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Dark or decayed Contest Sponsored by Constance la France 09/08/23

8th September is national Suicide Prevention Day

cannot cope with life depression – silent killer feeling so alone quiet and withdrawn personality changes ... suicidal thoughts a failed overdose is often a cry for help we need to listen if you are worried about a friend or loved one offer your support you could save a life engage in conversation … “how are you today”

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/19/2023 2:44:00 AM

hi Jan I can see why you called this dark Saying that its a well thought out well with a strong message kudus soup mail

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/13/2023 1:41:00 PM

So much better Thanks to you Jan Lifesaver In regards to the actual real true meaning Value of life itself

Constance La France

Date: 9/10/2023 10:52:00 PM

Jan, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, the message is so important, Constance

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:43:00 AM

It's not like me to write so darkly Constance, thanks for inspiring us with your contest prompts:-) hugs Jan xx

Christuraj Alex

Date: 9/10/2023 8:55:00 PM

A beautiful senryu chain. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:43:00 AM

Thanks so much Christuraj:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/10/2023 10:30:00 AM

Congrats here, Jan. This is an important message for sure.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:42:00 AM

Too many lives on our island are being lost to suicide, sadly the number has increased since lock down:-) hugs jan xx

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/10/2023 8:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your contest top win with this lovely poem, JAN

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2023 1:42:00 AM

Thanks so much:-) hugs jan xx

Arlo Parker

Date: 9/9/2023 10:26:00 PM

Suicide by gun, last words: 'Ohhhh sh....". It only takes a second to be kind. :o/

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2023 1:09:00 AM

Sad situation isnt it, there are few suicides by guns here I have only read of one they find other ways to end their lives here usually found hanging - one by the local play area:-( such desperation to end a life in such a way. hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/9/2023 2:18:00 AM

Your poem is psychotic perfect. I don't know if there are suicides in Malta because such events are not published so as not to encourage the feeble souls. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2023 9:48:00 AM

I can understand the reason behind not disclosing the information but on our little Island bad news travels fast:-( hugs jan xx

Gary Radice

Date: 9/9/2023 2:08:00 AM

One in four of us will have varying degrees of mental health issues in our lives and yet much of the public shy away from discussing or learning about such. Your senryu is a timely reminder Jan of debilitating conditions such as depression etc that can have serious consequences if help is not sought. I think these days are a great idea but would love awareness day every day of the year. Nice work. Cheers - Gary

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2023 9:47:00 AM

we are lucky on the island there is the Samaritans to call 24/7 and also Isle Listen. hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/9/2023 12:47:00 AM

You have no idea how touching this poem is, you would be shocked even to know, I read another poem about depression as well, by chance and couldn't believe the insensitive comment of one. Some never learn, but that's beside the point, this poem is a gem and maybe even preformed a miracle.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2023 9:47:00 AM

aww thanks Arthur, I too am shocked by insensitive comments, but thankfully none on this particular poem, it is such an emotive subject and heartbreaking for those left behind wondering... what if, if only I had ... :-( hugs jan xx

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/8/2023 4:25:00 PM

Excellent advice -- truly we all "get by with a little help from friends" -- phrase of the day: "be a friend to someone today".

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 4:55:00 PM

lovely phrase Joe:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/8/2023 2:33:00 PM

Impromptu act might be able to help but there are some that are chronic, sadly, like my dear sweet nephew… You learn much. Well done, dear Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 4:00:00 PM

its heartbreaking when a life is lost to suicide and the thoughts of ... if only. my mum was a volunteer at a charity called 'the Samaritans' there was always someone at the end of a phone 24/7. hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/8/2023 2:31:00 PM

i appreciate this thoughtful senryu to raise awareness, jan, being a sufferer myself and having several suicides within the family..yes, a little emotional support and kindness can make all the difference

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 3:57:00 PM

Thanks for sharing your thoughts Charlotte, the more awareness of the subject the better, hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/8/2023 1:10:00 PM

Thank you, Jan, for bringing some light to this darkness. Once again, you've proved your skill for words. Have a blessed day my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 3:56:00 PM

Thanks Jerry I wasnt going to write for the contest then i saw it was suicide prevention day and I got my pen active on this sad subject. hugs jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 9/8/2023 12:55:00 PM

So very true, Jan, sometimes all it takes is a sympathetic ear to bring someone back from the darkness~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 3:56:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, there has been a dramatic increase in suicides on our island since the pandemic, it is such a sad state of affairs - a sympathetic ear can make a huge difference:-( hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 9/8/2023 10:07:00 AM

Depression is a terrible illness that haunts the mind and spirit. You've done those who suffer with it a great service with your Senryu, Jan. Well done.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/8/2023 10:45:00 AM

What a perfectly appropriate name, Jan. More programs should take note.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 10:16:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Lin, it is a dark poem for me and I was struggling to write for the contest then found it was national Suicide prevention Day. We have a service on the island Called Isle Listen, they have helped many who have suffered with depression and suicidal thoughts. Hugs jan xx

The Situation

Date: 9/8/2023 10:03:00 AM

Have you ever heard anybody say "I'm a cancer surviver." ? Well I'm a depression surviver. Three years of torture. A man told me I'll get over it. And when I hit rock bottem I spoke with God. Spoken with God. Spoke to God.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2023 10:14:00 AM

wow The situation that is wonderful to hear you are a depression survivor .. sadly many are not and the suicide rate on our little Island went up during the covid pandemic especially with men... and it is continuing to rise. My hubby has had cancer i(n fact it's the reason i started writing ten years ago), he doesn't call himself a cancer survivor though as we were determined it wouldn't beat him! hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 9/8/2023 10:08:00 AM

That's wonderful, TS. Thanks for sharing your plight. Too many people don't comprehend the seriousness of depression. It's not a thing easily overcome.