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When I Was Young

When I was young, I was so very sweet. I never tattle-taled or smarted off. I shared with others when I got a treat, and at my sisters I would never scoff. I loved to help my mother, so I did the many chores she gave me happily. I was so neat that always I got rid of junk I knew Mom wouldn't want to see. I loved to go to church, and Bible school was something I enjoyed every Sunday. I saved my money and did not amass collections, for I gave my things away! But seriously, I won't lie to you. Not very much of this is even true! Written Jan. 25, 2017 for the "But Seriously" Contest of John Lawless

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Ricky Muse

Date: 10/6/2017 8:20:00 PM

I like the conversational tone of this poem. It's raw in its presentation and that's a good thing.

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 2/8/2017 11:22:00 PM

I like the sense of humor with which you bring at the end. While reading the perfect girl story I was thinking ..But seriously! As always marvelous. Congrats on your win! :)

John Lawless

Date: 2/7/2017 9:47:00 PM

Andrea....I love it when I am completely surprised when I find out who wrote the poem....love the humor and the twist in this sonnet. Thanks for entering the contest

Ruth Wrights

Date: 2/7/2017 8:42:00 PM

so cute.. i love the couplet..

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 2/7/2017 9:17:00 AM

Haha, the last couplet was the gotcha:) Loved it Andrea!

Phillip Garcia

Date: 2/7/2017 8:56:00 AM

Haha! I bet ALL of it's true. You're too sweet to have ever been bad, even as a kid. Awesome work. Congrats!

James Inman

Date: 2/5/2017 3:01:00 AM

Loved it!

Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/4/2017 1:33:00 PM

Liar, Liar pants on fire....

Louis Borgo

Date: 1/28/2017 1:16:00 PM

This sound like something a mother or grandparent would hand down to generation after generation, Louis.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/27/2017 10:07:00 PM

Now this is what you call a great humour. Loved it. A 7

Jennifer Walker

Date: 1/27/2017 8:25:00 AM

Spoof is right, that is about the helping Mom with the chores, I remember it much differently. The other things though, pretty much true,

Jennifer Walker
Date: 1/27/2017 8:10:00 PM

Sis I meant that you were everything that you said in the poem except the helping clean with Mom. That's the only spoof I could see. You were the kindest sister ever, you never put me down or made me feel anything but great. You were and are a great sis.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/27/2017 7:41:00 PM

I hope you mean "true" in the sense that I lied about them. But you know what? I don't really recall ever scoffing at you or the other sisters! I actually was a really good sister except for a little bit of tattletaling, wasn't I after all!!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/27/2017 5:15:00 AM

I could tell right away this was a spoof Andrea...one can dream! Real cute, : )

Joe Maverick

Date: 1/26/2017 4:15:00 PM

Well I'm sure your intentions were good Andrea, I did think the 1st lines were looking hard to live up to though..' Well done indeed.

Joseph May

Date: 1/26/2017 3:21:00 PM

You're still sweet, and that's our treat!...Nice sonnet Andrea

Bruce Adams

Date: 1/26/2017 3:01:00 PM

Funny, I was in shock all the way until the end ! Great poem Andrea

Barry Stebbings

Date: 1/26/2017 8:55:00 AM

Ha, ha. I wondered where you were going with that, Andrea. Love the ending. Good luck in the contest. // Barry.

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 1/26/2017 4:57:00 AM

is it not ripe green!? a human heart what I mean older gets and hope

Charlie Smith

Date: 1/25/2017 8:45:00 PM

I was seriously considering your need for an intervention...glad you cleared that up, now your back to earth, whewww!

Frederic Parker

Date: 1/25/2017 6:44:00 PM

Happy for the ending you were starting to spook me as you sounded like the perfect child.Glad to find you were just a regular kid

White Wolf

Date: 1/25/2017 5:22:00 PM

Haha, did not see that coming, great ending couplet, Andrea, to a great sonnet. Good luck /|\

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/25/2017 5:07:00 PM

I've been had, by the Do-Dad. Lol Very funny. I'll bet all of it's true. You just don't seem the type to even know what bad means:)

Tim Smith

Date: 1/25/2017 5:05:00 PM

I had the feeling it wasn't true when I read the first line.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/25/2017 4:49:00 PM

LOL!! You had me going, girl! Good one...the poem that is!

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/25/2017 4:33:00 PM

the beginning reminded me of the poem i wrote yesterday, but you have a charming and humorous spin on the topic and a delightful ending. best of luck in the contest, andrea!