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some say life digs its own grave ~ from my pov i’m building mountains (By poet) More aware than I’m feeling less abstract than my dreams Reality’s that one special place somewhere in the between Consciousness is about living Oblivion for erasing all death What gives us persisting life brain activity, our next breath Questioning everything I see understanding very little at all The nightmare of intelligence begs more than it can solve Writing to vent my frustration sharing views of the unseen No one knows beyond doubt why life needed human beings I know that God created us so did the Big Bang as well there is a place called heaven alongside our man made hell But all this explains nothing other than, try a leap of faith Just like my words here fail to express meaning, but wait! You live, you always have, your own death’s impossible to taste We watch others dying each day in demise, all experience effaced To be, is the only reality possible consciousness, you get my drift Our chance to feel and reason, death is zilch, life’s the only gift Writing Challenge - G Words - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France 02/21/23 Gift prompt #6

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Date: 3/2/2023 12:22:00 AM
David, congratulations on your Honorable Mention in my Writing Challenge - G Words, I like your quote, blessings, Constance
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David Kavanagh
Date: 3/2/2023 2:18:00 AM
Thank you Constance, I really appreciate your mention, all the more because I know my poems can be difficult to assess, cheers David
Date: 2/27/2023 1:49:00 PM
Congratulations excellent! Your reward is waiting for” you in my poem.. “señorita, sexy… The picture posted after nine tries. Enjoy….. Pangie
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Date: 2/27/2023 2:03:00 PM
Thank you Pangie, and for the bonus picture, A sexy señorita indeed she is, cheers David
Date: 2/25/2023 11:50:00 AM
- Great said ... something to "chew" on - Congratulations ... enjoy reading, David :) - hugs
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Date: 2/25/2023 12:17:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise, we all need something to chew on, I enjoy putting stuff out there, and hope the reader gets it, cheers David
Date: 2/24/2023 7:52:00 PM
"in demise, all experience effaced" - a great truth, indeed. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 2/25/2023 1:03:00 AM
Heya Chris, I believe no time exists in death, eternity will pass by faster than the blink of an eye, wiping the slate clean, cheers David
Date: 2/24/2023 4:03:00 PM
Your poem is great, David! I love your lines, "no one knows beyond doubt why life needed human beings" So very true! Congratulations!
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Date: 2/25/2023 12:58:00 AM
Thank you Ann, I honestly believe the answer to why life needed human beings, is the very reason we’re here, hope that makes sense, cheers David
Date: 2/24/2023 2:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a powerful write/quote. Life is a gift we need to be thankful for. Have a great/blessed day writing away........................
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Date: 2/24/2023 2:30:00 PM
Heya Paula, A complex poem, but one that offers me hope, even though it may not seem apparent to all, thanks so much for stopping by with the good news, cheers David
Date: 2/23/2023 12:42:00 PM
Plenty to think about here David, I often wonder does our consciousness live on when we die or does it die along with our body. Theories abound but never any definitive answers. Tom
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Date: 2/23/2023 1:40:00 PM
Heya Tom, my own honest opinion is, when we die an infinity of time passes by instantaneously but we have no awareness of it, and consciousness comes out the other side of oblivion as if we just blinked, to become aware once more like we did through birth; of course this is not a religious or scientific view, but an abstract one that makes sense to me, cheers David
Date: 2/22/2023 11:01:00 AM
What a profound poetry David!! Loved the last two lines...
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Date: 2/22/2023 1:21:00 PM
Thank your Smita, delighted to meet you, and also delighted you see the profundity of trying to understand existence and reality in a poem, cheers David
Date: 2/22/2023 8:26:00 AM
Now we exist.... that's the only reality ! Our existence or the gift of life is unquestionably the greatest gift. So live every moment ! Thoughtfully composed. All the best in the contest, dear David
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Date: 2/22/2023 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Valsa, I do try enjoy every moment in life, even taking a rest without any stress is a gift in itself, as indeed is stretching our imagination in a poem, cheers David
Date: 2/22/2023 7:37:00 AM
Human mind is as small as a grain of sand. Yet you argued well.
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Date: 2/22/2023 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Victor, possibly arguing with myself, although I believe reality works on the infinitely small as well as the infinitely large in terms of scale, yet both are equally important and essential to maintain conscious life, cheers David
Date: 2/22/2023 4:48:00 AM
Well said, David. Your ending says it all. Definitely the most precious gift we can ever receive (life) I guess we won't find out until the end whether or not death's gift is more precious (lol) Great write and best wishes in the contest. Cheers Charlie
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Date: 2/22/2023 6:04:00 AM
Heya Charlie I’m not banking on death to provide any gift, other than wiping the slate clean through oblivion, just like before we were born, I believe consciousness is the only reality that can ever be, but hey it’s only an opinion, I really know nothing for sure other than I exist in a conscious state, cheers David
Date: 2/21/2023 5:04:00 PM
Very contemplative poem, makes one think!
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Date: 2/22/2023 12:54:00 AM
Thank you Aysha, I gave a more detailed explanation behind my rationale to Lin below, I like to get people thinking outside the box, cheers David
Date: 2/21/2023 3:02:00 PM
David, you’ve created a marvelous poem whose verses advocate that sometimes ignorance really is bliss. Enjoy one day at a time as it’s given to us.
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Date: 2/22/2023 12:51:00 AM
Thank you Lin, I like to give the reader something to think about, no awareness in death only life, and from one’s pov, the self is always alive, death will pass by instantaneously into life again, it may take an infinity of time, but time does not exist in death either, just my humble belief that God/eternity needs us as much as we need them to perceive consciousness, shoot me now! It’s a totally unprovable/disprovable poem, yes enjoy life if we can, cheers David

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