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With Poppy Red I Paint It Black

Feeling rife with satisfaction, I paint it black, hours, minutes, seconds, let it bleed as tears go by. Time waits for no one, she’s so cold - no looking back; wild horses in my veins and I’m a fool to cry. Hours, minutes, seconds, let it bleed. As tears go by, can’t you hear me knocking, Heaven? Gimme shelter! Wild horses in my veins and I’m a fool to cry ~ sweet brown sugar is waiting for me to melt her! Can’t you hear me knocking? Heaven, gimme shelter, sympathy. For the devil shattered paradise, sweet brown sugar is waiting for me to melt her. Life, a beast of burden - shooting my tumbling dice. Sympathy for the devil shattered paradise. Waiting on a friend; sister morphine. I’ll miss you life. A beast of burden shooting my tumbling dice, it’s all over now, give the damn devil his due. Waiting on a friend. Sister morphine, I’ll miss you. Time, waits for no one. She’s, so cold... No looking back; it’s all over now. Give the damn devil his due, feeling rife with satisfaction. I paint it black. Susan Ashley April 7, 2018 ______________________________ ~ Second Place ~ Contest: Music Pantoum Sponsor: Silent One *each line is 12 syllables and rhymes* 19 song tiles Rolling Stones; Song Titles: Satisfaction, Paint it Black, Let It Bleed, As Tears Go By, Time Waits For No One, She’s So Cold, Wild Horses, Fool To Cry, Can’t You Hear Me Knocking, Gimme Shelter, Brown Sugar, Sympathy For The Devil, Shattered, Beast Of Burden, Tumbling Dice, Waiting On A Friend, Sister Morphine, Miss you, It’s All Over Now *Street names for heroin* Brown sugar, horse

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Date: 12/1/2018 11:07:00 AM
Congrats on your win. I am sure that wasn't so easy to write. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 12/1/2018 9:48:00 PM
Thank you, Sara, for your gracious visit and for your kindhearted comments and congrats.. and no, this wasn't the easiest poem I've written, that's for sure.. but it was well worth the effort. Your lovely presence here is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 5/30/2018 2:31:00 PM
Wonderful Pantoum, Susan! I love how you wove all the song titles into your lovely, flowing poem. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/30/2018 9:12:00 PM
Your visits always inspire me with joy, Sandra. The beauty and warmth of both your comments and congrats are treasured. Thank you! Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 5/28/2018 3:24:00 AM
Congratulations, Susan on your win with such a beautiful pantoum.
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Date: 5/29/2018 12:16:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal, for you lovely comments and warmhearted congrats. Your kindness is cherished. Best wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/27/2018 5:05:00 PM
I love this one Susan. Brown Sugar was the first rock song I boogied to. Big congratulations on your placement.
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Date: 5/27/2018 5:17:00 PM
Thank you, Jean, for your lovely comments and kindhearted congrats. I'm happy you enjoyed my poem and glad that it brought back a fun memory for you. It's amazing how music and memories so compatibly go hand in hand.. Warmest wishes always ~Susan
Date: 5/27/2018 4:23:00 PM
Awesome creative verse, Susan, congratulations on your Pantoum win... Hugs Eve
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Date: 5/27/2018 4:34:00 PM
Thank you, Eve, for your awesome comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/25/2018 10:50:00 AM
Congrats, Susan, you worked those Stones title into a very well-written poem!
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:20:00 PM
Thank you, Dale, for your lovely comments and warmhearted congrats. Your kindness is deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/25/2018 7:02:00 AM
Back with congratulations on your well deserved win Susan, with your amazing pantoum. :))
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:18:00 PM
Thank you, Roy, for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments. Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan
Date: 5/25/2018 6:32:00 AM
Back with congrats Susan..for your fantastic win at the top.
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:18:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay, for your wonderful words of congrats.. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 5/24/2018 6:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your 2nd place win in the music pentoum contest with the Rolling Stones. Well done!
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:16:00 PM
Your kindness is deeply appreciated, Susan. Thank you for your lovely comments and congrats.. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 5/24/2018 1:28:00 PM
- Congratulations on your wonderful 2nd place in the contest, a great music choice Susan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:15:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise for your kindhearted congrats and wonderful comments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/24/2018 12:59:00 PM
Hi Susan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations to say congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:14:00 PM
Your kindness is deeply appreciated, Alexis. Thank you for your return visit and your lovely congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/24/2018 12:04:00 PM
You can't beat the rolling stones, it must have been so difficult to get all these titles in, but you managed it... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 5/25/2018 11:13:00 PM
Thank you, Silent One, for the honor of my placement in your wonderful contest. Your sponsorship is truly appreciated and it was a joy to participate! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/9/2018 8:55:00 AM
Just like the Stones did with their music, you make a great impact with their titles. I keep wondering when we see results on this contest. A lot of folks gave it their all, like you did!
