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June 25, 2024

~ Seventh Place ~
Contest: Yesterday’s Wishes 
Sponsor: Craig Cornish


 

Back when girlish daydreams rode the ether like coal-glowy-clouds featly feet kept a beat in spring grass as I flounced with Romany wind breezy-gypsy-lips brushed my cheek as I whirled in his arms ‘til I fell over on pillows of clover… white fields did pillow my dreams as slow-motion-cumulus shape-shifted to what I wanted to see I found you where you stood a wizard-well made of stone there you sang your mouth O-pen like the eye-of-the-storm and oh— with fluent depth your slippery rime beguiled my mind June wind a flowy fifer blew across your rounded rim folksy-fife twisted petticoat heartstrings… wishes stitched seams bewitched — hopes bloomed like soft-stemmed peonies twined in choke-hold-vines in season before my summer solstice when skirt-pleats hid shy knees how was I to know wishing for lambs from edelweiss was as fictive as a sugar-unicorn parade — so I dared not damage the magic with doubt’s dent as I cast blindfolded coins weighed down with cinder-block-hope with fealty to a deity who made ethereal echoes of my name yet callous your schemes pitching dreams empty as a fool but for her shame back then life was unmapped until clover fields became sneak-away-streets your name paved where remains of wishes lay like burned-out cars at curbs

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Date: 9/1/2024 4:18:00 AM
Coming back to read and enjoy again this masterpiece my dearest poet friend Susan and to exoress my warmest congratulations on your win and this exquisite write! You are an amazing poet, one of my favorites. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. God bless you abundantly with your writing career. Hugs
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Date: 9/6/2024 12:34:00 PM
Dearest Len, my wonderful poet friend, I am delighted and deeply touched by your return visit and heartwarming words. Your precious thoughts humble me and fill me with gratitude for your thoughtful friendship and your lovely gift of poetry. Thank you my inspiring friend! Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 7/25/2024 8:36:00 AM
Oh, dear poetess Susan, this poem should of won. Lovely and lyrical in the romance. I hope you're having a breezy and wonderful summer, poetry friend. Many blessings to you. :)
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Date: 8/25/2024 12:24:00 PM
Dearest Regina, accomplished poetess, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your uplifting comments. Life has been overflowing the brim with good busy-ness these days. Thank you for your treasured thoughts and for sharing in the emotions of this poem with me. I'm so happy to know you enjoyed it :) We're having a wonderful (though busy..) summer. I hope your enjoying a breezy and wonderful summer too. Your kindness is truly appreciated my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/20/2024 2:06:00 AM
You are a juggler of words and images, dear Susan and you create magic with your poems. Though you stand at the acme of poetic heights, you remain so humble and down to earth and have a heart to encourage lesser poets and make them feel big. This is another masterpiece. "wishes stitched seams bewitched. — hopes bloomed like soft-stemmed peonies twined in choke-hold-vines" what beauty those dreams of your tender age had. "but I dared not damage the magic with doubt’s dent as I cast blindfolded coins weighed down with cinder-block-hope" .... Again what a fantastic way of expressing your state of mind. You are unparalleled dear poet friend. I feel this should have been placed higher. Continue creating magic with your gifted quill, dear Susan
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Date: 8/25/2024 12:20:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, soulful poetess, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your inspiring comments. Life has been overflowing the brim with good busy-ness these days. I'm in awe of your dazzling thoughts. I am humbled and honored by your kindness. I'm also amazed at your ability to delve through layers of imagery and metaphor to see to the heart of my poem, and the poetry of others too. You express your thoughts in the comment box with the same rich, lyrical, eloquent style as your beautiful and profound poetry that is relished and cherished. Thank you for your uplifting comments. Your starlit heart and poetry friendship are both so deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes my sweet poetry friend.. ~Susan
Date: 7/19/2024 10:32:00 PM
Wow this is so magical. and fealty to deity has such a great ring to it. A well deserved win I see. Congrats, Susan
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Date: 8/25/2024 12:30:00 PM
Dear Andrea, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your wonderful comments and kind congrats. I'm glad you liked fealty/deity.. I was thrilled to fit those two words together :) And 'magical' was the exact feeling I was trying to create, so I'm glad you felt that. Thank you truly for your gracious visit. Your thoughts are treasured. Warmest wishes, dear friend.. ~Susan
Date: 7/18/2024 9:23:00 PM
So nice. I am touched . Excellent start with 'girlish daydreams ' ....ending ......remains of wishes ........ Congrats on your poetic composition. Love
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Date: 8/25/2024 12:27:00 PM
Dear Anisha, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your wonderful comments and kind congrats. Thank you truly for your gracious visit. Your thoughts are treasured. Warmest wishes, dear gifted poetess.. ~Susan
Date: 7/18/2024 5:06:00 PM
Susan, your poetic writing deserves a resounding bravo—it’s a masterpiece from start to finish!
