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March 7, 2024

~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: An Old Form
Sponsor: Emile Pinet


 

Wild Roses On The Hill

An escapade sweet as a marshmallow day
   when tangerine dreams fed our evergreen stream.
      Our magnet attraction neath radiant ray 
   did butter the air where the breezes did teem
in whirly-wind-roses anointing the brae. 
   Their scent, my surrender, romantic the scheme, 
      exotic the fever and dance with a flame.
Ah, rapture of capture! The wooer’s end game.
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Callus Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 1:08 PM
Hi Susan, irrespective of the placing, I still have no qualms in awarding this poem a high score. It is a poem that speaks highly to me through content and technical ability. Well done my friend. ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul
Ashley Avatar
June 1, 2024 at 8:10 AM
Dear Paul, it thrills me to know that my poem spoke to you through content and technical ability. I was truly hoping that the romantic flesh of the poem would mesh with its structural bones seamlessly.. your uplifting comments let me know I achieved my goal. Thank you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Stanford Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 1:22 AM
What an enchanting poem, dear Susan! A great pleasure to read!
Ashley Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 12:40 PM
Dear Gregory, I'm enchanted by your wonderful comments. Your visit is a delight! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Crandall Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 8:44 PM
Beautiful, nicely flowing language Susan
Ashley Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 7:59 PM
Dear David, thank you for your gracious visit and kind words. Your comments are uplifting. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Kerr Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 9:34 AM
Susan, Heartiest congratulations on your selection. An exquisite lyrical piece that is the very essence of enchantment and deep romantic fervour. A joy and privilege to read as it has this magnetic phrasing so apt for its subject I really appreciate your generous reflections on Yet I Cling Warm regards Howard
Ashley Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 5:49 PM
Dear Howard, it's a thrill to receive your wonderful response to my poem. Your comments are vibrant and thoughtful! Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this poem with me and for allowing my verse to touch your imagination and poet's soul. Both your kindness and congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Fowler Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 10:06 AM
Beautiful Susan! The imagery is outstanding and the last line intriguing. Congratulations! :)
Ashley Avatar
April 15, 2024 at 5:49 PM
Dear Linda, please accept my apologies for my late reply. Life has been full to the brim lately with all things good. We are truly blessed. Your lovely comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated. So uplifting! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Pinet Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 11:20 AM
Congratulations Susan! Your beautiful poem earned you a distinguished place in my contest. This form is challenging and difficult to judge, but yours made my list. Very well done, my friend, Emile.
Ashley Avatar
April 15, 2024 at 5:47 PM
Dear Emile, please accept my apologies for my late reply.. life has been full to the brim lately with all things good. We are truly blessed. Thank you for the honor of my poem's placement in your esteemed contest. I am honored to share the podium with the talented poets/poetesses on your list. Your uplifting comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan
Lamoureux Avatar
March 26, 2024 at 11:01 AM
Having played the role of “Wooer” I can relate. It is a daunting but worthwhile endeavour. Especially when you find the right person to woo. I enjoyed your poem.
Ashley Avatar
March 29, 2024 at 5:54 PM
Dear Richard, your wonderful comments are a joy to receive. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagination of this poem with me. Your valued thoughts add lovely dimension to this piece. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Baker Avatar
March 15, 2024 at 10:41 PM
An excellent entry which should do well in the contest, Susan. The rhythm made your words flow like a running stream. A delightful read and a romance lover's dream. Your use of colors and all the senses made your poem a special one. A FAV for my list, my friend. Hugs, Bill
Ashley Avatar
March 17, 2024 at 5:00 PM
Dear Bill, I'm so glad you noticed the rhythm of my poem! It's also uplifting to know that you thought this was "a romance lover's dream"! Your comments are a thrill to receive and the distinction of your fav is a grand honor indeed! Thank you, my dear poetry friend, for your lovely words, your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Bowring Avatar
March 15, 2024 at 4:48 AM
Dearest Susan, my muse seems to have taken a vacation of late and needing inspiration, I knew exactly where to go! Straight to one of your poems dear one. Another stunning piece from you. What a breathtaking scene you have set for the admirer to relish - scrumptious like melting butter! Another new form to me. I love your romantic heart. Passion abounds amongst the roses with the reminiscence of an exciting encounter! I love the exquisite imagery here and you can practically smell the roses!
Ashley Avatar
March 17, 2024 at 4:54 PM
Dearest Christina, I know the sad feeling of my muse abandoning me too.. fortunately, she always returns (on her terms..) from her vacation, tanned, smiling and well-rested, though sometimes still lazy! lol! I adore your precious comments, my talented poetry friend. I'm also honored and humbled by your generosity and kindness. Your poetic soul sees into the heart of my poem with sensitivity and clarity. I really like the Rispetto form. I know you would just excel writing in this form too, Christina! I hope you will let your expressive golden pen give it a try. I'm so glad to know you loved my poem, that means the world to me. Thank you, my sweet friend, for the inspiration of your friendship and for your cherished comments. Ever your admirer.. warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Bowring Avatar