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Date: 5/9/2018 12:04:00 PM
I'm so happy you enjoyed my use of the Stones song titles, Andrea. Indeed, many great writes came out of this contest theme.. I'm sure we'll see the results soon.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/28/2018 8:37:00 AM
Wow! Amazing! The sadness of drugs. A high that sends you to the depths of hell!
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Date: 4/28/2018 1:03:00 PM
Indeed, Kim.. your comments are as insightful as they are beautifully expressed. Thank you for your awesome thoughts and your wonderful visit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/21/2018 10:43:00 AM
Wow......you did a magnificent job melting all these lyrics together !! Great work !!
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Date: 4/21/2018 2:00:00 PM
Carrie, your cherished thoughts are held in deepest appreciation.. Thank you for your wonderful words and for your kindness. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 4/18/2018 4:07:00 AM
Amazing Pantoum Susan, great choice of band, so impressed how you managed to incorporate nineteen titles with perfect syllable count, brilliant. :))
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Date: 4/19/2018 2:02:00 PM
Roy, I cherish your uplifting and encouraging comments. I'm glad you enjoyed my pantoum..Thank you so much for the kindness of your visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 4/14/2018 8:39:00 PM
Love the Stones! Love this poem! Rock on. L x
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Date: 4/19/2018 1:57:00 PM
Thank you Leanne for bringing your awesomeness to my page. I treasure your thoughts always.. Warmest wishes and love to you! ~Su
Date: 4/13/2018 12:01:00 AM
Wow! What a challenge! And you have created a masterpiece in this poetry form. Well Done! Elaine
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Date: 4/14/2018 5:49:00 PM
I cherish your lovely comments Elaine. Thank you for your wonderful visit and for the kindness of your words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/11/2018 7:38:00 PM
You know I thought of doing this too...When I attempted to write a pantoum...You did a nice job...a real stones girl...I like it...I missed this poem somewhere down the line...Keep them coming...A big hug...
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Date: 4/14/2018 5:47:00 PM
Thank you Arturo for the delight of your wonderful visit. This has been a busy time for me so I haven't been around much lately.. Your comments brighten my day. Your lovely kindness is cherished, mon ami. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan
Date: 4/10/2018 7:56:00 PM
Nice tribute to the Rolling Stones here!! I like the way you used that Malaysian form! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 4/11/2018 9:43:00 AM
Thank you Matthew for your lovely comments and for your wonderful visit. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 4/10/2018 3:31:00 PM
An excellent Pantoum my NE friend!!! Exceptionally constructed ... you've without a doubt risen to this difficult challenge!! Best of luck in the contest! ~Judy
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Date: 4/11/2018 10:12:00 AM
Thank Judy for your always awesome and insightful comments. Your wonderful sentiments are encouraging and inspiring. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 4/9/2018 9:52:00 PM
I see a line of cars and they're all--- sympathizing with the devil, who has painted them black...Well-woven musical-poetic tapestry, with streaming demonic imagery snuffing out your the sweetness of your naturally angelic altruism. Oh, Susan, say it isn't---Ah! Great, great poem. No need to say 'good luck' in the contest here. This poem is pure skill. Luck doesn't really figure in...except in your stars: May THEY always be lucky ones, my dear friend. :)
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Date: 4/11/2018 10:10:00 AM
Thank you Gershon for your awesome comments. Your sentiments are a delight :) I cherish your presence here on my page my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 4/9/2018 5:36:00 PM
This is a creative masterpiece Susan! You have captured that dark spiral into the abyss with brilliant lines that are not only poignant but insightful. Excellent! : )
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/11/2018 9:55:00 AM
Connie, I cherish your insight and encouragement. Thank you for your wonderful comments and your time spent reading my poem. My appreciation for your support of my poetry knows no bounds. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan
Date: 4/9/2018 4:29:00 PM
Very nicely done Susan..Best wishes
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Date: 4/10/2018 7:35:00 PM
Thank you so much Joseph. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/9/2018 3:27:00 PM
Well done, Susan! You have done an excellent job, both in the musical choice and the Pantoum itself. Also impressed by your use of enjambment and ease of rhyme. Thank you for taking me back in time, on a pleasant musical trip:) ~ Warm regards, my friend. // paul
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Date: 4/11/2018 9:49:00 AM
Paul, I cherish our time spent on this pleasant musical trip back in time:) Thank you for your always insightful and uplifting remarks and I appreciate your kindness more than you can imagine. You continue to inspire me to reach higher, my friend. warmest wishes and hugs to you always. ~Susan
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