Dreams Fade

"When the dreams fade away and tomorrow becomes just another day" Tomorrow's wishes blowing slowly back in grasping frantically onto a worry free mind trapped in time with Saturday's matinee living out a faded black and white dream Darkness slips the edge of night shivers grab rough and take hold motionless emotionless stares scare and weary legs can never run away Screams shrill from the morning sun the light of another day awakened tremors subside the shutters blind broken pieces gathered and shined

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/13/2017 1:49:00 PM

Hi Tim. Now that's the spirit of the little engine that could. And yes turning darkness and negativity into light and positiveness. Thank goodness for tomorrow and the sun. Your expression and message are wonderful and inspiring. Well done completely. Have a good night.

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/13/2017 7:20:00 AM

Tim, you make this look so easy. Loved it, even though it has that sad feel to it. Hope you are doing good! Excellent write

Eric Boddie

Date: 6/9/2017 7:00:00 PM

"motionless emotionless stares scare"....i really like that line right there....and tim, my good friend....i see it will never end....because your talents simply soar....leaving the rest of us trying to keep score....so maybe one day we will be able to write like this....my good friend, you talent is too great to resist....excellent work tim....

Akkina Downing

Date: 6/9/2017 6:47:00 PM

A great write Tim. Keep dreaming :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/9/2017 8:55:00 AM

You do dark clouds well Tim. I hope you are not in a sad place.

Sara Ella

Date: 6/9/2017 4:41:00 AM

A sad one my friend but well done :) Hopefully new dreams replace the old <3

Darren White

Date: 6/9/2017 3:17:00 AM

Dreams fade, but new dreams come along. What are we if we are not able to dream anymore? Beautiful, my friend.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/8/2017 11:51:00 PM

Come in from the shadows friend Tim, I hope I'm not sensing a trend, still well done...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/8/2017 10:20:00 PM

Dreams also fade if your a Habs fan! LOL Seriously I liked this, made me reflect on a few things! :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/8/2017 5:01:00 PM

A sad feeling we can experience Tim and you have expressed it so well!

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/8/2017 10:43:00 AM

Without dreams, life never changes. Chasing dreams is what keeps us young at heart. Your poem is a little sad to me, Tim.

Lin Lane

Date: 6/8/2017 10:29:00 AM

"Darkness slips the edge of night" is a wonderfully poetic line, Tim.

Chris Green

Date: 6/8/2017 10:19:00 AM

I know this feeling my friend in more ways than one. It seems there is always something that starts off as a dream and ends up being something much different, making tomorrow just another day. This site comes to mind, it is so disappointing. Just my opinion.

Chris Green
Date: 6/8/2017 10:20:00 AM

I forgot to say great poem, you really expressed these feelings wonderfully. I like the word choices and the feel of this poem. Nice one.