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When Love Turns To Hate

WHEN LOVE TURNS TO HATE

They were once in love, but love’s turned to hate,
and Steve no longer resides at their house.
His wife had an affair with his best mate,
who then lived with Steve’s son and his ex-spouse.
 
Their divorce was bitter, her lawyers won;
she got the house, the car and their small child.
Steve’s granted access to see their young son
and hugs him tightly when they’re reconciled.
 
Steve feels depressed when he has to defer
for she reneges on his visiting rights.
When he next has his son, he will show her
by putting an end to their horrid fights
 
Steve jumped from the cliff tops at Beachy Head,
his son clasped in his arms, both were found dead.

*reneges counted as 2 syllables not 3 as per how many syllables

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Boddie Avatar
July 28, 2018 at 1:53 PM
steve was a fool....his actions were not close to cool....why would he kill self and son....that makes me think justice was done....when he couldnt see the child....because if he couldnt then this day his son might still smile....interesting write jan....hmmmm....;)
Allison Avatar
July 28, 2018 at 1:57 PM
Thanks Eric, as I say I never know where my muse will take me!:-) hugs Jan xx
Canerdy Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 8:15 PM
Superbly written, Jan--and so sad. Fiction--right?! Janice
Allison Avatar
July 27, 2018 at 12:36 PM
I read many sad stories in magazines so I guess it is based on fact:-( hugs jan xx
Gondolf Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 8:07 AM
Nicely written sonnet, Jan, my ending is similar except I jump off a mountain top and not a cliff. Best of luck. John
Allison Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 9:41 AM
I'll drop by John - I tried to give a dramatic ending to the poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Lindley Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 5:43 AM
A superbly crafted sonnet my dear friend, tho' the tragedy of such things makes us contemplate how one can murder a child- a child that they so love.. A fav-- a fantastic creation!
Allison Avatar
July 26, 2018 at 9:40 AM
Thanks Robert I shy away from writing this form but thought I would give it a go for the contest - i leave sonnet writing to you and others who excel at the form!:-) hugs jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 5:29 PM
A tragedy of the highest Jan. Hard to wrap my head around such drastic measures, related wonderfully in your sonnet Jan. ; )
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 5:33 PM
Thanks Connie, I find it hard to write poems like this, much prefer humour:-) hugs Jan xx
Bauer Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 5:00 PM
so sad, jan, but so beautifully told in your poem! best of luck in the contest...
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 5:20 PM
Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:37 PM
A tragic disaster, but not so for your sonnet form and word choices. Well done, Jan.
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 4:09 PM
Thanks so much Lin, I'm not sure if it will place as spaces in the contest are limited:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:35 PM
Not at all what I've come to expect from you Jan, it speaks to your talent. Best wishes in the contest...
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 4:08 PM
Thanks Charlie! I don't write many sonnets and struggle with iambic pentameter as I was so put down by one guy in my early days at soup, I have learned so so much from some wonderful people here. Got to say I much prefer humour to darkness but I will turn my hand to different forms now:-) hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 2:29 PM
- A real tragedy, Jan - Unfortunately, many conditions end in a tragedy ... from love to hate - Great described and will give you a win in the contest, good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Andresen Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:10 PM
I hope you are lucky :)
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:03 PM
Thanks Anne Lise, its a premiere contest so i will be lucky if it gets on the list:-) hugs Jan xx
Stebbings Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 2:20 PM
Very poignant, Jan. People do these things in desperation, it is very sad. Good luck in the contest. // Barry.
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:02 PM
Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 2:13 PM
Well written sonnet Jan with the classic tragic ending, sadly I've heard of this happening in real life. If I cant have them nobody can . Good luck. Tom
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 3:02 PM
I keep reading of stories of tragedies like this Tom:-( hugs jan xx
Faulkner Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 1:24 PM
This is so poignant and tragic, brought tears to my eyes-
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 1:25 PM
Thanks Michelle, I much prefer to write humour but the contests do get us to go our of our comfort zones:-) hugs jan xx
Turner Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 12:44 PM
Jan, unfortunately it happens all too often. If I can't have them, neither can you. Very sad. Very well written!
Allison Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 12:47 PM
I read such stories in magazines DT, it is tragic on so many levels:-( I will have to write a fun poem after this one!!:-) hugs Jan xx
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