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Please, if anyone sees an E in my poem, let me know. It's so hard to check and easy not to see it if you are the one who wrote the poem. I had to revise this when I noticed the rule for line limit and I had to eliminate some lines.

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You say you want lots of rum? Put it in a big fat drum. Cooking oils put in drums too. Soy or canola will do. Put your hands in a basin. Want a jar? How about a Mason? In a jar, you can put jam, but probably not a ham. Flour you can put into a bowl. Lay flat for biscuits. Roll and roll. Sugar put into a bowl with flour. Add in things not sour! Put your trash in a bin. In a glass pour your gin. Soup or a drink put in a cup. All night in comfort you can sup. In our sky God put stars. In cartons man put cigars. In cartons too you can put milk. On your hair put a scarf of silk. Put good fruit into a pail. In your mailbox stick your mail. Many things you can put in a box. Things from Amazon, clocks and rocks. Coins I might put in a pouch; cash in cushions of my couch. In my bag I put such things as lipstick, cash, strings or rings. In your lunchbox put a banana. Bikinis, though, put in a cabana! Santa puts gifts in a sack. Shirts you put both front and back. Folks put liquids in a jug. Liquids hot go in a mug. A lot of fluid put in a vat. I don’t think most folks own that. In a bathtub put your body, using bath salts – not too shoddy. Put your wool things in a sink. But dry hot not, or it will shrink! You can put upon a tray things not too big down to lay. Last, should all a body burn, it’s good to hold it in an urn. Jan. 24, 2023 for the Lipogram Poetry Contest of Emile Pinet

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Date: 2/4/2023 1:17:00 AM
Your Lipogram is very entertaining, Andrea :) Congratulations for keeping the "E" at bay :) ... and for your podium finish. Happy weekend, my friend. // paul
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Date: 1/31/2023 10:47:00 PM
Where to put this poem? On the highest spot, brilliant, Andrea:) congratulations:)
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Date: 1/31/2023 11:03:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea! Your poem "PUT" placed "Third" in my Lipogram contest, This was a fun exercise and you did it justice my friend, Emile.
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Date: 1/25/2023 9:13:00 AM
My ES Note Editor failed to find "e" - neither case, but suggested a "Futurists" content ~ not for the hackneyed 'Cabana Bananas' but the plutocratic outrage of ' ... Rocks from Amazon™'! That finally blew the lid off. ~ [ FAV ]
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Date: 1/24/2023 10:40:00 PM
You evaded the letter e with dexterity. Best for a win.
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Date: 1/24/2023 4:53:00 PM
Wow, this is different, and difficult, i've got eight 'E's' here already. Good one Andrea, and good luck.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2023 6:18:00 PM
oh my gosh, are you telling me that you can see eight E's in my poem???
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Harry Horsman
Date: 1/24/2023 4:55:00 PM
Oh i've stuffed this lot up, actually added a couple of more after declaring eight.
Date: 1/24/2023 4:53:00 PM
Love this one Andrea another favorite...
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Date: 1/24/2023 4:04:00 PM
See, and you were going to throw that keyboard away, just because one letter wouldn't work. This cannot be easy. Best of luck in contest.
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Robert Warlov
Date: 1/25/2023 10:00:00 AM
Like Gertrude Stein told Hemingway- 'it's such an easy transition to: "fudge". :) [ "A movable feast" ]
Date: 1/24/2023 12:51:00 PM
- ... woow, Andrea ... impressive ! ... when I read it in Norwegian there are many e's ... E, is a letter that is used often ... it is unbelievable that you can write such a long poem without a single one (E) - Best wishes...this will top the winners list :) - hugs
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Date: 1/24/2023 10:30:00 AM
Dang you nailed this "no E" thing expertly! Everything rhymes so nicely.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2023 12:35:00 PM
thanks, i sure hope you are right. The first time I showed it to a friend, he found at least four places where I had E used. I was shocked I did not spot them!
Date: 1/24/2023 10:21:00 AM
It seems you have got it bottled almost .Andrea I just want to see the size of this container.? All the best in the contest as I often put.' Come to think of it ?I'll try a different term next Comment..'
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