March 15, 2024 at 4:52 AM
You have captured so much here just like the heart being wooed on the hill. The roses are a perfect symbolism throughout the perfect lines. Loved it. Thank you my poetic heroine for sharing your immense gift. Hugs of admiration xx
Deschler Avatar
March 13, 2024 at 6:22 PM
A lovely, romantic write, Susan, and "sweet as a marshmallow day" ... I think such sweet, spring days are just around the corner :)
Ashley Avatar
March 14, 2024 at 7:59 AM
Dear Kelly, thank you for the delight of both your visit and uplifting comments. Indeed, as the crocus has bloomed in my front garden, spring days are near! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Horne Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 2:49 PM
ahhh, just gorgeous - as I've come to expect from you x
Ashley Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 6:22 PM
Dear Jack, my poet friend, it’s so nice to see you! Thank you for your beautiful comment. I’m touched and honored by your words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 12:31 PM
Wowie this is sure to make the winners list. So enchanting.
Ashley Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 6:25 PM
Dear Andrea, I am thrilled by your response to my poem. Thank you for your kindness and inspiring words. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Meadows Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:32 AM
A lovely poem. Well done.
Ashley Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 6:26 PM
Dear Jeanette, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Schatz Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 3:04 AM
"butter the air" is extraordinary! Who else could have ever thought of that?
Ashley Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 6:28 PM
Dear Robert, your comments are uplifting. Thank you for noticing that verse. I appreciate your visit and kindness, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Bell Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 1:20 AM
Wild roses combining into a wild day. Maybe why the rose is the flower of romance, and its exotic colours get you in the mood, and it seems you were in the mood.
Ashley Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 6:35 PM
Dear Paul, indeed, wild roses are the flowers of romance, passion and love. I enjoyed using their symbolism in my poem. Your gracious visit and comments are appreciated. Thank you my friend.. ~Susan
Empress Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 12:46 PM
How beautiful is the way you play around with words dear susan, any form, any theme, you nail them effortlessly in such poetic eloquence, leaving us readers in awe captivated and inspired. I love the internal rhymes, descriptive imagery, seamless flow of alliterations, great use of poetic techniques throughout while also sticking to syllables and rhymes! I love your use of adjectives and the way this is woven in such an artistic manner. Im sure this will do well in the contest too. Best wishes.
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:56 AM
Dear Empress, expressive poetess, the thoughtful potent beauty of your comments have the power to lift my spirits to beyond the cumulus! Thank you for such an inspiring response. Your words are encouraging and empowering and nurturing as they stir me to reach ever higher in my poetic journey. You and your extraordinary poetry are truly appreciated. Your golden light that shines upon my poem and my heart is embraced. Warmest wishes, my soulful poetry friend.. ~Susan
M  Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 12:31 PM
Susan how do you do it….such wonderful words and imagery! You are a very talented lady. A simply soft beautiful poem! Debx
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:46 AM
Dear Deb, I'm thrilled to receive your stunning feedback. Such an honor to have you visit my poem and leave your precious thoughts. They are treasured and I am humbled, dear poetess. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my work. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
One Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 10:40 AM
Hi Susan.. Your poem beautifully captures the essence of a romantic escapade, evoking sensations of sweetness and warmth akin to a "marshmallow day." The imagery of "tangerine dreams" feeding an "evergreen stream" paints a vivid picture of vibrant, dream-like landscapes. Metaphors, such as "magnet attraction" and "whirlwinds of roses," adds depth, highlighting the intensity of the encounter. The surrender to the scent of roses and the dance with flames symbolize a passionate and captivating experience.
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:43 AM
Dear Silent One, I relish your in-depth and inspiring feedback. Indeed, I wanted to portray the scene on the hill as a "passionate and captivating experience" recalled by the poem's female speaker and wanted the symbolism used to strongly suggest it. Your meaningful comments assure me that I achieved my goal. Thank you, dear poet and friend, for being always being a beacon in my poetry journey. Your golden friendship and gifted poetic pen are ever appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
De Beaulieu Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 10:37 AM
Hello Susan, so nice to see you. I hope all is well. I love this poem. it will be my fav. enjoy your day my friend. Hugs. /Darlene/
Ashley Avatar
March 9, 2024 at 8:35 AM
I really like our friendship too, Darlene :) xo
De Beaulieu Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 10:17 AM
Hello Susan, I am happy to see you. You are welcome. Y Warmest wishes & es I enjoyed this poem. Your welcome. I like our friendship. Warmest wishes & Hugs. /Darlene/
Ashley Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 8:12 AM
Dear Darlene, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your gracious visit and lovely comments. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. The honor of your fav is appreciated as is your poetry friendship. Warmest wishes and hugs my friend.. ~Susan
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