Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

When I Was Young

When I was young, I was so very sweet.
I never tattle-taled or smarted off.
I shared with others when I got a treat,
and at my sisters I would never scoff.

I loved to help my mother, so I did
the many chores she gave me happily.
I was so neat that always I got rid
of junk I knew Mom wouldn't want to see.

I loved to go to church, and Bible school
was something I enjoyed every Sunday.
I saved my money and did not amass
collections, for I gave my things away!

But seriously, I won't lie to you.
Not very much of this is even true!


Written Jan. 25, 2017 for the "But Seriously" Contest of John Lawless

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Richard Evans October 6, 2017 at 8:20 PM I like the conversational tone of this poem. It's raw in its presentation and that's a good thing.

Sunita U.D Palawon February 8, 2017 at 11:22 PM I like the sense of humor with which you bring at the end. While reading the perfect girl story I was thinking ..But seriously! As always marvelous. Congrats on your win! :)

John Lawless February 7, 2017 at 9:47 PM Andrea....I love it when I am completely surprised when I find out who wrote the poem....love the humor and the twist in this sonnet. Thanks for entering the contest

Ruth Wrights February 7, 2017 at 8:42 PM so cute.. i love the couplet..

Sara Chansarkar February 7, 2017 at 9:17 AM Haha, the last couplet was the gotcha:) Loved it Andrea!

Phillip Garcia February 7, 2017 at 8:56 AM Haha! I bet ALL of it's true. You're too sweet to have ever been bad, even as a kid. Awesome work. Congrats!

James Inman February 5, 2017 at 3:01 AM Loved it!

Pashang Salehi February 4, 2017 at 1:33 PM Liar, Liar pants on fire....

Louis Borgo January 28, 2017 at 1:16 PM This sound like something a mother or grandparent would hand down to generation after generation, Louis.

Afzal Nusker January 27, 2017 at 10:07 PM Now this is what you call a great humour. Loved it. A 7

Jennifer Walker January 27, 2017 at 8:25 AM Spoof is right, that is about the helping Mom with the chores, I remember it much differently. The other things though, pretty much true, Jennifer Walker January 27, 2017 at 8:10 PM Sis I meant that you were everything that you said in the poem except the helping clean with Mom. That's the only spoof I could see. You were the kindest sister ever, you never put me down or made me feel anything but great. You were and are a great sis. Andrea Dietrich January 27, 2017 at 7:41 PM I hope you mean "true" in the sense that I lied about them. But you know what? I don't really recall ever scoffing at you or the other sisters! I actually was a really good sister except for a little bit of tattletaling, wasn't I after all!!

Connie Marcum Wong January 27, 2017 at 5:15 AM I could tell right away this was a spoof Andrea...one can dream! Real cute, : )

Joe Maverick January 26, 2017 at 4:15 PM Well I'm sure your intentions were good Andrea, I did think the 1st lines were looking hard to live up to though..' Well done indeed.

Joseph May January 26, 2017 at 3:21 PM You're still sweet, and that's our treat!...Nice sonnet Andrea

Bruce Adams January 26, 2017 at 3:01 PM Funny, I was in shock all the way until the end ! Great poem Andrea

Barry Stebbings January 26, 2017 at 8:55 AM Ha, ha. I wondered where you were going with that, Andrea. Love the ending. Good luck in the contest. // Barry.

Abdullah Alhemaidy January 26, 2017 at 4:57 AM is it not ripe green!? a human heart what I mean older gets and hope

Charlie Smith January 25, 2017 at 8:45 PM I was seriously considering your need for an intervention...glad you cleared that up, now your back to earth, whewww!

Frederic Parker January 25, 2017 at 6:44 PM Happy for the ending you were starting to spook me as you sounded like the perfect child.Glad to find you were just a regular kid

White Wolf January 25, 2017 at 5:22 PM Haha, did not see that coming, great ending couplet, Andrea, to a great sonnet. Good luck /|\

Daniel Turner January 25, 2017 at 5:07 PM I've been had, by the Do-Dad. Lol Very funny. I'll bet all of it's true. You just don't seem the type to even know what bad means:)

Tim Smith January 25, 2017 at 5:05 PM I had the feeling it wasn't true when I read the first line.

Kim Rodrigues January 25, 2017 at 4:49 PM LOL!! You had me going, girl! Good one...the poem that is!

Ilene Bauer January 25, 2017 at 4:33 PM the beginning reminded me of the poem i wrote yesterday, but you have a charming and humorous spin on the topic and a delightful ending. best of luck in the contest, andrea!