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DANCING UNDER THE MOON

On a picnic blanket they lay On a warm afternoon Next to a field of yellow daisies Beautiful in bloom As the sun slowly faded Entranced in a swoon They declared their love for each other Dancing under the moon Every anniversary was spent there She hummed their special tune They celebrated their love Dancing under the moon She left the world before him On a rainy day in June Sunshine left his life that day Replaced by sorrow and gloom Now with a vacant stare He sits in his care home room His mind and memories now faded Thoughts muddled and strewn Yet ,he still remembers yellow flowers Humming of a lovely tune The love he felt for her Dancing under the moon

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Date: 12/22/2022 5:52:00 PM
Ah, the moon is such a huge part of romance, both for those who dream and those who remember. Such poignant and touching words here, Deb. Congrats for your POTD and blessings to you ~ John
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Date: 12/22/2022 4:44:00 AM
A very heart felt poem, outstanding.
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Date: 12/20/2022 12:10:00 PM
Heartfelt and bittersweet Deb! A beautiful sentiment indeed, Belated congratulations xxoo
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Date: 12/20/2022 4:54:00 AM
So beautiful and so very touching. After years of being together in love, suddenly when one leaves, a real vacuum is created in the mind of the other. Many slip into depression. Glad he is able to reflect on the sunny days of their life. Congratulations Deb on your POTD
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Date: 12/20/2022 2:47:00 AM
Hi Deb., Congratulations my friend on this beautiful but sad write being honored as POTD. One of every couple will unfortunately die first, sad fact but true.. Hope you had a lovely day. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 12/19/2022 7:51:00 PM
'Beautiful in bloom; dancing under the moon.' A lovely POTD, Deb! :) gw
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:25:00 PM
This is beautiful, romantic and tender, all at the same time. Love never dies and memories live on. Your thoughts caress gently around me and my heart. Congratulations Deb, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 12/19/2022 4:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTD Deb! Sometimes a loss can be felt so deeply that it leaves a hole in one's soul which cannot be adequately repaired only clumsily patched. Moving, Robert
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Date: 12/19/2022 2:54:00 PM
Thank goodness for beautiful memories. So lovely, Deb XX
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Date: 12/19/2022 2:49:00 PM
Ah, so poignant! "Dancing under the moon" - beautiful recurring line makes me tearful. Congratulations on your POTD honour. Warm wishes ~ Mala
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Date: 12/20/2022 1:07:00 AM
Thankyou Malabika for such a lovely comment….so appreciated! Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 2:26:00 PM
A lovely poignant write, Deb. It truly is better to have loved and lost than never loved at all. Big congrats on POTD. Terry
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Date: 12/20/2022 1:06:00 AM
Thanks Terry and I agree!! Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 2:08:00 PM
Lovely penning Deb with nice rhyme and flow and also good expression too. Congrats on the POTD, blessings,Gordon
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Date: 12/19/2022 11:48:00 PM
Hi Gordon….thankyou for such a lovely comment ….blessings to you…..Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 2:08:00 PM
Beautifully written...congrats on POTD. The loss and melancholy is palpable. Best wishes!
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Date: 12/19/2022 9:30:00 PM
Thanks Andy….appreciate your comment and kind words…..Cheers Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 2:03:00 PM
I feel the devastation of his loss Deb, "Sunshine left his life that day Replaced by sorrow and gloom" Indeed! Congratulations on your POTD Deb!!! Hugs ~Anaya
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Date: 12/19/2022 11:47:00 PM
Thanks lovely Anaya…..Cuddles….Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 1:13:00 PM
Beautiful images and a lovely somber mood. Congrats on potd
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Date: 12/19/2022 9:29:00 PM
Thankyou so much Karen…..I appreciate your kind words….Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 12:31:00 PM
A melancholy delight, Deb. =;o]
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Date: 12/19/2022 9:22:00 PM
Hey Arlo….I like that….A melancholy delight! Nice…..Thankyou so much….Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 10:40:00 AM
Beautiful and awesome. Congratulations on your POTD.
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Date: 12/19/2022 7:10:00 PM
Oh thankyou lovely Victor…. cuddles….Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 7:24:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. A beautiful yet sad write. So true for many. Have a blessed day/week.................
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Date: 12/19/2022 7:10:00 PM
Thankyou so much Paula….good to see you back and feeling better…..Cheers Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 7:13:00 AM
I love this sad and beautiful poem Deb. This evokes so many happy memories of those moments they spent together dancing under the moon . Sweet and poignant . Congratulations on POTD ! Hugs, Susan :)
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Date: 12/19/2022 9:23:00 PM
Thankyou Susan for such a lovely comment….always lovely to see you and read your kind words…..Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 6:44:00 AM
Sweet write Deb. Congratulations on the honor of your POTD! :)
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Date: 12/19/2022 7:20:00 AM
Thank you! Cheers!
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:48:00 AM
Thankyou curious little Owl ( love your photo Linda!) cheers…. Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 5:57:00 AM
Such a precious poem with such precious memories! Beautifully written in a flawlessly flowing form. The refrain "Dancing under the moon" in the earlier three stanzas brings tears as one reads the last. Great work. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:28:00 AM
Oh Alex that is such a lovely sweet comment….thankyou so much i truly appreciate your kind words. Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 5:45:00 AM
Congrats on POTD, Deb. I like the voice of your poem. Enjoy your day.
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:29:00 AM
Thankyou Vijay….lovely to see you always…Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 5:07:00 AM
Congrats on POTD Deb, He holds on to the precious memories of the flowers
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:39:00 AM
Indeed Joe and dancing under the moon! Thanks Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 3:41:00 AM
Such precious memories linger long after death and long after the moon has winked her last goodbye dear Deb. The thing about love is that it is eternal in the hearts of those who have truly owned it, Merry Christmas dear friend, stay well, keep writing, and never lose hope in love :) yay potd
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:53:00 AM
Rose you are the sweetest. I love what you wrote “the moon winked her last goodbye” that is so cute! Thankyou for your kind words…..Debx
Date: 12/19/2022 3:36:00 AM
Deb, a wonderfully penned heartfelt poem, congratulations on POTD!
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Date: 12/19/2022 6:49:00 AM
Thankyou so much Tania….l appreciate your kind words….Debx
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