Erase Me

Severed from the cut of your jib Alone my aching heart's Vitality left on a baited breeze Erasing what was left of me Memories oh sweet sweet memories Erase this daunting pain Plucked from a sacred truth Left to soar in a clouded blur Erase this scary dream Alone my aching heart Sleeps Erase these fateful dreams

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Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/12/2016 5:21:00 PM

Slowly slowly... over to the dark side..... great write!

Carl Fraser

Date: 10/12/2016 7:49:00 AM

A very emotional write Tim. Your words are cutting but from the heart. Blessings Carl

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/12/2016 7:29:00 AM

I wonder where your darkness comes from, Tim. You always seem so happy and upbeat when we talk. Very sad poem.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/11/2016 11:50:00 PM

harrowing angst craftily done in acrostic form, tim... good one!..huggs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/11/2016 11:20:00 PM

This is cleverly expressed Tim.

Darren White

Date: 10/11/2016 10:16:00 PM

This is a poem that resonates in me, because often that is how I feel and oh how I wish my dreams were erased... It's hauntingly beautiful

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/11/2016 10:03:00 PM

intense, I like the agony in this, well wrote sweets

John Lawless

Date: 10/11/2016 8:33:00 PM

Hey Tim, I didn't pick up on the acrostic until I read the comments below. Well done If only this fateful dreams could be erased.

Seren Roberts

Date: 10/11/2016 6:04:00 PM

so very well written, a fav...Seren

James Tate

Date: 10/11/2016 5:25:00 PM

You pulled me in without realizing I was reading an acrostic. Good job.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/11/2016 4:15:00 PM

Fabulous acrostic Tim this moved me to tears - so so emotional a poem:-) hugs Jan xxx

John Hamilton

Date: 10/11/2016 2:16:00 PM

Really well done, drew me right into your desperate cry of emotion. Never could imagine it was an acrostic so well written!

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/11/2016 2:00:00 PM

So much palatable emotion - which you are better than good at. I am eager for happiness to take hold of you again and I know it will. The time will come when we shall all miss these sad, beautifully written poems of yours ... CayCay

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/11/2016 12:52:00 PM

Memories can be sweet or bitter, Tim. I feel the pain in this write.

Chris Green

Date: 10/11/2016 12:37:00 PM

The poet seems to be in pain in this, which is easily felt as is the desperation for that pain to cease. Nice acrostic Tim.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/11/2016 12:39:00 PM

Thanks Chris.