in Galations. Well writen.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:19:00 AM
Yes, it is! If we lived within the Holy Spirit’s harmony, we would live happily ever after!
Date: 10/19/2023 2:38:00 PM
exciting poem, uplifting, you move forward, and the reader follow, enjoyed Kim, what a wonderful title yann
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:19:00 AM
Thank you, Yann! I appreciate you so much!
Date: 10/19/2023 1:54:00 PM
so much to like about this poem, Kim. I appreciate the imagery and power within the context of your words; yet, there's a softness and gentleness that's soothing especially with the last few lines. Nicely done, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:20:00 AM
Thank you for taking the time to read and express your thoughts about the poem! I very much appreciate you! xx
Date: 10/19/2023 11:13:00 AM
Wonderful excerpt from St Paul. Wonderfully developed with a great finale. Hugs and blessings.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:20:00 AM
Thanks so much! Hugs and blessings, dearest friend!
Date: 10/19/2023 10:41:00 AM
A wonderful write. Great ending... Have a blessed day writing away...............
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:21:00 AM
Oh, thank you so much and to you too! Happy everyday writing, dear one!
Date: 10/19/2023 7:25:00 AM
Meditating on a scriptural verse that bears fruit to all things good, Very nicely done
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:22:00 AM
Joe, thank you for your very nice sentiment! <3
Date: 10/19/2023 6:49:00 AM
Oh my what energy loved reading your work.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:22:00 AM
Thank you, dear Joyce <3
Date: 10/19/2023 6:46:00 AM
Very lovely and full of zeal poem! Have a nice day ~AA
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:22:00 AM
Thank you, Abdullah! I appreciate you!
Date: 10/19/2023 6:41:00 AM
With a meal of fruitage of the spirit, we should be nourished every day. I liked your occasional rhyming where not expected, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:23:00 AM
Thank you for noticing the rhyming! I often let my poem find its own pace! Let’s live by God’s fruit! We cannot go wrong!
Date: 10/19/2023 6:22:00 AM
- ... first of all ... enjoy your coffee, Kim :) - Great written :) - hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:24:00 AM
You are so sweet! Wish we could have a cup together :) Blessings and Cheer, Sweetie!
Date: 10/19/2023 6:18:00 AM
If one believes that one can do everything with God's assistance, the word 'impossible' will be removed from our mind and thoughts. So don't think of 'the long long day ahead'. Great penning dear Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/20/2023 11:26:00 AM
I have learned that too. Take your daily steps, staying with God’s restful pace…restful, not always sitting nor sleeping but doing His work His way. God bless you so much! <3

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