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Date: 7/18/2024 9:53:00 PM
Dear Sherry, thank you for your inspiring comments, they lift my spirit up to the clouds! I am humbled and honored by your kindness. Your response to my poem is treasured. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/16/2024 12:18:00 AM
My dearest poet friend, Susan, this is a precious masterpiece from your super golden pen again! I've seen this contest title before. I thought it wasn't judged yet, but when I scrolled down, I was right, a winner without a doubt. Belated Big Congrats my dearest poet friend for a well-deserved win! Thanks for sharing! Thanks belatedly also for reading my poems. God bless you always and your writings. Best wishes always. Hugs
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Date: 8/25/2024 12:37:00 PM
My dearest poet friend, Len, your precious thoughts touch me deeply. I am both humbled and honored by your kindness bestowed upon my poem and me. Please accept my apologies for my late reply to your beautiful comments. Life has been spilling the brim with a good kind of busy-ness around here lately :) Your gracious visit and heartwarming congrats are truly appreciated. You are ever inspiring, my dear friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 7/13/2024 9:59:00 AM
I would say 'with fluent depth your slippery rime beguiled my mind' is the exact way I would describe how well your poems entice me, and I do not need to fear doubt for your verse is faithful to reassure and inspire, yesterday today and always :)
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Date: 8/25/2024 9:00:00 AM
Dear Michelle, inspiring poetess, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your beautiful and deeply moving comments. Life has been spilling the brim with busy-ness around here lately :) Thank you truly for sharing in the imagery and emotions of this piece with me. I'm honored to receive such precious thoughts as I hold you and your amazing poetry in such high regard. You are an uplifting force and your poetry friendship is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/13/2024 12:42:00 AM
As a poet you grow in stature as each day goes by dear Susan. You are a born writer, but certain things you work on and nurture as you go along. I can tell how seriously you take each new poem you write (even something small and inconspicuous is given due attention and raised to a higher level, exp: "mouth O-pen") I won't comment on the technical points of this poem, my friend...it would take all day! But a fav I shall give :) ~ Warm regards and hugs // paul
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Date: 8/25/2024 8:56:00 AM
Dear Paul, please accept my apologies for my late reply to your beautiful, inspiring and insightful comments. Life has been spilling the brim with busy-ness around here lately :) Thank you truly for sharing in the imagery and emotions of this piece with me. Your in-depth critique is a gem to be appreciated for its value and beauty. Your keen eyes always find the nuggets of experimentation within my verse like "mouth O-pen".. and your response confirms that I'm on the right path. The honor of your fav is deeply appreciated, my esteemed friend. I have to visit your creative pages soon. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 7/11/2024 3:28:00 PM
In field of clover your daydreams rode on the wind. Wonderful write Susan, Best wishes
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:03:00 PM
Dear Joseph, thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts. I appreciate your gracious visit and kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/10/2024 5:01:00 AM
another excellent write from you - unusual and striking word combos, vivid images, some subtle rhyme and alliteration scattered within - congrats on your win! i'm surprised this didn't place higher tbh
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:07:00 PM
Dear Charlotte, your uplifting critique is treasured. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. I’m gratified by you kindness and congrats. I’m so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. I always enjoy your poetic artistry! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 7/8/2024 4:34:00 PM
always on the dot with fine poetry, susan...big. big congrats on your win!
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Date: 7/18/2024 11:00:00 PM
Dear Nette, it’s always wonderful when you visit! Thank you for your treasured thoughts and kind congrats, and for gracing my poem with your shining presence. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/6/2024 2:52:00 AM
Always immensely poetic! Well done and congratulations
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Date: 7/8/2024 11:33:00 AM
Dear DD, your poetic presence here is appreciated as are your kind congrats. Your lovely comments uplift and inspire me. Thank you! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/5/2024 10:59:00 PM
Oh Susan!! Master caster! Genius linguist! I started to write down fav lines as I went... there is more of your poem in my notes than you have typed here I think!<3 but I'll try..."hopes bloomed like soft stemmed peonies twined in choke- hold- vines"... such vivid imagery!... " hid shy knees"..."I dated not damage the magic with doubts dents" so relatable. This is a favorite of mine now whahaha!xoxo
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Date: 7/8/2024 11:44:00 AM
Dear Crystol, I'm elated by your response to my poem, though I'm not sure the term "genius" applies to me on any level lol! You're so kind and generous, my sweet friend. Thank you for sharing in the imagination, whimsy and emotion of this poem with me and for the honor of your fav. Your poetic presence lights up my poem's page and my heart. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/5/2024 10:40:00 PM
definitely a winner. Congrats. Just love this. God bless you always, love, Gina
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Date: 7/8/2024 11:35:00 AM
Dearest Gina, lovely poetess, thank you for the delight of your visit and for your lovely words. Your kind congrats are held in my truest appreciation as is your golden friendship. Warmest wishes, love and hugs, my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 7/5/2024 6:54:00 PM
A june wind of poetic thoughts! amazing, congratulations on your win dear poet. Happy wriitng.
