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*Note: I wrote this poem last November and somehow didn't post it then. So, the timing of submitting this poem is a little off. As of today, those wilted daffodils are gone replaced with new buds about to open. Spring on the horizon!

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Last fall we faithfully planted daffodil bulbs in our tree beds, waiting patiently for their arrival in early spring. Then in spring, the daffodils, golden stars and trumpets of the rising green, came as a silent choir for our eyes and souls. Now, the once vibrant petals have relaxed to a brown-infused pastel of what they once were. From seed to seed, the green new growth, the swelling bud, the floral bloom, and the dead flower are all part the story.
wilted daffodils the rhythmic, fleeting tick-tock of grandfather clock

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Date: 2/22/2024 3:21:00 PM
I'm surprised they let you take their picture in this state. :-) The one in our front tree beds are beautiful right now! Another fine Haibun from your golden pen, Sara. Thanks for sharing your gift of writing with us through your lovely poetry. Love, Bill
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/22/2024 4:24:00 PM
they complained but I ignored them. Yes, they are beautiful right now...anxious for the white ones to emerge and blossom. thank you for your visit, dear hubby.
Date: 2/20/2024 10:26:00 AM
Interesting thoughts- spring is on the way!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/20/2024 5:53:00 PM
thank you...yes, spring is arriving slowly..enjoy the season, hugs, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 3:38:00 PM
A wonderful haibun on the cycle of life from birth to death and the hope of a new future. I loved your accompanying haiku, Sara.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:50:00 PM
thank you, Jerry. Grateful for your visit and positive comments. Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 12:35:00 PM
Hey Sara.. I love how your poem captures the cyclical nature of life and the beauty found within the passing of time. It begins with the anticipation and hope of planting daffodil bulbs in the fall, symbolizing the promise of renewal and new beginnings. The imagery of "golden stars and trumpets" blooming in the early spring paints a vivid picture of nature's awakening and the joy it brings to the observer's eyes and soul.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 5:00:00 PM
thanks, Silent One, for your in depth read and analysis of my poem. I appreciate your positive comments and insights. Your words are soulful, and I'm grateful for them. Enjoy your evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 10:26:00 AM
Your poem, dear Sara, is truly brilliant and meaningful. It is a poignant reminder that time changes everything, as we sadly see the flowers wilted in your photo. However, your words also offer hope for the future, like the promise of spring. Your poem beautifully captures the emotions and significance of the image.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:59:00 PM
thanks for visiting, dearest Sotto. I agree, time changes everything all the time. I'm glad you saw that in my words as well as the hope of spring. Our daffodils are in full bloom giving us hope of an early spring arrival. Even the grass in our yard is greening out--way ahead of schedule.Wishing you a blessed evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 10:04:00 AM
I love the ticking sound of an antique clock -- sort of like a fond heartbeat to me. Very nice write!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:55:00 PM
I hadn't thought of that analogy, Joe, but I can see it. Thanks for your visit and comments. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 8:53:00 AM
Brilliant, a joy to read... can't wait, they're near opening here. I love spring! love love love... God bless you kind soul, love, Gina
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:55:00 PM
thanks for your visit and enthusiastic comments. I, too, love, love spring. Our daffodils are in full bloom, weeks ahead of schedule. Thanks for your blessings and kind words. Have a blessed evening, dearest Gina! hugs, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 8:37:00 AM
The flowers start to grow by the end of spring. They are radiant and last thru end of spring. Great imagery.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:53:00 PM
Ours are actually blooming right now--way ahead of schedule..you're right--they're radiant. Thanks for your positive comments and visit. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 7:10:00 AM
It brings to my mind that some flowers don't last as long as others. I wish daffodils would stick around. Cactus paradise comes to my rescue. Thanks for this wonderful, albeit sad, Halibun.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:53:00 PM
I agree with you. I always feel twinges of sadness when the annuals play themselves out. Daffodils are so pretty in our yard right now, adding brightness to our still wintry-looking yard. We lived in El Paso for 25 years...cacti abounded...no grass either...just rock yards...yet there was beauty in that simplicity...and no high water bills from watering our yard :-) enjoy your evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 5:20:00 AM
Time changes everything--so sad to see them wilted, but there is always the hope of spring. Your poem gives feelings and meaning to your photo, Sara.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 4:51:00 PM
thank you, Vijay, for your insightful words and positive comments. Appreciate your ongoing support. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 2/19/2024 5:10:00 AM
Dear Sara, Your words beautifully capture the cycle of life and the bittersweet beauty found in its transient nature. As I read your poem, I couldn't help but feel a sense of nostalgia and reverence for the passage of time. The sights of the once-vibrant daffodils, now wilted and fading, serve as a reminder of the impermanence of life and the inevitability of change. Yet, amidst this melancholy reflection, there is also a sense of grace and acceptance, as evidenced by the rhythmic ticking of the grandfather clock, marking the steady cadence of life's journey. Your ability to encapsulate such profound themes within the concise structure of a haiku is truly remarkable. Each word carries weight and significance, creating a scene that lingers in the mind long after the reading is done. – Blessings, Daniel
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/19/2024 5:14:00 AM
thanks, Daniel. You totally 'got' this poem. I'm grateful for your in depth reading and reflections. This was a joyful write for me; it just sort of came to me and flowed. So I'm grateful for its impact on you. Have a blessed day, Sara

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