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When Love Turns To Hate

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WHEN LOVE TURNS TO HATE

They were once in love, but love’s turned to hate,
and Steve no longer resides at their house.
His wife had an affair with his best mate,
who then lived with Steve’s son and his ex-spouse.
 
Their divorce was bitter, her lawyers won;
she got the house, the car and their small child.
Steve’s granted access to see their young son
and hugs him tightly when they’re reconciled.
 
Steve feels depressed when he has to defer
for she reneges on his visiting rights.
When he next has his son, he will show her
by putting an end to their horrid fights
 
Steve jumped from the cliff tops at Beachy Head,
his son clasped in his arms, both were found dead.

*reneges counted as 2 syllables not 3 as per how many syllables

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Eric Boddie

Date: 7/28/2018 1:53:00 PM

steve was a fool....his actions were not close to cool....why would he kill self and son....that makes me think justice was done....when he couldnt see the child....because if he couldnt then this day his son might still smile....interesting write jan....hmmmm....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2018 1:57:00 PM

Thanks Eric, as I say I never know where my muse will take me!:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/26/2018 8:15:00 PM

Superbly written, Jan--and so sad. Fiction--right?! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2018 12:36:00 PM

I read many sad stories in magazines so I guess it is based on fact:-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 7/26/2018 8:07:00 AM

Nicely written sonnet, Jan, my ending is similar except I jump off a mountain top and not a cliff. Best of luck. John

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2018 9:41:00 AM

I'll drop by John - I tried to give a dramatic ending to the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/26/2018 5:43:00 AM

A superbly crafted sonnet my dear friend, tho' the tragedy of such things makes us contemplate how one can murder a child- a child that they so love.. A fav-- a fantastic creation!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2018 9:40:00 AM

Thanks Robert I shy away from writing this form but thought I would give it a go for the contest - i leave sonnet writing to you and others who excel at the form!:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/24/2018 5:29:00 PM

A tragedy of the highest Jan. Hard to wrap my head around such drastic measures, related wonderfully in your sonnet Jan. ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 5:33:00 PM

Thanks Connie, I find it hard to write poems like this, much prefer humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/24/2018 5:00:00 PM

so sad, jan, but so beautifully told in your poem! best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 5:20:00 PM

Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 7/24/2018 3:37:00 PM

A tragic disaster, but not so for your sonnet form and word choices. Well done, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Lin, I'm not sure if it will place as spaces in the contest are limited:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/24/2018 3:35:00 PM

Not at all what I've come to expect from you Jan, it speaks to your talent. Best wishes in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 4:08:00 PM

Thanks Charlie! I don't write many sonnets and struggle with iambic pentameter as I was so put down by one guy in my early days at soup, I have learned so so much from some wonderful people here. Got to say I much prefer humour to darkness but I will turn my hand to different forms now:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/24/2018 2:29:00 PM

- A real tragedy, Jan - Unfortunately, many conditions end in a tragedy ... from love to hate - Great described and will give you a win in the contest, good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/24/2018 3:10:00 PM

I hope you are lucky :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 3:03:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise, its a premiere contest so i will be lucky if it gets on the list:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 7/24/2018 2:20:00 PM

Very poignant, Jan. People do these things in desperation, it is very sad. Good luck in the contest. // Barry.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 3:02:00 PM

Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/24/2018 2:13:00 PM

Well written sonnet Jan with the classic tragic ending, sadly I've heard of this happening in real life. If I cant have them nobody can . Good luck. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 3:02:00 PM

I keep reading of stories of tragedies like this Tom:-( hugs jan xx