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When the sun goes in- night will fall, and up above stars will sprawl; I lay my head upon my pillow, and my curtains billow. I can see the stars blinking and they seem to call, yes, I hear my name being whispered . . . so from my bed I crawl. I am drifting up- into the sky, didn't know I could fly; up above the night clouds I see a zillion stars, and suddenly a star stirs. Oh, these are the spirits of my beloved- I sigh, then, many are shooting here and there . . . and I want to cry. My beloved are the stars- in the night, they zoom shining so bright; then, I am swept up and we are dancing, across the dark night sky prancing. Waltzing and zooming with stars is quite a delight, but soon darkness is starting to go . . . and stars fade out of sight. ____________________________ August 13, 2019 Poetry/Rhyme/When The Stars Go In Rhyme Patterns aabbaXa ccddcXc eeffeXe Copyright Protected, ID 19-1172-965-02 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. Rhyme Written for the contest, Shooting Stars sponsor, Nayda Ivette Negron Second Place

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Date: 8/14/2019 9:07:00 PM
Wonderful
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Date: 8/14/2019 7:52:00 PM
sometimes i look to the stars when missing a loved one, perhaps its the twinkle, like eyes that captures us...beautiful poem... love the images and thoughts in this one...good luck in the contest :) hugs
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Date: 8/14/2019 5:05:00 PM
very beautiful and interesting how you rhymed it. It flows very well, Dear Heart. I would be surprised not to see this with a win.
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Date: 8/14/2019 4:13:00 PM
yes, the word for this piece is enchanting... stars appear as loved ones gone...winnng wishes, constance
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Date: 8/13/2019 10:52:00 PM
Cool effect my friend.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 12:00:00 AM
David, thank you so much for visiting my poem and for the compliment !

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