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When the sun goes in-   night will fall,
and up above stars will sprawl;
I lay my head upon my pillow,
and my curtains billow.
I can see the stars blinking and they seem to call,
yes, I hear my name being whispered . . .  
    so from my bed I crawl.

I am drifting up-   into the sky,
didn't know I could fly;
up above the night clouds I see a zillion stars,
and suddenly a star stirs.
Oh, these are the spirits of my beloved-  I sigh,
then, many are shooting here and there . . .
    and I want to cry.

My beloved are the stars-  in the night,
they zoom shining so bright;
then, I am swept up and we are dancing,
across the dark night sky prancing.
Waltzing and zooming with stars is quite a delight,
but soon darkness is starting to go . . . 
    and stars fade out of sight.

August 13, 2019

Poetry/Rhyme/When The Stars Go In
Rhyme Patterns aabbaXa ccddcXc eeffeXe
Copyright Protected, ID 19-1172-965-02
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.

Written for the contest, Shooting Stars
sponsor, Nayda Ivette Negron

Second Place

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Date: 8/14/2019 9:07:00 PM
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Date: 8/14/2019 7:52:00 PM
sometimes i look to the stars when missing a loved one, perhaps its the twinkle, like eyes that captures us...beautiful poem... love the images and thoughts in this one...good luck in the contest :) hugs
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Date: 8/14/2019 5:05:00 PM
very beautiful and interesting how you rhymed it. It flows very well, Dear Heart. I would be surprised not to see this with a win.
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Date: 8/14/2019 4:13:00 PM
yes, the word for this piece is enchanting... stars appear as loved ones gone...winnng wishes, constance
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Date: 8/13/2019 10:52:00 PM
Cool effect my friend.
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Dear Heart- Wiishkobe Ode
Date: 8/14/2019 12:00:00 AM
David, thank you so much for visiting my poem and for the compliment !