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He edged his way towards the wooden door which often had intrigued his fertile mind. With racing heart he put his trembling hand upon the latch and pressed it gently down. It opened slowly and a chink of light invited him to cross the virtual line which gave access to eager novelty. Up narrow winding stairs he groped his way, when all at once he halted in his tracks as music somehow caught him unawares. Then mesmerized he followed in its wake transported by arousing sound, till when the balcony came into view, and awed he stood enraptured by a new found love: as time stood still, the organ cast its spell. Then silence fell, and with a sense of guilt, he hastily retreated down the stairs. This ten year old went home and in his room lay on his bed, wrapped in euphoria, his mind made up at such a tender age. My father studied music, was self taught; the banjo played, piano and guitar, but his true love he never did betray: he kept the organ closest to his heart. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - 24 lines Contest: Blank Verse II Sponsor: Janice Canerdy © 11th June 2017

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Date: 1/4/2018 7:40:00 PM
Awww. What a beautiful tribute to father and son relationship and both their loves of organ music. Makes me friggin teary eyed. So lovely, Paul.
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/5/2018 5:13:00 AM
The 3ws and beautiful comments are truly appreciated, Rhoda...thank you. Hope your eyes are not still dwipping:) Regards // paul
Date: 12/15/2017 5:44:00 PM
Paul, as usual I am enthralled! I have the feeling that these were church steps your father climbed that wonderful day... My imagination was captured by your poem and I could feel your words as if transported to this lovely moment in time.. and my heart warmed as did my smile. Talented; like father, like son. A beautiful and transcendent write my friend. Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Date: 12/17/2017 11:21:00 AM
You are correct, Susan. In time my father, who was a teacher and watch repairer, became the church organist. He also composed religious music. Thank you for the compliments:) Hope you're enjoying the weekend, my friend. Warm regards // paul
Date: 9/8/2017 3:17:00 PM
Oh i like the way this poem ended. his son has the love of music. I felt a smile spread on my face. Have a nice day my friend.
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2017 3:10:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed this poem, Darlene. Best wishes to you too, my friend. // paul
Date: 8/2/2017 9:22:00 PM
This enchanting poem deserves to be on the winner's list Paul! It is beautifully written. Congratulations my friend! : )
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Date: 8/5/2017 2:26:00 PM
I'm so pleased that you liked it, Connie....thank you:) Regards // paul
Date: 6/28/2017 3:17:00 PM
Your pen was golden on this poem, MR. I loved the whole composition of this prose. Expertly done by a talented poetess. Superb poetry, dear. Love always.
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Date: 6/18/2017 12:30:00 AM
From a musician's heart, I can imagine a young classical musician (Bach, Brahms, Beethoven) just as you described here. Congratulations on your placement, well-done appealing piece.
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Date: 6/24/2017 6:23:00 AM
Thank you, Reason. I like the way you look at this poem. Regards // paul
Date: 6/17/2017 9:46:00 PM
Coming back with congrats - glad to see this on the winners list.
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Date: 6/24/2017 6:22:00 AM
Thank you for a double visit, and the congrats, Agnes:) Regards // paul
Date: 6/17/2017 5:22:00 PM
Paul, thanks for entering this well-written, appealing poem in my contest. Congrats on your win! Janice
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Date: 6/24/2017 5:55:00 AM
Thank you, Janice; it was my pleasure to participate in your contest. Regards // paul
Date: 6/17/2017 9:39:00 AM
Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.
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Date: 6/24/2017 5:54:00 AM
Thank you, Funom. Your complimentary remarks are appreciated. Regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 10:29:00 PM
Musical spells lead to lovely melodies...Well written Paul
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Date: 6/13/2017 8:29:00 AM
Thank you, Joseph. Best regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 10:23:00 PM
Very touching poem, xoxo
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Date: 6/13/2017 8:31:00 AM
Thank you. How lovely to have you visiting again, Aurore! You've been missed:) Regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 3:29:00 PM
I love this poem, Probir. You draw the reader in with your wonderful detailed storytelling, and the blank verse appears to be effortless. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 6/13/2017 8:27:00 AM
I am so pleased that you liked it, Agnes; thank you for the lovely comments. Regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 9:44:00 AM
Superb Paul - this deserves a win. I'm not as descriptive as you in your reviews and in fact who am I to review a master word craftsman such as you. Your Father's and your passion of music was shared by my late Dad who was a master classical musician of 18 instruments - He was the lead violinist in many Musicals while he played the piano and xylophone (with 8 hammers) - I love anything to do with music...Maria
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:09:00 AM
Thank you, Maria; your generous plaudits are truly appreciated. Your dad was very talented! My dad was a teacher whose main hobbies were music and watch repairing; for many years he was a church organist and composed religious works. ~ Warm regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 6:03:00 AM
Oh! This is just beautiful... You did super well... Thanks for sharing this magical piece....
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Date: 6/13/2017 7:49:00 AM
Your lovely comments are much appreciated, Supraja! Thank you! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 6/12/2017 12:03:00 AM
I really enjoyed this Paul! I love music!
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Date: 6/13/2017 7:48:00 AM
Thank you, Arthur. Where would we be without music?! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 6/11/2017 8:00:00 PM
Very well written, Paul. Totally enjoyed this poem. Music was an early love of mine, also:)
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Date: 6/13/2017 7:46:00 AM
Thank you, Daniel. Music and words are excellent mediums for all, especially poets! Regards // paul
Date: 6/11/2017 7:13:00 PM
what a wonderful topic and you did great justice to this blank verse form that so many fail to understand completely. I see you went all the way to 24 lines like I did. I bet you get a win!
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Date: 6/13/2017 7:17:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. I did not take length into consideration, and when I finished it was far too long. Took me a while till I managed to shrink it down to 24 max lines! Regards // paul
Date: 6/11/2017 5:41:00 PM
Wow this is just excellent! Love it :)
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:33:00 AM
Many thanks, Heidi:) Have a nice day! Regards // paul
Date: 6/11/2017 5:30:00 PM
I love this.
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:32:00 AM
Glad you liked it, Dale...thank you. // paul
Date: 6/11/2017 5:19:00 PM
Intriguing all the way to the very end, Paul.
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Paul Callus
Date: 6/13/2017 4:20:00 AM
Thank you, Lin. Have a lovely day. Regards // paul

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