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Premium Member Night of Love in Andalusia - Revised Repost
I lounge lazily on my deck chair 
Up high in the spacious loggia 
Loafing the time away, patient, waiting..... 
The ocean ebbs into the small bay 
As the sun sets far away over the horizon. 

From below electric lights flash on 
One by one and...

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Categories: revised, dance, love,
Form: Lyric
Premium Member The Need To Practice - Revised-Ha
The Need for Practice (Revised-Ha!)

Loving yourself is the birth of romance,
Dancing alone is still dance,
Practicing augments one’s courage to try
Failure at worst brings a sigh!

Athletes learn early the secret of gain,
Find they can work through most pain,
Who cares in time they will likely get beat,
Masters...

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Categories: revised, journey, life,
Form: Rhyme
Reaching Deepest Oceans ,Revised
My cherished one How far will I love you
As far as where moons dissolve in deep seas
Beyond the edge of a tide's crimson hue
where your breath quickens sails with fevered  breeze
Alone I 'll embark to our promised land
across long borders of unending pain
under still...

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Categories: revised, love,
Form: Free verse

Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry



Premium Member I Am Free- Healing Power of Forgiveness- Revised
You abused me physically and mentally,
I believed I was everything you said.
I thought you had my back totally,
But my belief in you was hanging by a thread.

I was locked in a mental jail cell.
you were a warden of abuse,
our union together was pure hell.
You would...

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© Alexis Y.  Create an image from this poem.
Categories: revised, how i feel,
Form: Rhyme
Premium Member Twas the Night Before Christmas -Slightly Revised
‘Twas the night before Christmas,
and once in my bed,
no visions of anything 
danced in my head.
The night – uneventful -
no kids bothered me.
No sound of small feet
rushing out to the tree!

My husband lay snoring
at least until ten.
I put on some TV
just waiting for when
my daughter,...

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Categories: revised, christmas,
Form: Rhyme
Premium Member Cat Valentine - Revised
Often at midnight, she jumps on my bed;
she comes to me then on her four small feet.
How softly on my blankets she does tread.
So beautiful is she - genteel and sweet;
she reaches out her paw - her way to greet.
It soothes my spirit to be...

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Categories: revised, cat,
Form: Dizain



Premium Member Put - Revised
You say you want lots of rum? Put it in a big fat drum.
Cooking oils put in drums too. Soy or canola will do.

Put your hands in a basin. Want a jar? How about a Mason?
In a jar, you can put jam, but probably not...

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Categories: revised, humorous,
Form: Verse
Revised and Reposted Poem
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Categories: revised, autumn, flower,
Form: Personification
Premium Member Shadow To Shadow Revised
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Shadow to shadow, shade to shade
In youth the Eden where I played
was left bereft, destroyed, decayed,
by trusts malignant masquerade

Shadow to shadow, shade to shade
Sweet grass dies in my fallow glade
as opportunist needs invade
and bleed the life from every blade

Shadow to shadow, shade to shade
First, victims...

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Categories: revised, abuse, anger, assonance, betrayal,
Form: Monorhyme
Workshop Poem - Goodbye Daddy - Revised
An unseasonably warm November day
In my yard the unsuspecting children play
Left in my loving care with words unsaid
Unaware of the tears they would shed

Future's written, words are hurled
Only eight but a girl of the world
Hair of gold, no worries, no cares
Not ready for what life...

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© Tim Smith  Create an image from this poem.
Categories: revised, death, father daughter,
Form: Rhyme
Revised and Reposted
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Categories: revised, absence, adventure,
Form: Free verse
Premium Member Casino - Revised
I came.
     I saw,
         I won,
              I was greedy.
           ...

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Categories: revised, addiction,
Form: Monoku
Jack the Blue-Eyed Peter Cat (Revised)
The pendulum swings
(Left to right)

Zenith approaches
The vortex opens up…

With head spinning
My spin is heading
Towards your light
On the coattails of a watch and chain…

Tumbling down the word hole
Collecting words,
From the wall of air
That surrounds me,
To consume later…

Too much later
As quixotic adventures
Tilt me away from my pen
And...

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Categories: revised, fantasy, love, passionme,
Form: Free verse
Premium Member Lost Smile : Revised
There was a guy named Al who lost his smile 
And being happy and cheerful was not his style
                       Until he met Dan
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© Alexis Y.  Create an image from this poem.
Categories: revised, humorous,
Form: Limerick
I'M a 9 Revised
Zira
                         You bring me peace
                ...

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Categories: revised, animal, best friend, dog,
Form: Rictameter

Book: Reflection on the Important Things