Passing Comment Poems | Examples


Follow my heart? 11-09-25

“Follow your heart, follow your heart,” they say-
but mine bends with the rain,
is bruised by a passing comment,
strangled by the silence
of an awkward moment.

I circle words on a screen,
reading, re-reading,
overthinking… overthinking…
Until my heart
feels more like a maze
of endless calculation.

I’ve tried, for so long,
to live by that phrase,
yet every word pulls me outward,
into the fog of exaggerated judgement
as if I were the center of all things.
Narcissistic, I know
or just sensitive.

And still, like a bee plunging
into a flower too deep,
I find myself sinking,
cloaked in a pollen-fluff
that never belonged to me.

So Called Experts Critics and Coaches

Hard to fathom the logic of
the following

How in sporting terminology
even the great Tiger Woods
in his pomp and prime employed
the service of a swing coach 
with not a single major title to
his name

And Jose football's special one manager never even played professionally himself

As neither is any so called expert
critic in any of the field of art be 
that film , poetry , painting , sculpture
or photography

Because surely if in reality
they we're any good at all 
in there field of expertise 
they would be competing not
teaching or passing comment 

So given that Tiger Woods has
20+ plus majors and is considered
to be the greatest golfer to ever play
the game 

Then why on earth would he need 
to employ the service or be willing 
to listen to the opinion of a coach
without a single major title to his 
name

Likewise why should or would any credible artist or come to that fact member of the general public value
the critical opinion of someone or anyone 

With in essence no more clue than
you or i yet given a platform to 
indoctrinate other's


Closure of You

Awakened with all seeing eye
Focussing, turn away and sigh
An empty space, I have to try
Feeling all askew

Take memory of distant times
Everywhere, as committed crimes
Regretful, revisited mimes
Urgent to renew

A saviour imparts one word
Passing comment mis-heard
To impart meaning kindly shared
Thankfully time flew

Now, I awaken in the morn
Watch silhouetted rising dawn
A sudden plume of hope is born
Closure of you




Date - 7/28/20
Tail rhyme stanza contest
Sponsor - Emile Pinet

Closure of You

Awakened with all seeing eye
Focussing, turn away and sigh
An empty space, I have to try
Feeling all askew

Take memory of distant times
Everywhere, as committed crimes
Regretful, revisited mimes
Urgent to renew

A saviour imparts one word
Passing comment mis-heard
To impart meaning kindly shared
Thankfully time flew

Now, I awaken in the morn
Watch silhouetted rising dawn
A sudden plume of hope is born
Closure of you




Date - 7/28/20
Tail rhyme stanza contest
Sponsor - Emile Pinet

It Raised a Smile

Ironic Remark


This morning in the surgery, a magazine perusing,
I heard this passing comment which I hope you’ll find amusing.
I saw before me, pen in  hand, a happy little boy
But as the waiting time increased, depleted was his joy.

The drawing  book no longer held a source of inspiration,
But Mother’s bare arm certainly deserved investigation.
The pen was poised but Mother shouted much to his chagrin:
‘You’ll be in trouble son if you get ink upon my skin!’

Which tickled me for mother’s arm, I swear that this is true
Was boldly decorated with a full forearm tattoo!
Form: Rhyme


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