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Four Cafes Premiere Contest Winner

High above the quiet, darkened streets of January, the night wind begins to whisper secrets through my apartment window casements. Far below me lie four cafes, all in sync as they awaken from daytime hibernation to begin an evening ritual of turning on lights, welcoming thirsty patrons, discouraging lost polar bears, trying to survive. Light bulbs hang in lazy swags, dripping evenly from the edge of each identical awning. Predictably, their glow travels as fast as the light itself creating a sudden and uninvited interruption of the Arctic desert landscape. Sitting apart on their respective corners below, the cafes squeeze into a single pane near the bottom of my window. Leaning closer, I blow a hot and intoxicated breath onto the glass in defiance or retaliation, an attempt at immolation perhaps. Instead, my unused air lies wasted across the cafes on the other side of the window, in an irregular oval of futility. I use a balled-up fist to wipe away the misty scene before it has a chance to evaporate and leave me alone, a desperate and inevitable disappearing act in the face of my curated isolation.

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Date: 2/21/2024 5:49:00 PM
Very moving to me, and made me smile purely in recognition…very much what I think poetry should do. Thank you for sharing
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Date: 1/21/2024 9:53:00 AM
Congratulations on top spot, Jaymee. I really love that last small verse and how it really shows the feeling of isolation.
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Date: 1/18/2024 3:40:00 PM
Congratulations
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Date: 1/18/2024 11:03:00 AM
Congratulations on this win, Jaymee. You're certainly not a poet meant for curated isolation!
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Date: 1/18/2024 10:09:00 AM
Well, of course that had to do well, Jaymee! It was top winner in a contest during last year that I named "Four Cafés" . Congratulations for a further Trophy win out of my choice of 35 "Most Viewed". // Isn't it odd that some people don't read the type of entry before commenting? Andrea, (see three posts above), referenced your last paragraph as a "small verse"! Lol!
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 1/18/2024 10:48:00 AM
Haha! I saw your contest and looked up my most viewed poem and was DELIGHTED to find out which one it was. I thought even if it didn't take a top spot you might find it just as serendipitous as I did :) I think I'm going to move toward more prose work moving forward. I enjoyed doing this one so much. Thank you again!!
Date: 1/18/2024 10:08:00 AM
Jaymee, congratulations on your trophy win. Such an interesting and unique approach to the contest theme. Blessings of health and happiness to you.
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Date: 11/20/2023 4:03:00 PM
Hey, got a trophy on your first try. Welcome to PS Jaymee
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Date: 3/23/2023 9:02:00 AM
Avant-garde—your poem combined interest and smart, edgy ideas. Congratulations on your win! I Am Anaya & a beautiful avatar is it you?
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Date: 3/18/2023 7:17:00 AM
Congratulations Jaimee on a superbly well written poem on a difficult topic.
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Date: 3/16/2023 11:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win in this contest. Wonderful poem.
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Date: 3/15/2023 8:01:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Your first posted poem is a trophy winner. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
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Date: 3/15/2023 4:47:00 PM
Love this almost whimsical write Jaymee! Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 3/15/2023 9:59:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Jamee.
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Date: 3/15/2023 8:51:00 AM
Very nice, Jaymee. Congratulations on First Place!
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Date: 3/15/2023 6:07:00 AM
Nicely done Jaymee
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Date: 3/15/2023 3:37:00 AM
Congratulations Jaymee - I knew yours stood out! Well done :)
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Date: 3/15/2023 3:33:00 AM
Congratulations, Jaymee.
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Date: 3/15/2023 2:12:00 AM
Hello Jaymee, Your first entry on this site has been awarded a trophy*. Well done for doing so well in my contest I set up which I called "Four Cafés." // *As well as on this page, you will see a trophy against your prose when you look at the Poetry Soup page showing the titles of your work.
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 3/15/2023 12:38:00 PM
Thank you so much. I had a ton of fun with your prompt! Something about it being so prescriptive added a whole new layer of joy to the process. Thank you for that. And for the win. I'm still buzzing with excitement about it :)
Date: 3/13/2023 12:51:00 PM
I ended up putting my first version in short stories as went way over!
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Date: 3/13/2023 10:50:00 AM
Loads of great content in this, but it will be worth checking the blogs by this sponsor. She's been very particular about set details that need including. I really like the evening ritual aspect of the lights going on :)
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 3/13/2023 12:22:00 PM
You are such a thoughtful commenter. Thank you! I wondered whether it dipped too much into poetic language, but I really enjoyed the prompt and the character limit was a great challenge for me as I tend to want to use a lot of words.

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