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The ants crawl neural zapping stinging bees of anxiety and discontent. Thoughts jibber jabber Polly repeats monkeys chatter. Itches must get scratches and scrawl appears often blather. Revisions, relivings, wallows, exaltation! The blood follows India ink. The dexterous digits dance proposing propositioning , creating. The ants crawl in lines head to tail. Often the bee stings and the digits resume. No horizontal surface finds safety. The scrawl, the bawl, the confounding cynical all. With perpetual redundancy, write on handcuffed only by unconsciousness.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/19/2010 2:51:00 AM
exemplary and excellent write. Whew! is all I gotta say!
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Date: 1/15/2010 12:15:00 AM
Great last line Debbie.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 1/14/2010 7:37:00 PM
YOU ARE TOTALLY UNIQUE IN YOUR WRITING DEB. THIS PAINTS A VARY VIVID PICTURE OF ALL THE EMOTIONS AND SENSES IN PLAY AT THE SAME TIME. SIMPLY SENSATIONAL WRITING. LOVE, LAINIE
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Date: 1/14/2010 4:47:00 PM
Woa! really powerful. I like your style and a GREAT ending! Thanks for commenting on my poem To The Wood. Paper is made from wood. That's what I am referring to. I apologize if it seems vague. Have a great day! Scarlett
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Date: 1/14/2010 3:47:00 PM
Very expressive and descriptive write. Keep us entertained with your creative expression. Sara
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Date: 1/14/2010 12:37:00 PM
Very creative one. is it for the contest, Deborah?
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Date: 1/14/2010 11:17:00 AM
Amazing Deb. You have developed a style of your own that is very much fun no better than fun... deeper... to read. I am enjoying your work. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/14/2010 10:31:00 AM
i really love this poem good scrawl
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Date: 1/14/2010 8:03:00 AM
Nice.... Great writing today friend.... Keep em comin'......:JP]
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Date: 1/14/2010 6:23:00 AM
If I still had my tattoo studio Deborah,..I would hang this write next to some of those "bawling",...."bathering" clients ! james
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Date: 1/13/2010 4:25:00 PM
Loved this...however, it almost made me jittery....me thinks I need to go get the fly swatter!!
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Date: 1/13/2010 4:11:00 PM
This is a good one! Some great phrases.."dextrous digits dance." love it. BG
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Date: 1/13/2010 2:38:00 PM
Hi Deborah, Love the title, the twist on words, very witty! This is filled with much depth with the story line being written in such a way through nature's eyes that I found myself captivated from beginning to end. You give phychology a whole new percpective! The ending is powerful. Thanks for sharing. I truly enjoyed this one even knowing that in the end unconsciousness is inevitable.Take care Love Light Patty
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