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Breathless When Together

Love leaves me trembling Love leaves me breathless Breathless and weak Breathless and fragile Fragile as a broken heart Fragile as gossamer wings Wings flying Wings soaring Soaring to great height Soaring over meadows Meadows of wildflowers Meadows awash in sunlight Sunlight in his hair Sunlight reflected Reflected in green eyes Reflected in his smiles Smiles of happiness Smiles of love Love reigns Love set me free Free falling Free flowing Flowing on the wind Flowing in my heart Heart mended Heart glowing Glowing with affection Glowing like stars Stars high above Stars shining bright Bright celestial beams Bright as moonlight Moonlight rules the tides Moonlight and romance Romance with passion Romance through seduction Seduction of my senses Seduction in whispers Whispers in my ear Whispers softly spoken Spoken in sensual breaths Spoken caresses Caresses in the night Caresses with kisses Kisses so deep Kisses linger Linger together Linger forever Forever Together December 29, 2021 "B" Forms, 10 Plus Lines Contest Blitz form written on the theme of 'breathless.' Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 1/20/2022 11:04:00 AM

Lin, congratulations on your Second Place win in my B Forms contest with your wonderful poem ~Constance

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/11/2022 1:02:00 PM

Nice work, Lin. You represented the imagery of breathless very well in this long brevity form. Congrats on your win. Have a great January 12, 2022.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2022 4:14:00 PM

Thanks so much, Reason. I hope 2022 is a great year for you, too.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 1/10/2022 8:21:00 PM

Great poem in Blitz form. Congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2022 4:13:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Chris.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/10/2022 5:32:00 PM

Congratulations on your outstanding and well-deserved win, Lin. You've written an exquisite poem that is full of wonderful concept metaphors.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2022 4:13:00 PM

Thanks so much, Lasaad.

Mark Koplin

Date: 12/31/2021 5:49:00 PM

Amazing Lin, I've never heard of this style before. Well done my friend!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/1/2022 6:32:00 AM

I knew it existed, but I'd never tried it. Not my favorite form because I don't think it allows a poet enough freedom to express emotions, details, etc. I thought I'd take a different approach to the contest. We'll see how it goes, and thanks so much for your encouragement, Mark.

Terry Miller

Date: 12/30/2021 7:45:00 AM

Great write, a sure-fire winner I think.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/30/2021 9:31:00 AM

Thank you for those thoughts, Terry.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/29/2021 10:50:00 PM

This is really breath-taking, Lin, wishing you and your family a Blessed and a Prosperous New Year:)

Lin Lane
Date: 12/30/2021 4:44:00 AM

Thanks for liking this write, Jo. I'm not sure the Blitz form is my style, but I wanted to give it a try. I don't think it allows for enough emotion in poetry, but "Nothing ventured...

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/29/2021 10:15:00 AM

Full of romantic passion and fire. Well composed Lin, a worthy winner I think. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/29/2021 10:24:00 AM

Thanks so much, Tom. I've never written in Blitz form, so I hope I was successful with following the guidelines.