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Date: 7/8/2024 11:31:00 AM
Dear Thriveni, your visit is a delight. Thank you for gracing my poem with your poetic presence and your lovely thoughts. They are truly appreciated as are your kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/2/2024 9:42:00 PM
There is great talent in your poetry. You combine alliteration and metaphors splendidly. Reminiscing on the past has its splendid moments. You always did well.
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Date: 7/3/2024 6:06:00 PM
Dear Victor, it's always wonderful when your poetic spirit graces my page. I'm humbled and honored your kind words. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your golden comments are truly valued. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/30/2024 1:11:00 PM
Enchanting Place, I almost stayed there! Eloquence, Innocence and Purity in this!
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Date: 7/2/2024 5:24:00 PM
Dear Carlene, feel free to visit this "enchanting place" again and stay as long as you'd like. I think your vivid poetry is enchanting. Your such a skilled and creative poet. Your artistry is captivating. Thank you for your gracious visit and beautiful comments. They are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poetry friend.. ~Susan
Date: 6/30/2024 10:21:00 AM
When I was 19 or 20 I fell in love with a girl by the name of Anne. Up til then I had dated so many I lost track, but she was the one. Then she dropped me and my world spun unsteadily. And so it goes... I hereby nominate you as poet laureate of PS. You really are the best, Susan
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Date: 7/2/2024 5:17:00 PM
Dear Tom, thank you for sharing your personal thoughts with me. I'm glad the spirit of my poem touched your spirit. I'm sorry you experienced the destruction of your dream but, as they say, everything happens for a reason and now you're devoted to a wife you adore. Thank you for your kindness.. and nomination hehe.. but there are many top shelf poets here who would qualify for that vaulted title other than/more than me. But I deeply appreciate your faith in my poetry. Your touching words are truly uplifting. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Suze
Date: 6/30/2024 9:46:00 AM
Susan, you have great poetic sense and a way to express ideas that leaves much room for thought. After reading this, I've started to think about my time as a child and the dreams I thought about. TY!!!
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Date: 7/2/2024 5:07:00 PM
Dear Duke, I relish your wonderful response to my poem and I'm glad/touched that this piece inspired you to take the time to think about your own childhood and the dreams you dreamed once upon a time. Thank you for your inspiring words and uplifting spirit, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 6/29/2024 7:12:00 PM
There is a lot of images in this poem. It has a magical sense of time. It is an attractive scene of another time.
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Date: 6/30/2024 9:35:00 AM
Dear Hilda, I'm so glad my poem touched you with a "magical sense of time." I was hoping to create a magical feeling about the speaker's long lost wishes. Thank you for your wonderful visit and insights. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/28/2024 7:34:00 PM
we will always remember the magic of younger years when all was innocent pure...you captured this moment with such elan and flow, susan ...winning wishes to you!
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Date: 6/29/2024 5:58:00 PM
Dear Nette, your gracious visit and wonderful comments are a delight to receive. Memories of innocent times of youth are indeed magical. Thank you for your precious thoughts. Warmest wishes poetess.. ~Susan
Date: 6/26/2024 12:50:00 PM
For sure this is a winner. Maybe another trophy. Oops, no, this isn't a premier contest, but I'm sure it's a winner. Divine.
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Date: 6/29/2024 5:59:00 PM
Dear Andrea, I'm thrilled that you thought my poem was divine. Your esteemed poetic presence here is truly appreciated. Thank you my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/26/2024 10:13:00 AM
Susan, Dear friend, dear poet, what an emotional rush of youthful love that lingers in memory and fills the soul with tender smiles from yesterday
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Date: 6/29/2024 6:04:00 PM
Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, your gracious visit and beautiful comments bring smiles today and fill my soul with appreciation for your poetry friendship. Thank you for your golden thoughts. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/26/2024 8:50:00 AM
What a wonderful write. A great ending. "Good Luck"  Have a blessed day writing away...............
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Date: 6/29/2024 6:00:00 PM
Dear Paula, thank you for your lovely visit and kind comments. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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